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Seasons of Change

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A collection of 30 poems in thirty days

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Comment from karenina
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Well this is a change of pace! I can't help but think of it as a metaphor for aging (ah, because this is where I "live" these days!)

I used to run wild and free...then slowed my pace, and suddenly found a walking stride that worked...that became tenuous at best.

I took a fall down some stairs on February 9th of this year. (My bicycle crash moment)

Blessed be, I managed to survive--and have even "healed!"

(Ah, but the nagging thought of that terrifying fall shadows me down every staircase...whispers to me when I venture off the beaten path at the park)

I'm just now learning to be thankful for the "pogo sticks" of life. Even a broomstick would be fine!)

I might well have been gone for good but for a fortuitous landing!

Karenina




 Comment Written 02-May-2023


reply by the author on 02-May-2023
    ooohhh, I am so sorry to read this, however it neverceases to surprise me just how resilent our Freind (physcal body) is when we need to it to most!
reply by karenina on 02-May-2023
    Yes indeed! I don't have the latest model..but this old "Ford" with the rust and the "dings" gets me where I'm going! :)
Comment from Thesis
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LOL, that's what I call having a bad day. I like the humor in this piece because it shows the humanity of the moment when he was in trouble, and after the event when he is the brunt of their jokes.

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 25-Apr-2023
    Smiling back with you, thanks!
Comment from Bill Schott
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This poem, Season of the Body, finds that the only thing worse than an embarrassing tumble on your bicycle is the razzing one receives from hus so-called friends.

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 25-Apr-2023
    Bill, thanks for abiding by my humor.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
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Have you seen the video where these daredevils bound off a precipice, never to stop til ground zero? Who does such things without having done damage to their minds to begin.

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
    About as crazy as it was for me to jump out perfectly flying airplanes just a make extra pay...
Comment from Wendy G
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Very nice writing, although that did sound llike a nasty accident. Fortunately he did not go over the cliff. I like te humour at the end about him having a pogo stick.
Well done.
Wendy
"Put In the chopper" (no need for capital for "In", and also ne need for capital for "clover".

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
    Thank you!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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Falling from a bike can lead to all sorts of injuries, but it never stops us from giving it a go and I ride my bike in the park from time to time and always wear my helmet! A fun post for the April challenge Jim, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
    Thank you, Dolly.
Comment from Angel Debbie
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I love the way you described the whole bike disaster. I would feel uneasy in a chopper and embarrassed to have my friends give me a pogo stick and tell me to play in clover. Love the humor in this. Thank You for sharing.

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
    Angel, thank you.
Comment from Gloria ....
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I very much enjoyed the humour here, J, but gee maybe a little gentler terrain might be the thing.

Bicycles can be dangerous and especially when traversing those rugged bike trails.

Much enjoyed.

Gloria

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
    Gloria, thank you.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
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This biking adventure takes a sudden, perilous turn with these lines: The deep cliff's edge was too near where he sat.
For sure, a foot or two, he'd been airborne.

Thank goodness the photo shows a helmet was being worn. It seems like some risk-takers think if there's no pain, why do it again? But I like your humorous slant on it (he felt like a schmuck). Pogo sticks - that brings back memories of fourth or fifth grade.

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 23-Apr-2023
    Thank you very much for your thoughtful comments.
Comment from lyenochka
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Lol! Loved your humor! Yes, he would be safer in the clover but not really with a pogo stick! I'm glad you could show us this side of aging when we can't take on all the physical adventures we used to do.

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 23-Apr-2023
    Thank you, Helen. I find I have to laugh and some of the new pesky nuances of aging.