Thirty (hopefully) Poems for April
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Works Of Art"A loose attempt at NaPoWriMo 2023
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Comment from Chrissy710
Hi Debra, Yes what a great Haiku, and i am sure there are a lot of creative masterpieces out there. You are creative also, a great satori line A worthy six from me
Cheers Chris
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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Hi Debra, Yes what a great Haiku, and i am sure there are a lot of creative masterpieces out there. You are creative also, a great satori line A worthy six from me
Cheers Chris
Comment Written 13-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much, Chris, for your lovely feedback and generous star rating! I'm happy you enjoyed my poem :)
Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from Gloria ....
Excellent subject to a senryu/haiku poem. The painter's apron contains all the colours within the painting which makes it something of a mysterious key to understanding the whole project.
Wishing you great luck with the Contest Committee. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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Excellent subject to a senryu/haiku poem. The painter's apron contains all the colours within the painting which makes it something of a mysterious key to understanding the whole project.
Wishing you great luck with the Contest Committee. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 12-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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Hi Gloria,
Thank you for your kind feedback and good luck wishes - shame I entered a senryu and not a haiku for the HAIKU contest LOL!! (I blame the menopause!)
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
I have always kept my aprons and the rags I wipe my brushes on, and framed them up as works of art in their own right. I have one rage per painting and it fascinates me how they change according to the painting's subject. kay
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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I have always kept my aprons and the rags I wipe my brushes on, and framed them up as works of art in their own right. I have one rage per painting and it fascinates me how they change according to the painting's subject. kay
Comment Written 12-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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Hi Kay, what a great thing to do. I guess they tell their own story :)
Thank you for your feedback.
Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I have known some artists display their apron as a piece of art! I enjoyed your inventive Haiku here Debra, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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I have known some artists display their apron as a piece of art! I enjoyed your inventive Haiku here Debra, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 12-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much, Dolly... I think the displayed aprons probably tell their own story! :)
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation.
-A well written poem with a good topic.
-Effective imagery and alliteration with "creative chaos."
-Good description of the painter and a good concluding line.
-Good luck in the contest, Debra.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023
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-Nice artwork and presentation.
-A well written poem with a good topic.
-Effective imagery and alliteration with "creative chaos."
-Good description of the painter and a good concluding line.
-Good luck in the contest, Debra.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023
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Hello Pam :)
Thank you for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes.
I appreciate both!
Best wishes as always, Debra :) x
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You are very welcome, Debra. I am enjoying your poems.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent senryu entry for the Haiku contest. It's a senryu because it deals with human experience not about nature.
I like the presentation too. Concrete images easy to visualize.
Good syllables count and connection between lines.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023
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Excellent senryu entry for the Haiku contest. It's a senryu because it deals with human experience not about nature.
I like the presentation too. Concrete images easy to visualize.
Good syllables count and connection between lines.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 12-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023
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Hi Gypsy :)
Thank you for your kind and encouraging feedback and for not deducting stars!
Helen (lyenochka) also kindly pointed out my error :)
You're both right - it's definitely not a haiku!!
I have to point out though, that the contest requirement doesn't mention anything about what actually constitutes a haiku :/
Best wishes as always, Debra :) x
Comment from karenina
Hi Debra! Good for you for hopping in ~ and you have plenty of time to catch up! This haiku is a reminder that every artist, at least upon his or her "apron" has a hint of Jackson Pollock in them. (smile). In my case, every painting seems to remain at that stage! Nice to read your work. I'm way behind and thus picking one or two from everyone I can to review!
Karenina
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023
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Hi Debra! Good for you for hopping in ~ and you have plenty of time to catch up! This haiku is a reminder that every artist, at least upon his or her "apron" has a hint of Jackson Pollock in them. (smile). In my case, every painting seems to remain at that stage! Nice to read your work. I'm way behind and thus picking one or two from everyone I can to review!
Karenina
Comment Written 12-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023
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Hello Karenina :)
Before we broke up for the easter holiday, we were doing some artwork with the kids inspired by Jackson Pollock, also some different artwork inspired by Wassily Kandinsky - we've had so much messy fun with all those colours!
Thank you for your great feedback :)
Best wishes as always, Debra x
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Great painter to inspire Kiddos to "express" themselves so freely! Hope your Easter was great!
Comment from lyenochka
Wouldn't it be funny if the abstract art of the apron sold for more than the painting? Great little 5-7-5 or senryu. I think a haiku needs more of a seasonal reference but the satori ending is there.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023
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Wouldn't it be funny if the abstract art of the apron sold for more than the painting? Great little 5-7-5 or senryu. I think a haiku needs more of a seasonal reference but the satori ending is there.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023
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Hi Helen :)
Thank you for your feedback.
You're right, it is definitely more 5-7-5 than haiku!
Comment from patcelaw
Sometime ago I wrote a story about using the paint palette that I was using to do some painting and how good it looked like a piece of modern Art. I enjoyed your poem very much, and I wish you the best in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023
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Sometime ago I wrote a story about using the paint palette that I was using to do some painting and how good it looked like a piece of modern Art. I enjoyed your poem very much, and I wish you the best in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023
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Hi Patricia :)
Thank you for your feedback and good luck wishes.
Kind regards, Debra
Comment from Sally Law
And so it does as well as the room and floor. Aw, but the outcome. Beautifully written and illustrated for your book and the haiku contest. Sending you my very best today as always,
Sal XOs
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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023
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And so it does as well as the room and floor. Aw, but the outcome. Beautifully written and illustrated for your book and the haiku contest. Sending you my very best today as always,
Sal XOs
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Comment Written 12-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much, Sal :) xx
