Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

Hi Katie,
She is wise because any death is sad and should draw tears. It is a good picture. I don't think that she should pick up the bird in bare hands, though.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Joan

 Comment Written 21-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023

Hi Joan, I appreciate the review on this little poem. I'm glad you like it. No, the brid shouldn't be picked up with bare hands, unless you know why it died. I used to try to keep injured birds alive, but sometimes they died anyway.
Beth

reply by dragonpoet on 21-Mar-2023

You're welcome, Beth. I remember trying to keep a field mouse my cat brought back alive. We put in the milk pail Cleo couldn't get to it and fed it through a eye dropper. I lived for an extra day.
Joan

Comment from Jessica Wheeler

Excellent

I love this. It captures the beauty that is this Kayla.. To be full of wisdom and in touch with nature, but still of course, cry over something sad! Especially if passionate about it. Children's hearts are pure. Great job thank you for sharing!
Jessica

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023

Thank you Jessica. I really appreciate the review and you insightful comments.
Beth

Comment from Boogienights

Excellent

This is lovely. Is the girl in the picture someone you know? This poem describes the very best of what we all have inside of us. The ability to have knowledge and empathy. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023

Thank you so much for the review. No, I don't know the girl. I went looking for a picture on Google after I finished the poem. I thought she was perfect. I'm so glad you liked this.
Beth

Comment from Anne Johnston

Excellent

Nice picture and well-chosen words to describe the compassion that she has for an injured bird. I am sure that this compassion and care also is demonstrated for people.

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023

Thank you Anne. I appreciate your review and wise comments.
Beth

reply by Anne Johnston on 13-Mar-2023

You are very welcome, Beth.

Comment from w.j.debi

Excellent

That she weeps for the fallen sparrow, shows how very much she cares for nature and the creatures in it. She understand that we are all linked.
Perfect syllable count and a concise message that gives us something to ponder.
Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023

Thank you so much for a great review and for you insightful comments.
Beth

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

Beautiful in all ways - presentation, thoughtful words, moving sentiment, a reminder of the paradox between knowing facts and experiencing the reality. t reminded me that Jesus knows and cares when even a triny sparrow falls. It's the right match for a Cinquain, and I am sure it will do very well, as it deserves. Best wishes.
Wendy

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023

Thank you so much for the excellent review and the insightful comments.
Beth

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Excellent entry for the Cinquain Poetry contest. You describe a tender moment in time. I love the Cinquain form because it's like haiku in some ways.

I like the presentation too. Concrete images easy to visualize.

Good syllables count and connection between lines.

Goodluck

Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis

 Comment Written 10-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2023

Thank you, Gypsy. I'm glad you likes this and I appreciate your lovely comments.
Beth

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

This is a touching poem. I like your theme of how the little girl feels for nature and especially the deceased bird. Excellent use of words that brings forth emotion and feelings.

 Comment Written 10-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2023

Thank you for the encouraging review and lovely comments.
Beth

Comment from Brett Matthew West

Excellent

That is a good depiction of children of today."wise beyond her years" yet "weeps" When she encounters something like when a "sparrow falls to earth."

Children are definately multi-dimensional.

 Comment Written 10-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2023

Thank you, Brett. I appreciate the review and insightful comments.
Beth

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

You did a great job with your contest entry, Beth.
The picture was sweet and perfect for your cinquain.
Your words were descriptive and well chosen.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan

 Comment Written 10-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2023

Thank you, Jan. i appreciate the review and your nice comments.
Beth