Seasons of Change
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Seasons of Mind, Body, Spirit IV"A collection of 30 poems in thirty days
17 total reviews
Comment from karenina
At last, I can bestow the six stars I would have happily given for every one of your poems along this April journey!
Your very sense of reverence for your theme was quickly realized...and each poem along the way has gently urged me forward, stayed with me long past the reading...sparked a conversation with my family and with my God.
What more can one true soul ask than to be so inspired he is eager to take the long journey, if only to prove the path is winding, and often rugged, but oh, it's so worth it!
Thank you a million times over, Jim.
"Lo, even with a crooked stick, a believer can find the straight, narrow path."
I will not forget this, for you've proven to me it's true!
Karenina
reply by the author on 02-May-2023
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At last, I can bestow the six stars I would have happily given for every one of your poems along this April journey!
Your very sense of reverence for your theme was quickly realized...and each poem along the way has gently urged me forward, stayed with me long past the reading...sparked a conversation with my family and with my God.
What more can one true soul ask than to be so inspired he is eager to take the long journey, if only to prove the path is winding, and often rugged, but oh, it's so worth it!
Thank you a million times over, Jim.
"Lo, even with a crooked stick, a believer can find the straight, narrow path."
I will not forget this, for you've proven to me it's true!
Karenina
Comment Written 02-May-2023
reply by the author on 02-May-2023
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You have made my day complete as I bask in the bright yellow six stars, 🙏🎶🎶🙏
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I applied for thirty extra... (wink)
Apparently I have no pull...
Consider these six spread over your thirty poems!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork and presentation.
-You did a really good job with this
poem and the whole project.
-I get the feeling it was a journey
you wanted to share to show how
things were and how they changed for the better.
-I admire you for doing that.
-I like the theme of the walking stick for this one,
and how it took on different shapes, but you
kept walking, and it was always there.
-It is also a symbol of strength, like the
tree in the picture that has seen some
tough times, but it's still surviving.
-A very good closing verse and
excellent job on the whole project.
reply by the author on 01-May-2023
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-Very nice artwork and presentation.
-You did a really good job with this
poem and the whole project.
-I get the feeling it was a journey
you wanted to share to show how
things were and how they changed for the better.
-I admire you for doing that.
-I like the theme of the walking stick for this one,
and how it took on different shapes, but you
kept walking, and it was always there.
-It is also a symbol of strength, like the
tree in the picture that has seen some
tough times, but it's still surviving.
-A very good closing verse and
excellent job on the whole project.
Comment Written 01-May-2023
reply by the author on 01-May-2023
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Pam, thank you. I appreciate support of the project throughout the month. Jim
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You are very welcome, Jim.
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi JLR well done on your thirty days and all your poems were thoughtful and revealed your self. Always nice to read and had depth in your words
A good poem to complete this challenge
Cheers Chris
reply by the author on 01-May-2023
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Hi JLR well done on your thirty days and all your poems were thoughtful and revealed your self. Always nice to read and had depth in your words
A good poem to complete this challenge
Cheers Chris
Comment Written 01-May-2023
reply by the author on 01-May-2023
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Thank you Chris.
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
Very good writing! I can relate to such a crooked path. At 25 years old, the same year I became a mother, I was diagnosed with multiple sclerosis lost my sight several times and left my violent and cheating now ex husband. Sometimes the crooked path is their to help you. It helped me leave violence, Best wishes, :))
Alex
reply by the author on 01-May-2023
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Very good writing! I can relate to such a crooked path. At 25 years old, the same year I became a mother, I was diagnosed with multiple sclerosis lost my sight several times and left my violent and cheating now ex husband. Sometimes the crooked path is their to help you. It helped me leave violence, Best wishes, :))
Alex
Comment Written 01-May-2023
reply by the author on 01-May-2023
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Alex, know that even though it times we seemingly have to walk across a bed of hot coal in order to get to the other side of life, there is much more life ahead where the cool deep waters of happiness and joy gush freely. I send prayers for the highest and best for you and your health to be well treated for many, many years.
Comment from Gloria ....
Very well done, J. Your strength is in your free verse and you have done a stellar job showing your life's journey through the seasons with the NaPo project.
A fine conclusion to writing a poem a day. Congratulations to you!
Gloria
reply by the author on 01-May-2023
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Very well done, J. Your strength is in your free verse and you have done a stellar job showing your life's journey through the seasons with the NaPo project.
A fine conclusion to writing a poem a day. Congratulations to you!
Gloria
Comment Written 01-May-2023
reply by the author on 01-May-2023
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Thank you Gloria. I value your comments in regard to my free verse efforts.
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
This is a good comparison throughout. It was also an excellent contrast of two paths. The spiritual path stanza was the best one for the truth you were portraying.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2023
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This is a good comparison throughout. It was also an excellent contrast of two paths. The spiritual path stanza was the best one for the truth you were portraying.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2023
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Verna, thank you for hanging in there for the whole month of April. I value your support and encouragement.
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I've enjoyed your poems!
Comment from Wendy G
A very thoughtful poem, but just one part didn't sit so well - the second last stanza. I did wonder if the second line could be something like "whether this stick would my path forsake", and the last line stop at "Trusting that this stick would never break", as I didn't see why a stick would break your knee, so the rhyme seemed a bit forced. However, it is YOUR poem, so I won't feel offended if you like it as it is. I thought it very original and clever, and it's accompanied by a well-chosen image.
Wendy
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2023
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A very thoughtful poem, but just one part didn't sit so well - the second last stanza. I did wonder if the second line could be something like "whether this stick would my path forsake", and the last line stop at "Trusting that this stick would never break", as I didn't see why a stick would break your knee, so the rhyme seemed a bit forced. However, it is YOUR poem, so I won't feel offended if you like it as it is. I thought it very original and clever, and it's accompanied by a well-chosen image.
Wendy
Comment Written 30-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2023
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Wendy, oh my! In a knee jerk reaction I change the original stanza, your effort made clear my ways. I agree 100%. Thank you.
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You are welcome. Glad to help. You are a fine poet.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Wonderful piece and interesting picture. I first seen a gnarled tree, then a seal, followed by a long-haired man, and even in the trunk I saw another face. As for your writing, I believe there will be many that think it is a piece written about them/us. Tom H
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2023
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Wonderful piece and interesting picture. I first seen a gnarled tree, then a seal, followed by a long-haired man, and even in the trunk I saw another face. As for your writing, I believe there will be many that think it is a piece written about them/us. Tom H
Comment Written 29-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2023
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Thanks Tom, yes the image allows fprmteh mind to see many possibilities, must like all the paths we take in a lifetime. Thanks for muddlin* through my 30 poems in thirty days.
Comment from Julie Lau
A very erudite and skilfully constructed poem within the guidelines you have set yourself. I like the allusion to the crooked stick with which you have had to manage life's pathways. I guess it was a fallen branch from the tree in the illustration.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2023
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A very erudite and skilfully constructed poem within the guidelines you have set yourself. I like the allusion to the crooked stick with which you have had to manage life's pathways. I guess it was a fallen branch from the tree in the illustration.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2023
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Thank you Julie, if one studies the trick of the tree, one could envision the face of an old man. Thank you for your review and positive comments.
Comment from Kerry Foley
I really wish I had six stars. This poem really touched my heart, because it resonated with my life completely, I totally connected to it.
Crooked stick I love it!
ð??? Bravo!
- Kerry
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2023
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I really wish I had six stars. This poem really touched my heart, because it resonated with my life completely, I totally connected to it.
Crooked stick I love it!
ð??? Bravo!
- Kerry
Comment Written 29-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2023
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Kerry, Bravo, to you young lady! Bravo. Thank you for muddling through my thirty poems in thirty days.