Misfortune
Contradicting cranes13 total reviews
Comment from harmony13
The author's words describe well misfortune and it's sadness. The
poem is descriptive and creative. Thank you for the author's notes -
they made clear how meaningful this poem is! The poem flows and
connects well. The artwork is unique and compliments these words.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2023
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The author's words describe well misfortune and it's sadness. The
poem is descriptive and creative. Thank you for the author's notes -
they made clear how meaningful this poem is! The poem flows and
connects well. The artwork is unique and compliments these words.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much!!
Comment from royowen
You're absolutely correct dear Jessica, it seems I've done that very thing in my past, by God's grace I hope I never again do that. My precious loved ones deserve better, beautifully written my friend, love the post. Blessings Roy
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2023
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You're absolutely correct dear Jessica, it seems I've done that very thing in my past, by God's grace I hope I never again do that. My precious loved ones deserve better, beautifully written my friend, love the post. Blessings Roy
Comment Written 30-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2023
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Thank you Roy! <3
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Welcome
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was visually beautiful. The imagery of the cranes flying above and the lone person on the ground below, really took my breath away. I liked the fact that the feeling of being alone and left behind was reflected in the very actions of the birds. Thank you for posting. Gretchen
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2023
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This was visually beautiful. The imagery of the cranes flying above and the lone person on the ground below, really took my breath away. I liked the fact that the feeling of being alone and left behind was reflected in the very actions of the birds. Thank you for posting. Gretchen
Comment Written 30-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2023
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Gretchen, thank you so much!
Comment from estory
I liked the oriental feel of this, the abstract imagery that contains these powerful metaphors of being left behind by someone. I like that image of the crane flying away, leaving you behind on the ground. It sums up the end of the relationship and all the pain and loss one feels at that moment. There's also something of the surreal about it, it is very dreamlike, like watching something in slow motion or from a great distance. estory
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2023
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I liked the oriental feel of this, the abstract imagery that contains these powerful metaphors of being left behind by someone. I like that image of the crane flying away, leaving you behind on the ground. It sums up the end of the relationship and all the pain and loss one feels at that moment. There's also something of the surreal about it, it is very dreamlike, like watching something in slow motion or from a great distance. estory
Comment Written 30-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much! I really appreciate your awesome review and insightful feedback!!
Comment from Ulla
Hi Jessica, I really this very sad Tanka poem about the crane that was left behind. The pivot line was beautiful written leading in to the second half of the poem. All best, Ulla :)))
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2023
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Hi Jessica, I really this very sad Tanka poem about the crane that was left behind. The pivot line was beautiful written leading in to the second half of the poem. All best, Ulla :)))
Comment Written 30-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2023
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Ulla, thank you so much! I'm so pleased with your interpretation!!
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Omg! That's so awesome! Love fhe pic! Gorgeous poem! You have more talent in your little finger than most do. You're kickin butt all over the place
"Sting with ease of negligence" LOVE IT!!
This poem deserves a SIX!
Thank you for this really great amazing submission worthy of the highest. I hope you have a great night!
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2023
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Omg! That's so awesome! Love fhe pic! Gorgeous poem! You have more talent in your little finger than most do. You're kickin butt all over the place
"Sting with ease of negligence" LOVE IT!!
This poem deserves a SIX!
Thank you for this really great amazing submission worthy of the highest. I hope you have a great night!
Comment Written 29-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2023
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Lea, you are just the best, thank you so much for your unwavering support!!!
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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent classic tanka.
I like the presentation too. Concrete images easy to visualize.
Good syllables count and connection between lines.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
bro/ken pro/mise wounds 5
sting with ease of ne/gli/gence 7
weak and frail I plead 5
from the ground where you left me 7
for/sa/king cranes fly a/bove7
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Excellent classic tanka.
I like the presentation too. Concrete images easy to visualize.
Good syllables count and connection between lines.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
bro/ken pro/mise wounds 5
sting with ease of ne/gli/gence 7
weak and frail I plead 5
from the ground where you left me 7
for/sa/king cranes fly a/bove7
Comment Written 29-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2023
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Thank you so so much, Gypsy! I wasn't sure if I'd done it correctly lol. I appreciate your feedback!
<3
Jessica
Comment from Mario PIERRE
Quite touching and sad poem. The new tanka format is well respected and I like thr picture attached to the work.
Wish you all the best for the contest!!
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2023
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Quite touching and sad poem. The new tanka format is well respected and I like thr picture attached to the work.
Wish you all the best for the contest!!
Comment Written 27-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2023
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Thank you! I appreciate the feedback! :)
Comment from Sally Law
Fantastic tanka poem, Jessica. Stinging with images of betrayal throughout. The cranes flying above, hurriedly witness the event.
Marvelous tanka as you paint the scene, which is much like a haiku poem.
Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sal :))
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2023
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Fantastic tanka poem, Jessica. Stinging with images of betrayal throughout. The cranes flying above, hurriedly witness the event.
Marvelous tanka as you paint the scene, which is much like a haiku poem.
Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sal :))
Comment Written 27-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2023
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Thank you, Sally. Your feedback is so appreciated!!
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Jess
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Most welcome. My best wishes with this one. Sal :))
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Broken promises are often deeds of betrayal that we find hard to forgive, a poignant write Jessica, suffering from misfortune can also mean hardship, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2023
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Broken promises are often deeds of betrayal that we find hard to forgive, a poignant write Jessica, suffering from misfortune can also mean hardship, love Dolly x
Comment Written 27-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2023
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Thank you, Dolly! <3
