Heart Crafted Poems - 2023
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "Earth's Garden"Musing of an old man
26 total reviews
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Hello,
I identify with your poem, in that I think man totally ruined this earth, starting with Eden.
I do believe there is hope in God, though.
Your serious words can teach people to be kinder to our earth and to each other.
Thank you for the lovely poem.
Good luck,
Blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2023
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Hello,
I identify with your poem, in that I think man totally ruined this earth, starting with Eden.
I do believe there is hope in God, though.
Your serious words can teach people to be kinder to our earth and to each other.
Thank you for the lovely poem.
Good luck,
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 16-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2023
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Cindy, I agree that God can resolve this out of whack "free will" frenzy we have caused Mother Earth
Comment from Eternal Muse
You describe a picture paradise. These words are so beautiful, and I think of Eden, reading this. I am not familiar with Irregular Ode form, thanks for introducing me to it. It sounds challenging.
Great imagery, visuals and artistic presentation.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2023
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You describe a picture paradise. These words are so beautiful, and I think of Eden, reading this. I am not familiar with Irregular Ode form, thanks for introducing me to it. It sounds challenging.
Great imagery, visuals and artistic presentation.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2023
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EM, I am glad you enjoyed this introduction to an irregular ode.
Comment from jake cosmos aller
a nice retelling of the garden of Eden story. For some reason, it reminds me of a Star Trek episode (original series) where a cult of religious nuts hijacks the Enterprise to take them to a planet, they claim was the original Garden of Eden. When they arrive, they all die after eating poisoned apples.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2023
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a nice retelling of the garden of Eden story. For some reason, it reminds me of a Star Trek episode (original series) where a cult of religious nuts hijacks the Enterprise to take them to a planet, they claim was the original Garden of Eden. When they arrive, they all die after eating poisoned apples.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2023
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Jake, I so hate to admit that I remember that original episode ? 👍👍👍🫢🫢🫢
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Eden was always too perfect a dream to exist when mankind was introduced. A good choice of topic for the Irregular Ode challenge JLR, and I learnt a few new words along with enjoying the read.
Cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2023
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Eden was always too perfect a dream to exist when mankind was introduced. A good choice of topic for the Irregular Ode challenge JLR, and I learnt a few new words along with enjoying the read.
Cheers,
valda
Comment Written 16-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2023
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Thanks Valda!
Comment from Janet Foor
Unique and interesting irregular ode. The language and presentation fit the message very well.
Eden was perfect and we made a mess of it. Definitely- there is a better way.
Well done
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2023
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Unique and interesting irregular ode. The language and presentation fit the message very well.
Eden was perfect and we made a mess of it. Definitely- there is a better way.
Well done
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 16-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2023
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Janet, I am beyond words of gratitude, Thank you so much! 🙏🙏
Comment from w.j.debi
An excellent commentary. Eden must have been beautiful, but in our attempt to make things better we have spoiled it. This looks like a difficult form since the rhymes are irregular, but have to rhyme somewhere. You did an excellent job with the form.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2023
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An excellent commentary. Eden must have been beautiful, but in our attempt to make things better we have spoiled it. This looks like a difficult form since the rhymes are irregular, but have to rhyme somewhere. You did an excellent job with the form.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2023
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W.J.Debi, Than? you for your review and thoughtfulness,JLR
Comment from Boogienights
Very well written with an interesting viewpoint. Yes, the world was a pure and beautiful place before man came with all thier changes. I think though, that much beauty was also created by them. Thanks for this thought provoking poem.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2023
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Very well written with an interesting viewpoint. Yes, the world was a pure and beautiful place before man came with all thier changes. I think though, that much beauty was also created by them. Thanks for this thought provoking poem.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2023
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BoggieNightsm thank you for taking a walk with me through the ages of time.
Comment from Mark Kuglin
Wow, that was spectacular.
It was moving, deep and clock full of wonderfully descriptive phrases, which created vivid imagery.
I have no idea if you hit the prescibed structure and form.
All I know is it was great work.
Best of luck.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2023
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Wow, that was spectacular.
It was moving, deep and clock full of wonderfully descriptive phrases, which created vivid imagery.
I have no idea if you hit the prescibed structure and form.
All I know is it was great work.
Best of luck.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2023
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Mark, I am quite appreciative of your validation of this irregular ode, thank you for the six-stars.
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It was my pleasure to "applaud" such work.
You succeed in a form I haven't tried.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your club poem was interesting to read, JLR. You gave
readers great imagery surrounding your complex descriptions.
Your words flowed smoothly, too. I liked the art choice.
Did I miss the rhymes for killed and sparkled?
Thank for participating, Jan
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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Your club poem was interesting to read, JLR. You gave
readers great imagery surrounding your complex descriptions.
Your words flowed smoothly, too. I liked the art choice.
Did I miss the rhymes for killed and sparkled?
Thank for participating, Jan
Comment Written 15-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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Are killed // sparkled is the intended rhyming 😉
Comment from estory
I thought it was an interesting piece making the case for mankind to live in harmony with nature rather than trying to design a world or make it fit into his own convenience. More and more I am advocating for this kind of simple, back to basics living without machines and devices that pollute and hollow out our experience of life. estory
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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I thought it was an interesting piece making the case for mankind to live in harmony with nature rather than trying to design a world or make it fit into his own convenience. More and more I am advocating for this kind of simple, back to basics living without machines and devices that pollute and hollow out our experience of life. estory
Comment Written 15-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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I am right there with you freind.
