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Romantic Tanka Poems

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Comment from Mark Schardine
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Memories of a father now gone continue to haunt. One must take a road, hopefully the right road, and remain alone to ponder what might have been, and not what could be.

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 19-Mar-2023
    Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from AP Apgar
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I like your tanka poem- nice picture presentation- flows well- familiar story- not living in the past excellent idea - wishful thinking- of what might have been- only if - we all do this- grey clouds depicting the emotion- suggest : "and grey clouds- " perhaps'while' would fit better- same count Good job AP

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 17-Mar-2023
    Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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I've read reports that say a large part of the problems in the US right now is the lack of fathers in the home. It's a societal problem that effects not only young boys but females as well. Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed reading.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 17-Mar-2023
    Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from kahpot
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A father is important when growing up, but for those who have lost them it is a time to make your own way in the world, very well written and presented****kahpot

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 16-Mar-2023
    Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.

    Gypsy
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
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This is an excellent Tanka. Although it's short, it tells an emotional story. It gives the reader pause to think and to be sad and to question what happened, while being sad for you both, along with the clouds.

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 16-Mar-2023
    Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.

    Gypsy
Comment from Raul1
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I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. The sentences flow with clarity. It's beautifully written. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thanks for sharing!

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 16-Mar-2023
    Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.

    Gypsy
Comment from aryr
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What a wonderful tanka, Gypsy. The dual pictures simply enhanced your words of the tanka because they told the truth of the situation. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 16-Mar-2023
    Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback. Blessed be.

    Gypsy
Comment from lyenochka
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This is sound advice. I remember wishing for the TV show fathers who were so caring and loving. Most people don't have that kind of father so it's best to trust in our Heavenly Father and keep on our own path in life.

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 17-Mar-2023
    Thank you very much, big sister. Have a lovely evening, love you,

    Marival ❤️

    Gypsy hugs
reply by lyenochka on 17-Mar-2023
    You, too, MariVal! I was working on the interview but was feeling bad about cutting out so much. I want to keep it around 1,000 words. I also want to add a funny ending. I'll send you a draft soon. Hugs!
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2023
    Don't feel bad. I went through it today and there's a lot you can cut on the first question about culture shock. Also with the haiku stuff. I'm very passionate about it so I got carried away. You probably don't need the website links. Anyway I know you will do a good job. I like the funny idea.
reply by lyenochka on 17-Mar-2023
    I'll include the websites at the end. I emailed you the draft now. We'll probably have another draft before it's ready. 😊💞💖