Like A Thief In The Night
2nd Place.29 total reviews
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Sorry I did not see this sooner, I am behind in reviewing due to having guests this past week. Congratulations on your win. Great story with a beginning to draw your reader in. Then a surprise ending. It was truly creative and clever.
Best wishes,
Mary
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Sorry I did not see this sooner, I am behind in reviewing due to having guests this past week. Congratulations on your win. Great story with a beginning to draw your reader in. Then a surprise ending. It was truly creative and clever.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment Written 24-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Mary!
Comment from Faith Williams
Congratulations, Douglas, on your second-place finish. I did vote for your excellent piece of flash so well told in so few words. I certainly didn't guess the ending. Great job!
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2023
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Congratulations, Douglas, on your second-place finish. I did vote for your excellent piece of flash so well told in so few words. I certainly didn't guess the ending. Great job!
Comment Written 23-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Faith! Another fun one!
Comment from w.j.debi
You do an excellent job of telling a full story in just 75 words. Nice twist at the end. It wasn't a physical item, but something far more precious that she took. Hopefully, she will cherish it as it is.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2023
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You do an excellent job of telling a full story in just 75 words. Nice twist at the end. It wasn't a physical item, but something far more precious that she took. Hopefully, she will cherish it as it is.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2023
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I do like these Flashes!
Comment from jenintorre
I love this little story. It has such a great surprise ending . I never would have guessed it. I really like the artwork and presentation too.I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Jen
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2023
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I love this little story. It has such a great surprise ending . I never would have guessed it. I really like the artwork and presentation too.I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Jen
Comment Written 23-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2023
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Thank you! This was a fun one to write!
Comment from John Ciarmello
Perfect, Douglas! This is an excellent 75-word and is relatable to most of us. I'm sorry she took your heart, my friend. The good news may be that perhaps she didn't bury it! Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2023
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Perfect, Douglas! This is an excellent 75-word and is relatable to most of us. I'm sorry she took your heart, my friend. The good news may be that perhaps she didn't bury it! Best, JohnC
Comment Written 22-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2023
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Ha! Good to hear from you!
Comment from Ulla
Hi Geoff, a funny little story about find that elusive love. A heart normally gets broken but in this case it was buried. A bit of an unusual term. I liked it though. All best, Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
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Hi Geoff, a funny little story about find that elusive love. A heart normally gets broken but in this case it was buried. A bit of an unusual term. I liked it though. All best, Ulla:)))
Comment Written 22-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
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I was going with the pirate theme.
Ha! Thanks for the review, my friend.
Comment from nomi338
AW, quit your fake complaining. You are happy she took, you know it, and we know it too. You are one lucky son of a gun. Many of us wish some little sweet thing would take our heart. We offer it up, but she rejects it in favor of one that might look better, but is rotten under the shiny paint.
Something tells me she got lucky as well. Good work.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
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AW, quit your fake complaining. You are happy she took, you know it, and we know it too. You are one lucky son of a gun. Many of us wish some little sweet thing would take our heart. We offer it up, but she rejects it in favor of one that might look better, but is rotten under the shiny paint.
Something tells me she got lucky as well. Good work.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
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Ha! Most people took this as a negative piece. You are the first one to pick up on that. This was actually about my wife. Very perceptive.
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Thank you. I try to actually understand what I am reviewing. I don't just count syllables, or check spelling.
Comment from PoemsOfDD
I enjoyed this condensed story of being out played by a love interest who holds the strings. A well written piece in 75 words. Just a comment here:
I hope she doesn't bury it. I thought - break it - as that is usually the case. I have never heard the term - a buried heart. But that is just me.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
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I enjoyed this condensed story of being out played by a love interest who holds the strings. A well written piece in 75 words. Just a comment here:
I hope she doesn't bury it. I thought - break it - as that is usually the case. I have never heard the term - a buried heart. But that is just me.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
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Ha. The bury it was part of the pirate theme. Plus I wrote this about my wife and we always call each other a treasure with the other saying "don?t bury me" so it?s a bit of an inside joke. Still got second! Very respectable.
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Congratulations 🥳
Comment from Evelyn Hopkins
I love your writing!! and the story it creates It's very pretty and draws attention in to the audience. Good luck and I hope you have a good day!! :))
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
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I love your writing!! and the story it creates It's very pretty and draws attention in to the audience. Good luck and I hope you have a good day!! :))
Comment Written 21-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
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Thanks
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
What a fun little story, Douglas. Congratulations on second place
in the contest. The picture was perfect. Your words were well chosen
and descriptive. I believed nothing would stand in the way of true
love for these two. You packed a lot of info in your few words.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
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What a fun little story, Douglas. Congratulations on second place
in the contest. The picture was perfect. Your words were well chosen
and descriptive. I believed nothing would stand in the way of true
love for these two. You packed a lot of info in your few words.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 21-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023
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Thanks, Jan! You are the kindest soul!