A Time To Write
Why waste the night, when you can write?22 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Your minute poem flowed smoothly and you wrote about writing (perfect for your audience) and you covered the passage of time (perfect for a minute!) and what better use of insomnia than writing! Hope this does well in the contest!
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2023
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Your minute poem flowed smoothly and you wrote about writing (perfect for your audience) and you covered the passage of time (perfect for a minute!) and what better use of insomnia than writing! Hope this does well in the contest!
Comment Written 22-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2023
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Thank you Helen, I appreciate you reviewing and commenting on this.
Smiles.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
When you are not sleeping and you keep thinking about writing, we should get up and write what is on our mind. This woman had a pad and pencil at close range to write down her ideas.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2023
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When you are not sleeping and you keep thinking about writing, we should get up and write what is on our mind. This woman had a pad and pencil at close range to write down her ideas.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2023
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Thank you Rosemary. I appreciate the review and comments.
Comment from Scott Dylan Thomas
Nice job maintaining the iambic meter and rhyme scheme throught the poem! I like the subject matter of the poem (of writing about writing). I had a couple of suggestions. The end of the fourth line looks like it needs some punctuation. The sixth line, "And I still try," might sound better rephrasing, "And still I try."
Best of luck!
Scott
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2023
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Nice job maintaining the iambic meter and rhyme scheme throught the poem! I like the subject matter of the poem (of writing about writing). I had a couple of suggestions. The end of the fourth line looks like it needs some punctuation. The sixth line, "And I still try," might sound better rephrasing, "And still I try."
Best of luck!
Scott
Comment Written 22-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2023
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Thank you Scott. I appreciate the review and the suggestions. I did fix those things.
Comment from jmdg1954
Wake your muse so you can write,
Get the words down before they take flight.
Sleep is simply non-essential
Cuz a poem well written has a lot of potential!
Your minute poem is well thought out and penned for us readers.
Good luck in the contest.
John
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Wake your muse so you can write,
Get the words down before they take flight.
Sleep is simply non-essential
Cuz a poem well written has a lot of potential!
Your minute poem is well thought out and penned for us readers.
Good luck in the contest.
John
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Thank you John, I really appreciate the reveiw and comments. I also like the poem you penned in response. Actually I'd rather have the the sleep. lol
Comment from Boogienights
Excellent. I do some of my best writing at night when I can't sleep. The quiet helps me concentrate and it happens often, being an insomniac. Thanks so much for sharing this great poem.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Excellent. I do some of my best writing at night when I can't sleep. The quiet helps me concentrate and it happens often, being an insomniac. Thanks so much for sharing this great poem.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much for the review and comments and for telling me you write at night too.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Fine metre and rhymes, love the sentiment as our muse never seems to sleep when we love to write, well chosen words, I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Fine metre and rhymes, love the sentiment as our muse never seems to sleep when we love to write, well chosen words, I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 21-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Thank you Dolly for an excellent review and comments.
Comment from Gloria ....
Very nicely written, author. Your iambic metre is spot on, and the subject matter is one many can relate to.
just one typo:
but I don't dose (doze)
Wishing you great luck with the voters.
Gloria
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Very nicely written, author. Your iambic metre is spot on, and the subject matter is one many can relate to.
just one typo:
but I don't dose (doze)
Wishing you great luck with the voters.
Gloria
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Thank you Gloria, I'm glad you like it and I appreciate you pointing out the misspelling.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and presentation.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-A good opening verse.
-I like the line about the music and lullaby.
-A good closing verse.
-A couple of small things:
*"dose" needs to be 'doze' [ to rest or sleep]
*In the last verse, it should be It's best I use...
-Good luck in the contest.
-When the contest is over and you use a computer
to post, send me a message, and I can give you
a way so your poems are single spaced.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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-Nice image and presentation.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-A good opening verse.
-I like the line about the music and lullaby.
-A good closing verse.
-A couple of small things:
*"dose" needs to be 'doze' [ to rest or sleep]
*In the last verse, it should be It's best I use...
-Good luck in the contest.
-When the contest is over and you use a computer
to post, send me a message, and I can give you
a way so your poems are single spaced.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Thank you for the nice review and a always appreciate you helping me fix the spags. I would love to know how to do something about the spacing. I also had a problem with the color. I wanted to make the type a bright color and the background dark but the color was there until I made the background dark and then only the last line showed up in color. I haven't had that problem before.
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You are very welcome. I will save your reply and get back to you about it. This is the information for spacing if you use a PC:
*Press and hold the control key
*Then add the shift key and keep that pressed
*Press V If you press it too hard or long, it will repeat what you pasted, but it's easy to delete the extra.
Comment from jessizero
I really enjoyed your minute poem. When you can't sleep, don't waste the night - wake your muse! That's awesome. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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I really enjoyed your minute poem. When you can't sleep, don't waste the night - wake your muse! That's awesome. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Thank you Jessi, I teally apprecate your great review and comments.
Comment from Frank Malley
Small things: it's doze, not dose, which is for taking medicine. Additionally,'It's best...' would be correct. Other than that, this poem recognizes how often inability to sleep leads to creative involvements, a worthy center of interest for a poem. However, a preoccupation with syllable counting often compromises a poem rather than strengthening it; I think, that while this may be a good poem, it might be much better if it had been written without the constraints of the so-called "minute poem," a cutesy, why-bother form.
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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Small things: it's doze, not dose, which is for taking medicine. Additionally,'It's best...' would be correct. Other than that, this poem recognizes how often inability to sleep leads to creative involvements, a worthy center of interest for a poem. However, a preoccupation with syllable counting often compromises a poem rather than strengthening it; I think, that while this may be a good poem, it might be much better if it had been written without the constraints of the so-called "minute poem," a cutesy, why-bother form.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Thank you Frank, Those things were corrected earlier which I'm sure you've noticed other writers point out as withour deducting points. I agree minute poems and other types of poetry take away for the value of the message, but when contest calls for minute poem that is what write.
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I understand and wish your continued efforts success and personal satisfaction. Frank
