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Comment from barbara.wilkey
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I see this harvest moon and this oak tree have a thing going on. I can see it. LOL Once again you presented us with a perfect package. This is filled with emotion and beauty. It fill most of our senses.

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023
    Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from Jasmine Girl
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How did you find an art work with flame? It's so pretty and provocative. I also like the personification used in this poem. The color is very hot.

Well done.

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023
    Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
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Wow, that oak tree and the moon have a passionate thing going on! The oak tree is disrobed and the moon is aflame with love. Such a stunning picture in your poem!

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023
    Thank you very much big sister. ❤️

    Love,

    Marival
reply by lyenochka on 12-Apr-2023
    💖💖
Comment from aryr
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This was a fantastic septolet poem, Gypsy. The dual pictures of the moon definitely appeared to be a blazed. The falling leaves represented themselves. Your words simply enhanced your words. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 11-Apr-2023
    Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem. Blessed be.

    Gypsy hugs
reply by aryr on 12-Apr-2023
    Most welcome, Gypsy.
Comment from AP Apgar
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I like your Septolet poem- amazing picture presentation- colorful and intense- interesting use of the word disrobe - shedding its burning foliage- I'm guessing- the big moon - tree- and fire all powerful characters in the story - good job AP

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 11-Apr-2023
    Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from shelley kaye
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umm... it's supposed to have seven lines with a space in-between the two parts...

Harvest moon aflame
kisses
the distant horizon.

Oaktree's boughs
disrobed
crimson
and golden leaves.


other than that, this had awesome word choices - love the disrobing of leaves - never thought of it that way! very cool.


thank you for sharing
shelley :)



 Comment Written 11-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 11-Apr-2023
    No, the rule is 14 words divided in two stanzas. It doesn't have to be 7 and 7.

    I do have two stanzas that begin with a capital letter and ends with a period, as I did. I didn't want to put a line between my stanzas for presentation sake.

    Thank you very much for your review.
reply by shelley kaye on 12-Apr-2023
    oh, i thought the two stanzas were supposed to spread over 7 lines...
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023
    No
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023
    No, if you check the contest seprolet rules and links you will see it's 14 words divided in two stanzas. As long as they are 14 total you can divided it anyway that fits best
reply by shelley kaye on 12-Apr-2023
    hmm okay - cool that'll make it easier lol! thanx!! 😊👍
Comment from Faith Williams
Exceptional
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Such vivid imagery in your lovely poem, Gypsy. Your few words do paint a picture in my mind of a beautiful autumn night. Thanks for sharing an amazing poem.

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 11-Apr-2023
    Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem. I appreciate your exceptional six stars review!

    Gypsy hugs