Accident prone
She was definitely ...15 total reviews
Comment from Father Flaps
Oh my! Wendy, do the police know about this? I guess her loving husband got tired of spending money for rising insurance cost, eh? Blackouts to blame was the decision. Only God knows for sure. He can get away with the murder ... for now. But someday, he'll pay the price!
Oh, your author notes hint that he may have tampered with the brakes, perhaps? He was trying to kill her? I wonder why?
I counted 74 words in your story. Does that matter? Or am I wrong?
It's a great story! Hitchcock-style. I enjoyed it. A killer is at large.
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
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Oh my! Wendy, do the police know about this? I guess her loving husband got tired of spending money for rising insurance cost, eh? Blackouts to blame was the decision. Only God knows for sure. He can get away with the murder ... for now. But someday, he'll pay the price!
Oh, your author notes hint that he may have tampered with the brakes, perhaps? He was trying to kill her? I wonder why?
I counted 74 words in your story. Does that matter? Or am I wrong?
It's a great story! Hitchcock-style. I enjoyed it. A killer is at large.
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 14-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
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My goodness, I posted that one on February12! Fortunately it is only fiction. A friend did fall down the stairs when she had a dizzy spell but that is the only true bit. Yes, in the story he tampered with the brakes! (The FS counter includes ( - )a dash as a word, so that?s the explanation. I am delighted you found this story (how?) and thank you for reviewing despite it being with only two cents.
Wendy
Comment from patcelaw
You have just out done yourself I believe. This is a fantastic story that you've written and 75 words and the flash at the end was unbelievable. You are a good and creative writer. Good luck in the contest. Patricia.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2023
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You have just out done yourself I believe. This is a fantastic story that you've written and 75 words and the flash at the end was unbelievable. You are a good and creative writer. Good luck in the contest. Patricia.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much Patricia! Very encouraging words! (This one came a tie for third.)
Comment from Sherry SG
Oh this is such a dark story! It is well narrated with the punch delivered successfully. You've packed in a lot within 75 words. You really know how to tell a story.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2023
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Oh this is such a dark story! It is well narrated with the punch delivered successfully. You've packed in a lot within 75 words. You really know how to tell a story.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much for your super review. Greatly appreciated!
Wendy
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Goodness, this story is a little scary. Driving and blackouts that often? Was the husband involved? Perhaps you have another dateline story going; some of them can be as eerie as your story.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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Goodness, this story is a little scary. Driving and blackouts that often? Was the husband involved? Perhaps you have another dateline story going; some of them can be as eerie as your story.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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Thanks so much for your super review. Soneonecsuggestedvi should write some crime fiction, so I'm starting off small! Lol.
Wendy
Comment from Bill Schott
This seventy-five-word story, Accident Prone, has the required word count and requires a couple beats after it's done to realize the husband was guilty of attempted murder twice and a finally skinned the cat.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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This seventy-five-word story, Accident Prone, has the required word count and requires a couple beats after it's done to realize the husband was guilty of attempted murder twice and a finally skinned the cat.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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Thank you Bill. Great review. You totally got that he wasn't a "loving" husband. My dark sense of humour!
Wendy
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is an excellent story in only seventy five words. Well-constructed, with a beginning, a middle and an end, but also mystery, intrigue and a great sting in the tail. AND you managed to make it fit the photo. Fantastic. Kay
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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This is an excellent story in only seventy five words. Well-constructed, with a beginning, a middle and an end, but also mystery, intrigue and a great sting in the tail. AND you managed to make it fit the photo. Fantastic. Kay
Comment Written 15-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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Thank yo very much Kay! Love your positive and encouraging review.
Comment from lyenochka
Oh no! I think that would be terrible solution. Maybe the husband could have just cut up her driver's license and say them both the troubles. I guess he was worried about other accidents.
Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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Oh no! I think that would be terrible solution. Maybe the husband could have just cut up her driver's license and say them both the troubles. I guess he was worried about other accidents.
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 15-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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But did he tamper with the cars? Did he give something which made her black out? We'll never know. Lol.
Thanks so much for reviewing!
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Hmmm. That puts it on another light
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Good entry for the 75 Word Flash writing prompt contest.
The flash fiction story is pretty grim.. poor lady.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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Good entry for the 75 Word Flash writing prompt contest.
The flash fiction story is pretty grim.. poor lady.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 15-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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Thank you for reviewing. Greatly appreciated. Was he responsible for her blackouts? Did he interfere with the cars?
We'll never know!
Comment from royowen
This is hilarious, and incredibly witty, i t certainly deserves a sighting and high position in this contest, how clever, initially the hubby was very gracious, but upon repeated episodes decides enough is enough, and pretends she's had another blackout...permanently, beautifully written my friend, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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This is hilarious, and incredibly witty, i t certainly deserves a sighting and high position in this contest, how clever, initially the hubby was very gracious, but upon repeated episodes decides enough is enough, and pretends she's had another blackout...permanently, beautifully written my friend, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 13-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much. Great review. Perhaps the "loving" husband also had something to do with the blackouts, or interfered with the cars ... I guess we'll never know! Lol.
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Well done
Comment from Thesis
LOL, that's quite a surprise ending. Your story started out with a loving husband, but I guess he really had a low tolerance to her having accidents. While it was a humorous ending, I'm not sure the punishment fit the crime.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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LOL, that's quite a surprise ending. Your story started out with a loving husband, but I guess he really had a low tolerance to her having accidents. While it was a humorous ending, I'm not sure the punishment fit the crime.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much. Great review. Perhaps the "loving" husband also had something to do with the blackouts, or interfered with the cars ... I guess we'll never know! Lol.
