An Altered Life
Mental Illness led him to have a...7 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good entry to this contest. The text is an okay size but could be larger. The message is sad but is clearly stated and easy to understand.
The poem box needs to be extended.
I would drop the first line down one space. This will balance your spacing in the poem box. Providing the mental health hotline in your AN would benefit the readers.
The visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023
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This is a good entry to this contest. The text is an okay size but could be larger. The message is sad but is clearly stated and easy to understand.
The poem box needs to be extended.
I would drop the first line down one space. This will balance your spacing in the poem box. Providing the mental health hotline in your AN would benefit the readers.
The visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023
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Thank you for reading my poem and for this thoughtful review. :)
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You are welcome.
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
Brilliantly, if sadly illustrated! The poem's shape and form are aptly used. They suggest the growing weight and burden borne by the sufferer.
This is a terrible affliction for so many people.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Brilliantly, if sadly illustrated! The poem's shape and form are aptly used. They suggest the growing weight and burden borne by the sufferer.
This is a terrible affliction for so many people.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Yes it is. My son has had it since he was 18. Thanks so much for reading my poem.
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Very best wishes from Cambridge, UK
Comment from Rachel Jamerson1
I would guess this is an accurate portrayal of someone suffering from mental illness. A difficult situation for loved ones. Thank you for sharing your talent.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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I would guess this is an accurate portrayal of someone suffering from mental illness. A difficult situation for loved ones. Thank you for sharing your talent.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Yes, my son has been afflicted with mental illness since age 18. Thank you for taking the time to read my poem.
Comment from Maria Millsaps
This is an amazing poem, and the fact that you put it in an Eheree form makes it even more impressive. I like the art accompanying the poem. It adds flavor to the theme of the poem. Mental health is rising, and no one seems to have the answers. But with poems like yours, people will start to at least understand it.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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This is an amazing poem, and the fact that you put it in an Eheree form makes it even more impressive. I like the art accompanying the poem. It adds flavor to the theme of the poem. Mental health is rising, and no one seems to have the answers. But with poems like yours, people will start to at least understand it.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Thank you for this exceptional review. My son has been afflicted since he age 18, it's been hard. Thanks for reading my poem.
Comment from Terry Broxson
I think that the Etheree poem is hard to write. You have done so very well. The message is hard to read. Not because of how it is written but because of what it conveys. Excellent writing, good luck in the contest. Terry.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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I think that the Etheree poem is hard to write. You have done so very well. The message is hard to read. Not because of how it is written but because of what it conveys. Excellent writing, good luck in the contest. Terry.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Thank you for this thoughtful review, I really appreciate it.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
More and more people seem to be suffering from mental illness these days and coping with it seems to be harder and harder. We have a lot to learn about how the brain works and positive thinking is one way to cure this kind of depression. A poignant write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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More and more people seem to be suffering from mental illness these days and coping with it seems to be harder and harder. We have a lot to learn about how the brain works and positive thinking is one way to cure this kind of depression. A poignant write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 27-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Thank you for this thoughtful review.
Comment from jessizero
I have schizoaffective disorder, and I worry constantly about the last line of your poem. I hate that my pain hurts others. You described this well, and you had great rhymes. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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I have schizoaffective disorder, and I worry constantly about the last line of your poem. I hate that my pain hurts others. You described this well, and you had great rhymes. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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It's my son who suffers and I can't help worrying, but it's just comes with the territory when you love someone. I wish you well, it's difficult. Thank you for reading my poem.
