Dying to live
A solitary tree is22 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fine write Wendy and as we rarely have a drought in the UK, we don't often see these trees suffer like this, but not so in your country, thank you for reminding us of the lack of rain in parts of Australia, an endearing write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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A fine write Wendy and as we rarely have a drought in the UK, we don't often see these trees suffer like this, but not so in your country, thank you for reminding us of the lack of rain in parts of Australia, an endearing write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 25-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much Dolly. Yes, even our gardens can die off in drought, and we have to begin again at times (generally when there are water restrictions and we aren't allowed to hose).
Wendy
Comment from Teri7
Wendy, This is a very lovely and very well written Choka poem you have penned for the contest about the thirsty tree and the answered prayer. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Wendy, This is a very lovely and very well written Choka poem you have penned for the contest about the thirsty tree and the answered prayer. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 24-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Thank you Teri! I used the tree as a metaphor for ourselves at different times, and God does provide for our needs at the apprpriate time, and we become fruitful and purposeful again. Thanks too for the good wishes, always appreciated.
Wendy
Comment from Paul McFarland
Wendy, where did you come up with that one? A Choka is a new one for me. I can't believe all the different forms that you guys are throwing at me.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Wendy, where did you come up with that one? A Choka is a new one for me. I can't believe all the different forms that you guys are throwing at me.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Lol. I had never heard of it, and never done one, so this is my first. I had been playing around with a few different 5-7-5 ones about a tree in drought, so they formed the basis for this. Thanks so much for reviewing. I always appreciate it.
Wendy
Comment from JT traveller
A wonderfully composed poem.
I particularly appreciated the change in colour of your text as it completely changed the mood of the subject matter, from dreary to celebratory.
Your clever personification of the tree weeping and groaning was well received.
Best of luck in the competition. J
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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A wonderfully composed poem.
I particularly appreciated the change in colour of your text as it completely changed the mood of the subject matter, from dreary to celebratory.
Your clever personification of the tree weeping and groaning was well received.
Best of luck in the competition. J
Comment Written 24-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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That's good, and that's what I had hoped for, and I think many of us are like that tree at various times. Thanks you too for the good wishes.
Wendy
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Great poem. Happy days 😊
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are extremely creative. I liked how this author's words
leads up to the prayer answered! The last line says it all! The poem
flows and connects well. The artwork is awesome and compliments
both the theme and words of this poem. Great Poem!
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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The author's words are extremely creative. I liked how this author's words
leads up to the prayer answered! The last line says it all! The poem
flows and connects well. The artwork is awesome and compliments
both the theme and words of this poem. Great Poem!
Comment Written 24-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much! Your review and encouragement make me very happy!
Wendy
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
The tree has a beautiful resurrection, you've written a beautiful poem. I especially like, "Branches raised, asking for help -" It gives the tree human characteristics and makes us FEEL for the tree.
Nicely done - good luck.
Pam
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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The tree has a beautiful resurrection, you've written a beautiful poem. I especially like, "Branches raised, asking for help -" It gives the tree human characteristics and makes us FEEL for the tree.
Nicely done - good luck.
Pam
Comment Written 24-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Thank you Pam. Yes, I wanted personification. In point of fact we can all be like that tree at times. Thanks too for the good wishes.
Wendy
Comment from Pantygynt
Even in their longer pieces the Japanese demonstrate considerable verbal husbandry as demonstrated in this Choka. Not one word more than is absolutely necessary.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Even in their longer pieces the Japanese demonstrate considerable verbal husbandry as demonstrated in this Choka. Not one word more than is absolutely necessary.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Thank you for your thoughtful and succinct review. This is my first Choka, so I am pleased you thought it worked well.
Wendy
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good Choka poem. It has a great sized text. I like that the text is in two colors. The message is stated with clarity and is easy to understand. Your site is correct. Prayer may be pronounced with one or two syllables. Both are correct. Your visual fits well. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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This is a good Choka poem. It has a great sized text. I like that the text is in two colors. The message is stated with clarity and is easy to understand. Your site is correct. Prayer may be pronounced with one or two syllables. Both are correct. Your visual fits well. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Thank you Sandra for your comprehensive and thoughtful review, and also for the good wishes. I haven't seen you for a little while, so I hope you are well and that life is going well for you.
Wendy
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You are welcome Wendy. I am surviving.
Comment from karenina
I'm so glad Brett started this contest. It's been refreshing to see some new and different forms put out there for entrants to try! First~ very nice presentation. Your image is perfect and I loved the transition to the green font as you enter the line: "Answered prayer - thirst quenched!"
(Clever!)
Also, the reference to "resurrection" is perfect for this time of year...
As a metaphor for life's quest, I reflected on this. Indeed ~ when we are most in need, God provides!
Karenina
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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I'm so glad Brett started this contest. It's been refreshing to see some new and different forms put out there for entrants to try! First~ very nice presentation. Your image is perfect and I loved the transition to the green font as you enter the line: "Answered prayer - thirst quenched!"
(Clever!)
Also, the reference to "resurrection" is perfect for this time of year...
As a metaphor for life's quest, I reflected on this. Indeed ~ when we are most in need, God provides!
Karenina
Comment Written 24-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Thank you Karenina. Yes, you have perfectly understood the second layer - I am glad it wasn't too obscure. Lovely review, appreciated.
Wendy
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Lovely poem!
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
Interesting biography of a tree here. It can represent our lives - thirsty, struggling to survive, seeking help, prayer answered, God's gift, resurrection. Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Interesting biography of a tree here. It can represent our lives - thirsty, struggling to survive, seeking help, prayer answered, God's gift, resurrection. Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 24-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much Verna. You have understood exactly the second layer I was hinting at. Thanks too for the good wishes.
Wendy
