Wishing and Hoping
The world will be a better place.3 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good entry into the 1-1-2-12 Poetry contest. The text is a great size. Your message is stated with clarity and is easily understood. Most sane people share your wish. If only we could have peace. The struggles are many and great in this world.
The visual fits well. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2023
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This is a good entry into the 1-1-2-12 Poetry contest. The text is a great size. Your message is stated with clarity and is easily understood. Most sane people share your wish. If only we could have peace. The struggles are many and great in this world.
The visual fits well. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2023
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Thanks! I hope I win first place!
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You are welcome. Good luck!
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You are welcome. Good luck!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I enjoyed the sentiment here, but the grammar is slightly off on this line:
(I wish for the world becomes sane) . . .
Perhaps:
(I wish the world becomes sane . . . .)
Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2023
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I enjoyed the sentiment here, but the grammar is slightly off on this line:
(I wish for the world becomes sane) . . .
Perhaps:
(I wish the world becomes sane . . . .)
Love Dolly x
Comment Written 26-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2023
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Thank you for your help and kind review! The contest entry is 1,1,2,12 from line one to four. Is it better now and does it flow well?
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and good presentation.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-You do a good job with your wish in the opening lines.
-I also like your concluding line and agree with you
for wanting sanity and peace in the world.
-It is desperately needed.
-You did a really good job with this.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2023
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-Nice artwork and good presentation.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-You do a good job with your wish in the opening lines.
-I also like your concluding line and agree with you
for wanting sanity and peace in the world.
-It is desperately needed.
-You did a really good job with this.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2023
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Thanks and for your help! It's fixed.
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You are very welcome, and you did a great job. I changed the review. I also appreciate your effort in wanting your poem to be better, and it definitely is!!
