Missing the Cut
An 80 word Flash9 total reviews
Comment from PoemsOfDD
Hmm, what does the story mean... that Ron - newly married to Sarah, was off with his mates running wild - with other women before his honeymoon? My mind is taking me to all sorts of scenarios here. A thought provoking and interesting story. Best of luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2023
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Hmm, what does the story mean... that Ron - newly married to Sarah, was off with his mates running wild - with other women before his honeymoon? My mind is taking me to all sorts of scenarios here. A thought provoking and interesting story. Best of luck in the competition.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much, I thought I would leave the thinking up to the reader
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
It must have been quite a bachelor party.. Your story consists of the right amount of words. It is a flash fiction because there is a twist at the end of the story.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2023
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It must have been quite a bachelor party.. Your story consists of the right amount of words. It is a flash fiction because there is a twist at the end of the story.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Good entry for the 80 Word Flash Fiction writing prompt contest.
Good character development and the story grabbed my interest.
Seems like the bachelor's party was too much fan. :)
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis dialogue and characters development is good.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Good entry for the 80 Word Flash Fiction writing prompt contest.
Good character development and the story grabbed my interest.
Seems like the bachelor's party was too much fan. :)
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis dialogue and characters development is good.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much
Comment from Mia Twysted
I was really lost as to what this story was about or where it was going. I didn't feel a connection or any passion or intimacy between the newly married husband and wife.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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I was really lost as to what this story was about or where it was going. I didn't feel a connection or any passion or intimacy between the newly married husband and wife.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Perhaps there wasn't
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good entry into the 80-word flash contest. The text is small and needs to be larger. The story is well-told and, the plot doesn't seem rushed. Sounds like the new husband got his days mixed up. He's acting buck wild before the honeymoon. Those kinds of shenanigans are for the bachelor party. He may not be great husband material. The visual fits just okay. The hubby isn't a knight but a cad. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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This is a good entry into the 80-word flash contest. The text is small and needs to be larger. The story is well-told and, the plot doesn't seem rushed. Sounds like the new husband got his days mixed up. He's acting buck wild before the honeymoon. Those kinds of shenanigans are for the bachelor party. He may not be great husband material. The visual fits just okay. The hubby isn't a knight but a cad. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much
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You are welcome.
Comment from Bill Schott
This eighty-word flash fiction story, Missing the Cut, has the proper word count and leaves the readers wondering if Ron's night out was the sign of things to come, his final dumb stunt, or a chance for a lad to sow his final wild oats.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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This eighty-word flash fiction story, Missing the Cut, has the proper word count and leaves the readers wondering if Ron's night out was the sign of things to come, his final dumb stunt, or a chance for a lad to sow his final wild oats.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is just what guys do on their stag night and some have great regrets when they are tied naked to a lamp post miles from anywhere! Ha ha ha, a fun post, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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This is just what guys do on their stag night and some have great regrets when they are tied naked to a lamp post miles from anywhere! Ha ha ha, a fun post, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
your piece runs to 82 words and it needs to be exactly 80 words to qualify for the competition. (you could easily delete 'all' & 'wedding' from the opening line to make this happen.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Hi there,
your piece runs to 82 words and it needs to be exactly 80 words to qualify for the competition. (you could easily delete 'all' & 'wedding' from the opening line to make this happen.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much, and for the help
Comment from JT traveller
Oh no! I sense trouble and strife. I really love the way you have left it up to the reader's imagination as to just how much trouble Ron got up to.
Fantastic flash fiction. Just the way I like it. Best of luck in the competition. Jacqueline
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Oh no! I sense trouble and strife. I really love the way you have left it up to the reader's imagination as to just how much trouble Ron got up to.
Fantastic flash fiction. Just the way I like it. Best of luck in the competition. Jacqueline
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much