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Comment from w.j.debi
You build the tension and frustration between the two characters in a believable string of texts. Will they break up or stay together?
And then we find out--Oh, dear, the wrong recipient!
You made me laugh. Great job.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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You build the tension and frustration between the two characters in a believable string of texts. Will they break up or stay together?
And then we find out--Oh, dear, the wrong recipient!
You made me laugh. Great job.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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And I thank you once again for your awesome review and fun comments. I think that is why I love to do my fun endings on some poems; the reviews are so much fun! Thank you sweet friend for the smile you gave me in return!
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
I like the way you carefully build up the detailed image of the relationship creating this sense of uncertainty and probable tragedy! The twist at the end really completely demolishes the reader's expectations!
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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I like the way you carefully build up the detailed image of the relationship creating this sense of uncertainty and probable tragedy! The twist at the end really completely demolishes the reader's expectations!
Comment Written 07-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Hi Sarah, , And I thank you once again for your awesome review and fun comments. I think that is why I love to do my fun endings on some poems; the reviews are so much fun! Thank you sweet friend for the smile you gave me in return!
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Welcome!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation, Debi.
-You wrote a good surprise sonnet.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-You set the scene very well in verse one
and follow that with some doubts about
the relationship and how he feels.
-A good third verse that shows how
you are concerned and want to
know if this has been a mistake.
-A good closing couplet with a twist.
-Well done.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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-Nice artwork and presentation, Debi.
-You wrote a good surprise sonnet.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-You set the scene very well in verse one
and follow that with some doubts about
the relationship and how he feels.
-A good third verse that shows how
you are concerned and want to
know if this has been a mistake.
-A good closing couplet with a twist.
-Well done.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Hi Pam, I thank you once again for your awesome review and fun comments. I think that is why I love to do my fun endings on some poems; the reviews are so much fun! Thank you sweet friend for the smile you gave me in return!
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You are very welcome, Debi, and I appreciate your reply. I am glad you had a smile in return😊😊
Comment from Ginda Simpson
I think this is so funny. I'll let my age show here, but where did old-fashion phone calls go? Not to mention the complete disappearance of love letters. Your little poem reminds us that by communicating love the old-fashioned way, at least you were assured of your recipient, number 1, and number 2, there was a little more assurance of privacy.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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I think this is so funny. I'll let my age show here, but where did old-fashion phone calls go? Not to mention the complete disappearance of love letters. Your little poem reminds us that by communicating love the old-fashioned way, at least you were assured of your recipient, number 1, and number 2, there was a little more assurance of privacy.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Ginda, I thank you once again for your awesome review and fun comments. I think that is why I love to do my fun endings on some poems; the reviews are so much fun! Thank you sweet friend for the smile you gave me in return!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Lol, I wonder how many times that actually happens. That was a fun one, Debi, you had be going there. But that doesn't solve the riddle of where the real one is while she is standing in the rain, drenched to the skin by now!!!! Lol. Well done, my friend. I loved it. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Lol, I wonder how many times that actually happens. That was a fun one, Debi, you had be going there. But that doesn't solve the riddle of where the real one is while she is standing in the rain, drenched to the skin by now!!!! Lol. Well done, my friend. I loved it. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 07-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Actually Sandra, I think that she should keep the one she is texting with. He seems like a pretty nice guy. Lol.... You are so much fun to fool, because you always appreciate the humor so much and I appreciate your fun and kind words my lovely lovely friend.
Comment from GWHARGIS
Well, that could be embarrassing. Lol. I thought this was going to be a Heartbreakers poem and you, Miss Debi, threw me a curve. Great poem. Gretchen
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Well, that could be embarrassing. Lol. I thought this was going to be a Heartbreakers poem and you, Miss Debi, threw me a curve. Great poem. Gretchen
Comment Written 07-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Oh Gretchen, you crack me up too. I love how you say things. Yes I did throw you a curve, but so happy you caught it. Thanks for once again the sweetest review ever... thanks for everything my lovely friend.
Comment from karenina
Ya know? Shakespeare didn't have all these electronic devices to mess him up! I laughed at this one, Debi ~ because I am one of the last humans on earth not to own a cell phone (gasp)---and yet when I borrow one I often manage to text the wrong person...or somehow manage to "group" text a few folks...so I have to mind what I'm saying!
Love in the modern age... "Romeo" (she texted) "Where art though?"
Juliet gets a text back: "Romeo? Sorry, this is Harold...wonr digits!"
(Hmmm. The bard would have had a field day with this!)
Funny stuff...
I loved your final envoi!
Karenina
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Ya know? Shakespeare didn't have all these electronic devices to mess him up! I laughed at this one, Debi ~ because I am one of the last humans on earth not to own a cell phone (gasp)---and yet when I borrow one I often manage to text the wrong person...or somehow manage to "group" text a few folks...so I have to mind what I'm saying!
Love in the modern age... "Romeo" (she texted) "Where art though?"
Juliet gets a text back: "Romeo? Sorry, this is Harold...wonr digits!"
(Hmmm. The bard would have had a field day with this!)
Funny stuff...
I loved your final envoi!
Karenina
Comment Written 07-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Hahahahaha!! You like that huh?? It just so happens that I have some very good friends, a couple very special ones that are kind enough to see a few screw ups and try to help me. A friend who takes the time out of their busy life to do that is the most special kind that anyone could ever have.
I absolutely loved your Romeo and Juliet version!!
As I do you, my Lady!
Thank you for your Eloquently Marvelous review and words for my sonnet, my dear friend. And thank you for being one of those friends. You are a precious gem and I appreciate you more than I can ever say!!
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It is lovely to see you soaring on new poetic thermals, Debi.
You are fiercely fearless and it becomes you!
Comment from Sanku
That was briliant ! you merrily led us through an emotional appeal and then played this trick.
That was a lovely read, Debi Thank you for sharing. Iliked the last couplet's rhyme scheme Jim and whim!
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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That was briliant ! you merrily led us through an emotional appeal and then played this trick.
That was a lovely read, Debi Thank you for sharing. Iliked the last couplet's rhyme scheme Jim and whim!
Comment Written 07-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Hi Santha, I thank you once again for your awesome review and fun comments. I think that is why I love to do my fun endings on some poems; the reviews are so much fun! Thank you sweet friend for the smile you gave me in return!
Comment from l.raven
HI Debi, LOL my sweet friend....
sounds like something I would have done...
But I would have kept texting to the guy
on the other end...asking him how my situation
would make him feel...if he thought I made a
big mistake...
I love you poem sweet girl...made me laugh...
very well written...picture perfect...love you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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HI Debi, LOL my sweet friend....
sounds like something I would have done...
But I would have kept texting to the guy
on the other end...asking him how my situation
would make him feel...if he thought I made a
big mistake...
I love you poem sweet girl...made me laugh...
very well written...picture perfect...love you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Haha! You crack me up Linda, somehow the woman that I picture you ro be would do just that. Thank you for fun right before going to bed ! And for the sweet comments and lovely six stars . You are the best my dear friend and I just love
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your so welcome Debi...
can't hurt to get a third opinion...
or maybe if I stayed on there long
enough...maybe even a date...love you...Linda xxoo 🤗💖🙏🌼
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Lol, We think a lot alike!
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I know I'm not getting any younger...
sometimes a person just has to jump
at any opportunity in sight...😊
Comment from Carol Clark2
Oops, what an embarrassing mistake that would be! I like the way the character goes through so many emotions, wondering if the relationship is over, and then wondering if she's made a mistake. Good foreshadowing that she has made a different error. Nice rhymes & good flow. Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Oops, what an embarrassing mistake that would be! I like the way the character goes through so many emotions, wondering if the relationship is over, and then wondering if she's made a mistake. Good foreshadowing that she has made a different error. Nice rhymes & good flow. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Oh Carol, I thank you so much for your very sweet review and words and for your gracious six stars. You are the best my lovely friend! I appreciate you so much!
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My pleasure! Have a wonderful day.
