Seasons of Change
Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "Seasons of Mind, Body, Spirit I"A collection of 30 poems in thirty days
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Comment from karenina
I have been opining to my grandchildren that "Faith is a verb"--
Oh yes...we learn it as a noun. A "thing" we acquire and possess and honor because we love God...
But really? It's a verb--an "action word" ~ and we practice faith every single day...
The smile as we hold open a door for a struggling weary young mom...the spontaneous "pay it forward" moment in line as we order a drive-thru coffee (so that the person behind us can know there is light beyond that which they see)--- The smile we hold, even as critical words bubble up within us because truth has been shrouded in falsehoods, but it's not our story to tell.
Jim... You are likely tired of my comments and more so as I approach the final three poems!
What I want to convey is among the many things you can tally up in your life as "good works" each one of these poems deserve to be counted!
Karenina
reply by the author on 02-May-2023
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I have been opining to my grandchildren that "Faith is a verb"--
Oh yes...we learn it as a noun. A "thing" we acquire and possess and honor because we love God...
But really? It's a verb--an "action word" ~ and we practice faith every single day...
The smile as we hold open a door for a struggling weary young mom...the spontaneous "pay it forward" moment in line as we order a drive-thru coffee (so that the person behind us can know there is light beyond that which they see)--- The smile we hold, even as critical words bubble up within us because truth has been shrouded in falsehoods, but it's not our story to tell.
Jim... You are likely tired of my comments and more so as I approach the final three poems!
What I want to convey is among the many things you can tally up in your life as "good works" each one of these poems deserve to be counted!
Karenina
Comment Written 02-May-2023
reply by the author on 02-May-2023
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Your kind words will carry for forward and I delight that we have become fast fanstorian pals!
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And so God smiled....
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This verse is thought-provoking, exploring the effects of mind and soul on the body either leaving it replenished and hydrated or simply parched like "dry plains." This in turn impacts on our thinking. Thus the cycle continues either getting stronger or weaker. I assume. The build-up of thunder does still more because in the drama of life when it steps up a gear our destiny can go either way? Sorry, perhaps gone a little astray here. Thanks for sharing, Debbie
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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This verse is thought-provoking, exploring the effects of mind and soul on the body either leaving it replenished and hydrated or simply parched like "dry plains." This in turn impacts on our thinking. Thus the cycle continues either getting stronger or weaker. I assume. The build-up of thunder does still more because in the drama of life when it steps up a gear our destiny can go either way? Sorry, perhaps gone a little astray here. Thanks for sharing, Debbie
Comment Written 27-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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Debbie, you are spot on in your comments. Thank you, Jim
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I'm so pleased about that. Bit worrying when you get someone's hard-worked verse wrong.
Comment from Frank Malley
JLR's poem reads more like a summary reaction than a poem. It includes functional references to some big observations about life and uses powerful words like 'mind, body', and 'soul.' This poem also refers to the always-thrilling experience of approaching thunder, but it doesn't seek to add something memorable to the this experience; rather, it reduces this spectacular concussion of atmospheric columns to to the question of whether to run for cover. It's a long time since I read it, but read Shakespeare's scene in King Lear where Lear and his fool are trapped within a storm. That has some genuine juice to it.
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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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JLR's poem reads more like a summary reaction than a poem. It includes functional references to some big observations about life and uses powerful words like 'mind, body', and 'soul.' This poem also refers to the always-thrilling experience of approaching thunder, but it doesn't seek to add something memorable to the this experience; rather, it reduces this spectacular concussion of atmospheric columns to to the question of whether to run for cover. It's a long time since I read it, but read Shakespeare's scene in King Lear where Lear and his fool are trapped within a storm. That has some genuine juice to it.
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Comment Written 27-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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Frank, thanks for taking so much time to read and comment.
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I'm afraid I wasn't in FS mode this morning and waxed critical. Be well!
Comment from godlucifer
a quiet mind is a quiet being. our well being is our well state of mind. a physical being is a physical state of mind which is our thoughts and feelings. your poem was well written. thanks for the read.
truly
godlucifer
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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a quiet mind is a quiet being. our well being is our well state of mind. a physical being is a physical state of mind which is our thoughts and feelings. your poem was well written. thanks for the read.
truly
godlucifer
Comment Written 26-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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Thank you for your review and comment.
Comment from Wendy G
Another well-written poem about the seasons of change in one's life, as in nature. Your work is always thoughtfully written and well expressed. Thanks for sharing this one. I enjoyed it.
Wendy
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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Another well-written poem about the seasons of change in one's life, as in nature. Your work is always thoughtfully written and well expressed. Thanks for sharing this one. I enjoyed it.
Wendy
Comment Written 26-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2023
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Wendy, thank you. Onward I go with three more poems to go. 🙏
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You have done a great job. Well done.
Comment from Sugarray77
I enjoyed reading this well-crafted FreeVerse, Jim. I see you incorporated internal rhymes, repetition and a smooth flow of thoughts and words. The last line is a fun thought to use in summation. Well done.
Melissa
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2023
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I enjoyed reading this well-crafted FreeVerse, Jim. I see you incorporated internal rhymes, repetition and a smooth flow of thoughts and words. The last line is a fun thought to use in summation. Well done.
Melissa
Comment Written 26-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2023
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Hi Freind, thank you.
Comment from patcelaw
It is true, that our thoughts and feelings do affect our physical being. I enjoyed this poem very much and you are to be commended and some of the beautiful things that you write. Patricia.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2023
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It is true, that our thoughts and feelings do affect our physical being. I enjoyed this poem very much and you are to be commended and some of the beautiful things that you write. Patricia.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2023
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You are so kind, thank you Patricia.
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Jim,
This free verse poem with a smattering of rhyme shows us how body mind and soul are interconnected to create your words or actions. The single line seems to be a link between the parts. This also could be a prologue
to all your Seasons poems.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2023
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Hi Jim,
This free verse poem with a smattering of rhyme shows us how body mind and soul are interconnected to create your words or actions. The single line seems to be a link between the parts. This also could be a prologue
to all your Seasons poems.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 26-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2023
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Joan, that is a smashing suggestion... Thank you.
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Glad you liked my suggestion about the prologue.
Joan
Comment from royowen
Yes. I think that our thoughts can affect our feelings, and our feelings can affect our biological makeup too. Many seem to have died from a broken heart, after the passings of a loved, like not wanting live anymore after the death of a loved, beautifully written Jim. Blessings, Roy,
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2023
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Yes. I think that our thoughts can affect our feelings, and our feelings can affect our biological makeup too. Many seem to have died from a broken heart, after the passings of a loved, like not wanting live anymore after the death of a loved, beautifully written Jim. Blessings, Roy,
Comment Written 26-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2023
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Thanks Roy!
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Welcome
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image and presentation.
-A well written poem with effective imagery
and occasional rhyme.
-I like the idea of "a cycle to mind, body, and soul."
-A good comparison to "spring rains."
-A very good concluding verse.
-You are doing a great job with the project!!
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2023
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-Very nice image and presentation.
-A well written poem with effective imagery
and occasional rhyme.
-I like the idea of "a cycle to mind, body, and soul."
-A good comparison to "spring rains."
-A very good concluding verse.
-You are doing a great job with the project!!
Comment Written 26-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2023
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Thanks Pam!
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You are welcome.