Life's Sweetest Rewards
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Summer Breeze"A collection of life's memorable cherished moments
3 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
As with some others,your culture and setting come through in you rich poetry. I love this sensory metaphor: In every bite, sweet summer sunshine." Water cleanses the soul, mind & body:
"Crystal-clear water shimmers in blue," This is lovely
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As with some others,your culture and setting come through in you rich poetry. I love this sensory metaphor: In every bite, sweet summer sunshine." Water cleanses the soul, mind & body:
"Crystal-clear water shimmers in blue," This is lovely
Comment Written 24-Jun-2023
Comment from Ginda Simpson
Your words carry us to another place, where the rhythm of the ocean waves sooth our souls and the soft breezes caress us into peace. This is beautifully written. Thanks for sharing.
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Your words carry us to another place, where the rhythm of the ocean waves sooth our souls and the soft breezes caress us into peace. This is beautifully written. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2023
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I love the idea here within but to me it seems disjointedly written, no ill intent intended, my friend, such as plea, as waves pass by, and make it anew" seem not to fit snug with the piece.
Nail it. Well done.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
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I love the idea here within but to me it seems disjointedly written, no ill intent intended, my friend, such as plea, as waves pass by, and make it anew" seem not to fit snug with the piece.
Nail it. Well done.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023
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Tom,
Thank you for your review. I revised the poem to correct the disjointedness. In the process created a better result.
All the best,
Eugene
