End of Time
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Comment from BethShelby
This is cute play on words. It is very good for the 80 word flash contest. Someone must have been tired of having a clock in their life to way the up and decided to destroy them. Maybe they retired and didn't want to know the time.
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This is cute play on words. It is very good for the 80 word flash contest. Someone must have been tired of having a clock in their life to way the up and decided to destroy them. Maybe they retired and didn't want to know the time.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2023
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
A great presentation of a story. Time does seize when the hands are broken. To pick up the pieces and start ticking again means the time was perhaps like day light savings time. You move one hour ahead!
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A great presentation of a story. Time does seize when the hands are broken. To pick up the pieces and start ticking again means the time was perhaps like day light savings time. You move one hour ahead!
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Good entry for the 80 Word Flash Fiction writing prompt contest.
Interesting plot. the story grabbed my interest. The dialogue and characters development is good.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
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Good entry for the 80 Word Flash Fiction writing prompt contest.
Interesting plot. the story grabbed my interest. The dialogue and characters development is good.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
Comment from Mia Twysted
That is a new way to tell a story making time out to be an object that thinks and feels. Clearly, there was an accident that took them by surprise. I was left wondering what had caused the destruction and how they would manage in the aftermath.
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That is a new way to tell a story making time out to be an object that thinks and feels. Clearly, there was an accident that took them by surprise. I was left wondering what had caused the destruction and how they would manage in the aftermath.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a cleverly written entry into the 80-word flash contest. The text is a good size. The story is well-told and, the plot doesn't seem rushed. I like that you made the characters clocks. The ending es well-done. The visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
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This is a cleverly written entry into the 80-word flash contest. The text is a good size. The story is well-told and, the plot doesn't seem rushed. I like that you made the characters clocks. The ending es well-done. The visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
Comment from Bill Schott
This eighty-word flash fiction story, End of Time, has the proper word count and gives life to the bits and pieces of the remnants of when time flew.
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This eighty-word flash fiction story, End of Time, has the proper word count and gives life to the bits and pieces of the remnants of when time flew.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a clever and scary write and you hooked me in right away with your first line, I enjoyed your short story that left me bewildered and locked in the end of time, love Dolly x
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This is a clever and scary write and you hooked me in right away with your first line, I enjoyed your short story that left me bewildered and locked in the end of time, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
Comment from kahpot
How clever putting your story about the end of time in the hands of clocks, and I do wonder how much warning we would get, if any, very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
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How clever putting your story about the end of time in the hands of clocks, and I do wonder how much warning we would get, if any, very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 13-Mar-2023
Comment from jmdg1954
I enjoyed the progression of your story and the destruction of the click.
Wendy-One-Second and Teo-Minute-Tom were named appropriately.
Good beginning, middle, ending and twist.
Best of luck in the contest.
John
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I enjoyed the progression of your story and the destruction of the click.
Wendy-One-Second and Teo-Minute-Tom were named appropriately.
Good beginning, middle, ending and twist.
Best of luck in the contest.
John
Comment Written 13-Mar-2023
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Excellent artwork and good story to go with it.
-I like your character names.
-You have a very good opening establishing
that something had happened the clocks, but what?
-I like the vivid description in the next paragraph
with "The clock she lived in lay dying."
-A good ending, as well.
-A very good entry; good luck.
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-Excellent artwork and good story to go with it.
-I like your character names.
-You have a very good opening establishing
that something had happened the clocks, but what?
-I like the vivid description in the next paragraph
with "The clock she lived in lay dying."
-A good ending, as well.
-A very good entry; good luck.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2023