Comment from Jumbo J

Exceptional

Hi MariVal,
my Gypsy Queen.
Didn't know whether to smile-laugh, cry, or let the emotion run over me as I thought to myself... "self, it's only a matter of time and mind with a heaped-healthy serving of perspective."

A beautifully composed, constructed and presented Gogyohka poem... and the added visual application of the words drifting, 'to be washed away offshore'. It somehow comforted me as I connected to these words, as yet another smile passed my lips as I saw the notes... well, more the proverb and realised this could mean only one thing. The deep connection goes both ways.

Thank you!

With our thoughts we create...
the tools to be as fluid as water.

Kind regards,
James.

 Comment Written 17-May-2023

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reply by the author on 17-May-2023

Hello, James, I always get happy when I see your name amidst my reviews. I hope you are feeling better.

Not many reviewed this poem, probably because the title is too real, but I wrote it for a close friend of mine who deals with pain every day. I believe you know him too. ;)

Anyway, I am happy you like it and I appreciate your exceptional six stars review. Thank you, James.

Gypsy super hugs
"Smile, breathe, and go slowly." - Thich Nhat Hanh

reply by Jumbo J on 17-May-2023

Ah Thich Nhat Hanh knows me so well!
I do hope your 'close friend' learns that acceptance is the first stage of greater harmony toward a better life.

Just breathe~~~~~~~~~~~ breathe out...
We are strong enough to handle our challenges, wise enough to find a solution to our problems and capable enough to do whatever needs to be done to allow a harmonic co-existence. Hmmmmmm, I better start listening to myself?
I'm taking those super hugs, it cold here today!

reply by the author on 17-May-2023

acceptance is a hard one, it reminds me of an AA prayer...

"God, grant me the serenity to accept the things I cannot change, The courage to change the things I can, And the wisdom to know the difference. "

I am sending you some Los Angeles sunshine your way...

besitos y abrazos

Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

This was such a mood poem. To have the pain of life washed away. A brilliant image of the tide coming in and physically lifting the pain. Washing the sands clean. Beautiful poem and beautiful form. Gretchen

 Comment Written 17-May-2023

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reply by the author on 17-May-2023

Thank you, Gretchen :)

Gypsy hugs
"learn the rules like a pro, so you can break them like an artist". - Picasso

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Wouldn't it be wonderful if all pain in the world would disappear? I think so. Thank you for sharing this package with us. It's beautiful from artwork to the poem.

 Comment Written 17-May-2023

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reply by the author on 17-May-2023

Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem.

Gypsy hugs
"learn the rules like a pro, so you can break them like an artist". - Picasso

Comment from Mike Stevens

Excellent

Another fine poem, Gypsy----and cool picture at the end, reflects the pain of mental desolation very well----we're our own worst enemy--at least from the neck up!

 Comment Written 17-May-2023

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reply by the author on 17-May-2023

Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem.

Gypsy hugs
"learn the rules like a pro, so you can break them like an artist". - Picasso

Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

love how you did the fifth line... adds to the imagery of the sand castles being washed away

great word choices and flow
cool pic and colour scheme

thank you for sharing
shelley :)

 Comment Written 17-May-2023

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reply by the author on 17-May-2023

Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem.

Gypsy hugs
"learn the rules like a pro, so you can break them like an artist". - Picasso

Comment from AP Apgar

Excellent

I like your Gogyohka poem- good picture presentation- I like the Buddhist proverb!! Nice!
Poem tell a story of pain - waiting to be washed away - still choosing to suffer- optional- while waiting- good analogy- fragile sand castles- good job AP

 Comment Written 17-May-2023

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reply by the author on 17-May-2023

Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem.

Gypsy hugs
"learn the rules like a pro, so you can break them like an artist". - Picasso

Comment from Shirley E Kennedy

Exceptional

Your poetry is so polished professional and beautiful on so many levels
It's always a pleasure to view and review your mastery of both word and chosen style.
The presentation is a perfect fit creating a perfect whole.
Blessings
Shirley

 Comment Written 17-May-2023

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reply by the author on 17-May-2023

Thank you very much, Shirley, I really appreciate your exceptional six stars review and kind words. May you have a wonderful day.

Gypsy hugs
"learn the rules like a pro, so you can break them like an artist". - Picasso

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

We suffer pain in many ways in life and our attitude to it can either make it worse or make it bearable, it is always our own choice, a poignant write. Things we cannot change we have to accept, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 17-May-2023

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reply by the author on 17-May-2023

That's true. I had a friend in mind. He suffers from chronic pain.

Thank you very much, dolly.

Gypsy hugs

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

That's the unfortunate thing about life on earth and living in a fallen world, we cannot avoid pain in our lives but we can wait for all of it to be washed away when we go to Heaven.

 Comment Written 17-May-2023

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reply by the author on 17-May-2023

Yes, that's true. Thank you for taking the time to review my poem. I was thinking of a friend who is in constant pain.

Love,
Marival