Lacking in Skill
Sad Poem contest entry13 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
Lovely - and a very relatable piece. We do indeed feel sad when the words will not come, despite the fact that our heart is full. It brings sadness and frustration both. I like also the different context of sadness. best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2023
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Lovely - and a very relatable piece. We do indeed feel sad when the words will not come, despite the fact that our heart is full. It brings sadness and frustration both. I like also the different context of sadness. best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 23-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2023
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Thank you for the great review, Wendy. I really appreciate the kind comments and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked my little offering. Have yourself a great day.
Comment from Rebecca Roberts1
Very nice. I love the rhythm and rhyme and the repeated stanza. You made it flow well. I think every writer has gone through this phase, but you have captured the frustration.
Great job.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2023
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Very nice. I love the rhythm and rhyme and the repeated stanza. You made it flow well. I think every writer has gone through this phase, but you have captured the frustration.
Great job.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much for the fantastic review and giant sixer, Rebecca. I really appreciate the kind comments and gracious rating. I'm glad you liked the piece. Have yourself a wonderful day and thank you again.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
I've forgotten the name of this poem form, and would have much appreciated having been reminded of it in the title or the author's note. Otherwise I found it made a wonderful entry to the sad poems contest. kay
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2023
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I've forgotten the name of this poem form, and would have much appreciated having been reminded of it in the title or the author's note. Otherwise I found it made a wonderful entry to the sad poems contest. kay
Comment Written 23-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2023
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Hey, Katherine, hello. To be honest, I don't actually know what this form is called. I tried it in a contest a long time ago and forgot what it was. I just love poems like this. I'll see if I can find out and get back with you. Thank you for the great review and generous stars, K. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from MissMerri
I thought this was an extraordinary poem. The theme is something most writers can relate to also. When we want to write something beautiful and memorable, we might find ourselves, more often than not, sadly disappointed. Your poem, however, is proof you are not lacking in skill. It is superb in every way. I know it will do well in this contest too. I enjoyed everything about it.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2023
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I thought this was an extraordinary poem. The theme is something most writers can relate to also. When we want to write something beautiful and memorable, we might find ourselves, more often than not, sadly disappointed. Your poem, however, is proof you are not lacking in skill. It is superb in every way. I know it will do well in this contest too. I enjoyed everything about it.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much for the gracious review and big sixer, MissMerri. I dearly appreciate the kind words and huge rating. Yes, it happens a bit too often anymore. Lol. I'm glad you liked the piece. Have yourself a wonderful day and thank you again.
Comment from Mary Shifman
This is an amazing poem. It is beautifully written and rhymes well. It is poignant and moving. I can't say enough positive things about it so I'll leave with: Good luck in the contest. I think you've got a winner!
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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This is an amazing poem. It is beautifully written and rhymes well. It is poignant and moving. I can't say enough positive things about it so I'll leave with: Good luck in the contest. I think you've got a winner!
Comment Written 23-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much for the kind review and giant sixer, Mary. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked my entry. Have yourself a great night and thank you again.
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You are welcome. I really hope you win. Your poem deserves to.
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Mystery Author,
You are sad because you failed in a writing prompt, or any other contest. But writing a really good poem is like finding gold in a stream. It doesn't happen all the time. In fact, you might search for a year or more, and never find one golden pebble.
There's much more to writing than picking up a pen, or typing at the keyboard. You have to be in the right state of mind. Perhaps you're too tired. Perhaps you're worried about something. Maybe your blood pressure is up.
I find I do my best writing in the middle of the night. It's dark outside, and the house is quiet. Your thoughts are fresh from dreams. It's easier to focus.
But don't be sad about losing. It's all about the competition, and the sheer joy of writing. Sometimes we poets get lucky with a phrase, with a metaphor, with alliteration, and magical words. Then, you've found a gold nugget! It happens.
I like the choice of your poetic form. Your repeated line is very effective.
"I weep atop an aimless quill" ... I love that! It has the sadness theme. It has terrific imagery. The quill is only a tool, and yet you give it center stage. And you are just along for the ride. But you are the ink, not the pen. Good poetry spills out of you. Not all the time! Let's not be greedy. But sometimes, you write a masterpiece. Be patient. You can't force a great poem. It's a gift.
Good Luck in the contest!
Cheers,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Hi Mystery Author,
You are sad because you failed in a writing prompt, or any other contest. But writing a really good poem is like finding gold in a stream. It doesn't happen all the time. In fact, you might search for a year or more, and never find one golden pebble.
There's much more to writing than picking up a pen, or typing at the keyboard. You have to be in the right state of mind. Perhaps you're too tired. Perhaps you're worried about something. Maybe your blood pressure is up.
I find I do my best writing in the middle of the night. It's dark outside, and the house is quiet. Your thoughts are fresh from dreams. It's easier to focus.
But don't be sad about losing. It's all about the competition, and the sheer joy of writing. Sometimes we poets get lucky with a phrase, with a metaphor, with alliteration, and magical words. Then, you've found a gold nugget! It happens.
I like the choice of your poetic form. Your repeated line is very effective.
"I weep atop an aimless quill" ... I love that! It has the sadness theme. It has terrific imagery. The quill is only a tool, and yet you give it center stage. And you are just along for the ride. But you are the ink, not the pen. Good poetry spills out of you. Not all the time! Let's not be greedy. But sometimes, you write a masterpiece. Be patient. You can't force a great poem. It's a gift.
Good Luck in the contest!
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 23-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Wow, thank you for the fantastic review, Kimbob. Yes, mood, setting and everything else effects what we produce. I really appreciate the generous stars and kind comments, friend. And thank you for the good luck wishes as well. Have yourself a great night.
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good entry into the SAD poem contest. The text is a great size for reading. The message is presented with clarity and is easily understood. You use effectively the repeated refrain about weeping atop an aimless quill. The spacing of text in your poem box is imbalanced. Drop the first line down one space so it matches the spacing at the end of your poem. Your visual fits well. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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This is a good entry into the SAD poem contest. The text is a great size for reading. The message is presented with clarity and is easily understood. You use effectively the repeated refrain about weeping atop an aimless quill. The spacing of text in your poem box is imbalanced. Drop the first line down one space so it matches the spacing at the end of your poem. Your visual fits well. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Thank you for the great review, Sandra. I guess it's the way we have or screens set up. It's lined up perfectly on my screen. The only thing dropping the first line line down would do is make the text further away from the picture. I really appreciate the generous stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked the piece.
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Okay, You are welcome.
Comment from LyndaS
So you're mocking yourself saying you're lacking in skill to enter this contest? Oh, I think not. Your skills here are obvious. Love the kyrielle with the drop down lines. Very well written. Good luck in this contest.
Lynda
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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So you're mocking yourself saying you're lacking in skill to enter this contest? Oh, I think not. Your skills here are obvious. Love the kyrielle with the drop down lines. Very well written. Good luck in this contest.
Lynda
Comment Written 23-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Haha. Yep, that's exactly what I'm doing. Not many people are catching on to my ploy. I just had to add something humorous into a 'sad' contest. I couldn't resist. I'm sure it'll go down in flames but I had fun with it. That's all that matters. Ha. Is that what they call it? A kyrielle? I don't know the term of what it's called but I do love the drop down a line deal. Thank you for the great review and stars, Lynda. I'm glad you caught what I was doing here. Lol. Have yourself a great day.
Comment from Janet Foor
Sadness does overcome us all from time to time. I believe writing, whether a poem or story or an entry into our journal is cathartic and helps us cope.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Sadness does overcome us all from time to time. I believe writing, whether a poem or story or an entry into our journal is cathartic and helps us cope.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 22-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Thank you for the kind review and generous stars, Janet. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from royowen
This is an excellent quatern my friend, you've done an excellent job in creating and crafting this articulate gem. The flow is great, the language and rhyming superbly scribed. And the feeling of something "temporarily" lost is compelling, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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This is an excellent quatern my friend, you've done an excellent job in creating and crafting this articulate gem. The flow is great, the language and rhyming superbly scribed. And the feeling of something "temporarily" lost is compelling, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 22-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2023
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Roy. I really appreciate the generous stars and good luck wishes, friend. I'm glad you liked the piece.
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Most welcome
