Narwee and Jannali
Initiation From boy to man32 total reviews
Comment from John Ciarmello
Buongiorno, K,
I loved this Piece! I want to take a second to say congrats on your writing recognition. It is well deserved and quite an accomplishment. I'm not sure where the contest stands but I wish you much success with this contest as well. Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Buongiorno, K,
I loved this Piece! I want to take a second to say congrats on your writing recognition. It is well deserved and quite an accomplishment. I'm not sure where the contest stands but I wish you much success with this contest as well. Best, JohnC
Comment Written 16-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Buona Serre John. Glad you loved it. I will write some more shortly. Blessings, K.
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello, K!
I thoroughly enjoyed and appreciated your poetic offering.
Fascinated by the rites of manhood by the tribal aborigines...as well as your description of other rites as well.
Rhymes flow well = not forced.
Best wishes in the rhyming contest.
Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2023
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Hello, K!
I thoroughly enjoyed and appreciated your poetic offering.
Fascinated by the rites of manhood by the tribal aborigines...as well as your description of other rites as well.
Rhymes flow well = not forced.
Best wishes in the rhyming contest.
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 16-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2023
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Hello Grandma, Many thanks for reading and glad you enjoyed. K xx
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My pleasure!
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Comment from Boogienights
I enjoyed the imagery in this poem and the story. I actually learned something about another culture, it was fascinating to read. This is a great entry to the contest, best of luck.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2023
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I enjoyed the imagery in this poem and the story. I actually learned something about another culture, it was fascinating to read. This is a great entry to the contest, best of luck.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2023
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Hello new friend, Many thanks for reading, glad you enjoyed. K xx
Comment from PoemsOfDD
This is a good entry for the rhyming poem contest. I always enjoy that you write about the bush and its people. They are honoured by your tributes. I like how this story talks of the traditions held when a boy becomes man with ceremony and paint. A well written story on growth, marriage and love.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2023
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This is a good entry for the rhyming poem contest. I always enjoy that you write about the bush and its people. They are honoured by your tributes. I like how this story talks of the traditions held when a boy becomes man with ceremony and paint. A well written story on growth, marriage and love.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2023
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Hello DD, So pleased you enjoyed, more to come! K xx
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Yay :-)
And congratulations again for your fine recognition in writing award 🥇 xxx
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All donations gratefully accepted for my new crown! :-)
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👑 suits you 🤩
Comment from w.j.debi
I enjoy reading about other cultures. We can learn so much from them. This happy couple move from childhood to adulthood in ceremony and in love. Great story.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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I enjoy reading about other cultures. We can learn so much from them. This happy couple move from childhood to adulthood in ceremony and in love. Great story.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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Hello friend, Many thanks for reading about our culture - more to come. K xx
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent poem entry for the Rhyming Poetry Contest. Your poem reminded me of I a fanstory Australian writer, named Walu feral. He wrote about his life and culture.
The rhymes and meter didn't seem forced and it flows well.
the structure makes sense, it draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
I Would recommend it.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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Excellent poem entry for the Rhyming Poetry Contest. Your poem reminded me of I a fanstory Australian writer, named Walu feral. He wrote about his life and culture.
The rhymes and meter didn't seem forced and it flows well.
the structure makes sense, it draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
I Would recommend it.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 15-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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I think poetry comes from the heart, thus the healing. The head tends to force poetry. Glad you enjoyed. I remember Walu, he was found in a cave and raised by a tribe. His work was excellent. K xx
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Yes, he lives in the Philippines with wife and kids. He is happy.
Comment from mermaids
This is a lovely tale of a boy becoming a man and then getting married. Your vivid use of words makes the reader feel like she is there during this ceremony on manhood. Love the names Narwee and Jannali, sun and moon are a great complement to each other.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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This is a lovely tale of a boy becoming a man and then getting married. Your vivid use of words makes the reader feel like she is there during this ceremony on manhood. Love the names Narwee and Jannali, sun and moon are a great complement to each other.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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Hello Wombat, Many thanks for reading, glad you enjoyed. Blessings, K xx
Comment from nomi338
The opportunity to learn of the cultural practices others, is to grow as an individual. To do so without feeling disdain for practices that are vastly different from your own, is to grow as one spiritually and culturally advanced. Only and unlearned fool considers himself superior to another human being, all the while considering himself a child of the God that created all men. What I just learned updated my knowledge base and made me feel even closer to people I had previously known very little about.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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The opportunity to learn of the cultural practices others, is to grow as an individual. To do so without feeling disdain for practices that are vastly different from your own, is to grow as one spiritually and culturally advanced. Only and unlearned fool considers himself superior to another human being, all the while considering himself a child of the God that created all men. What I just learned updated my knowledge base and made me feel even closer to people I had previously known very little about.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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It pleases me that you have learnt something about the culture of my people. Thank you for reading. K xx
Comment from jacquelyn popp
Good poem. This is well written. Nicely done. Your rhyming pattern was nicely done and the poem flowed smoothly. Than you for sharing. The artwork went well with your poem.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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Good poem. This is well written. Nicely done. Your rhyming pattern was nicely done and the poem flowed smoothly. Than you for sharing. The artwork went well with your poem.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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Hi Jacquelyn, Many thanks for reading, glad you enjoyed. Learning about the First Nation is good for those who don't know us. K xx
Comment from Sarah Tummey
Such a well-written, informative poem. The line about the gum tree (good choice) made me think it would be Australian and about Aborigines, but they have a boy-to-man initiation ceremony in Maori culture too and I don't know much about that, so I wasn't 100% sure until I read your notes which it referred to.
It's interesting - different cultures and their customs. Thanks for educating me.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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Such a well-written, informative poem. The line about the gum tree (good choice) made me think it would be Australian and about Aborigines, but they have a boy-to-man initiation ceremony in Maori culture too and I don't know much about that, so I wasn't 100% sure until I read your notes which it referred to.
It's interesting - different cultures and their customs. Thanks for educating me.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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If you are interested in our culture, I have sixteen chapters written under books. I am going to write more poems about us. K xx
