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Romantic Tanka Poems

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Comment from AP Apgar
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I like your modern Tanka poem- beautiful picture presentation- a lot of nice descriptive metaphors in the word picture- tickled by your batting eyelashes- clever - Good job - AP

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 16-Feb-2023
    Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from Pearl Edwards
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A beautiful poem and presentation for this Valentine's Day Poem. Love the matching text colour to the colours of sunrise. For me a combination of love and nature, beautifully done, Gypsy.

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 16-Feb-2023
    Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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This poem is rich in descriptions. I've listed a few.

hungry for your contagious laugh
&
the sunbeam bathing your skin --
and be tickled by your batting lashes
and the twinkle of your eyes

Thank you for sharing this complete romantic package with us.

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
    Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from aryr
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What a beautiful tanka or rather two of them, Gypsy. Those were great pictures of the sun peeking through the trees and the wonderful butterflies at the bottom. Your words were phenomenal. Blessed be n hugs!!!

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
    Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback. Blessed be.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
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You write and post such gorgeous (romantic) poetry and images. This poem is telling us that when you flicker the eyelashes it touches the warmth of the skin.

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
    Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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I enjoyed the earthy richness of nature in your words here and your presentation portrayed a calm and tranquil scene with the sunny kiss and sweet romance, much enjoyed, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
    Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from Ricky1024
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"Awake at Dawn" another sexy and well written po we m rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Great art we otk as always Gypsy Blue Rose.
Doctor Ricky

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
    Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from Jasmine Girl
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I can see the twinkling eyes and eye lashes. They are the sun and the rays of the sunshine. The lake and the reflection are the "red musky earth". I love the metaphors in this Tanka suit.

Excellent.

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
    Thank you very much for your time, kindness, exceptional six stars review, and helpfull feedback.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from Mary Shifman
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This is a beautiful and romantic poem with marvelous imagery. It's a perfect valentine. I especially like the lines,"...your hands are ripe harvest rooted in the musky earth..." Wish I had a six for you. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
    Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.

    Gypsy hugs
reply by Mary Shifman on 15-Feb-2023
    You are so welcome.
Comment from lyenochka
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Great choices of words that makes us hear and feel the sensations of the the loved one from the "tickled
by your batting lashes
and the twinkle of your eye"
and the sunbeams and the hearing of the laughter!

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 Comment Written 14-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 14-Feb-2023
    Thank you, big sister, I'm happy you like it. I hope you had a happy Valentine's Day with your husband.

    Love and hugs,

    Marival