Beneath the Tranquil Sheen
Be a swan.86 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This is such a lovely poem. I know what you mean about what we see and what is actually going on beneath this tranquil scene, her paddle feet are working tirelessly to keep her afloat and cruising along the waters. Beautiful poem and gorgeous photo. Well done and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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This is such a lovely poem. I know what you mean about what we see and what is actually going on beneath this tranquil scene, her paddle feet are working tirelessly to keep her afloat and cruising along the waters. Beautiful poem and gorgeous photo. Well done and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 09-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much, Sandra. I?m truly honored by your review and feedback.
Xo
Jessica
Comment from Zoe Webb
Really liked the last stanza, and the image of the lonely swan. The styling on this is great, as well. I like the color and font choice here. She was a worthy muse indeed!
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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Really liked the last stanza, and the image of the lonely swan. The styling on this is great, as well. I like the color and font choice here. She was a worthy muse indeed!
Comment Written 08-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much, Zoe. Truly appreciate that!
Xo Jessica
Comment from Alina Clemens
Very beautiful piece with very striking imagery. And the message and parallels drawn throughout were very poignant and thought-provoking. The near rhymes were executed excellently. Very well done!
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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Very beautiful piece with very striking imagery. And the message and parallels drawn throughout were very poignant and thought-provoking. The near rhymes were executed excellently. Very well done!
Comment Written 08-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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Alina thank you so much, I am truly grateful for your review!
Xo
Jessica
Comment from Aussie
Once in England, I watched the Queen's swans. I loved your poem/story and wonder...maybe it is a lonely male? Who knows if it is? Swans were revered in the olden days but Henry V111 loved a delicacy; swan tongues were eaten! K xx
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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Once in England, I watched the Queen's swans. I loved your poem/story and wonder...maybe it is a lonely male? Who knows if it is? Swans were revered in the olden days but Henry V111 loved a delicacy; swan tongues were eaten! K xx
Comment Written 08-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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That is an excellent thought? and truth be told- I don?t know! This is too funny, because my husband asked me just yesterday if the Swan might be male lol I always appreciate your kind words and feedback! Thank you for your insight!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
It's sad to think she is alone. You did a great job,
Jessica, with your contest entry. Your words were
descriptive of the pond, your thoughts, and the
beautiful swan. The rhymes worked well as did
the alliteration of r, s, p, n to name several. Your
advice at the end was well thought out.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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It's sad to think she is alone. You did a great job,
Jessica, with your contest entry. Your words were
descriptive of the pond, your thoughts, and the
beautiful swan. The rhymes worked well as did
the alliteration of r, s, p, n to name several. Your
advice at the end was well thought out.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 08-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much, Jan! I appreciate your thought on this! :)
Xo
Jessica
Comment from patcelaw
I have often wondered if the creatures in nature that mate for life do tend to be depressed when they lose their mate. I'd rather think this may well be the case with this particular, is one in the picture. Patricia.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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I have often wondered if the creatures in nature that mate for life do tend to be depressed when they lose their mate. I'd rather think this may well be the case with this particular, is one in the picture. Patricia.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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Thank you for your review and insight! :)
Xo
Jessica
Comment from Nicki Nance
This is a lovely close up of nature, and your imagery, especially as it relates to her movement, is brilliant. I liked the alliteration throughout. It flows seamlessly.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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This is a lovely close up of nature, and your imagery, especially as it relates to her movement, is brilliant. I liked the alliteration throughout. It flows seamlessly.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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Thank you, Nicki! I appreciate that!
Xo
Jessica
Comment from June Sargent
This is a beautiful tribute to a lovely swan whose story we may never know. But we can imagine that she has survived some kind of loss and is making the best of her situation. Yes, we can learn from nature. A great entry for the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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This is a beautiful tribute to a lovely swan whose story we may never know. But we can imagine that she has survived some kind of loss and is making the best of her situation. Yes, we can learn from nature. A great entry for the contest.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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Thanks so much, June!
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
I saved this for you and thought it was going for another, but this is so beautifully told. We have a creek that my son built 2 bridges over it. It separates their home and ours. My grandsons have been coming to see grandma over that bridge for 15 years, but the beautiful part are the swans that stay close by because they do get fed. You did such a great job on this and it gave me the chills. Lol, it is a good thing that we don't vote in this one because besides myself, it would be a hard choice. Awesome job and well worth the six.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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I saved this for you and thought it was going for another, but this is so beautifully told. We have a creek that my son built 2 bridges over it. It separates their home and ours. My grandsons have been coming to see grandma over that bridge for 15 years, but the beautiful part are the swans that stay close by because they do get fed. You did such a great job on this and it gave me the chills. Lol, it is a good thing that we don't vote in this one because besides myself, it would be a hard choice. Awesome job and well worth the six.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much my Debi!!! You know your words mean the world to me!
Much love always!
Xoxo
Jess
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Jessica.
This is both a sad and hopeful poem. She is alone for the rest of her life. But she seems comfortable to stay where she is. I didn't know that she had to paddle to stay in one place.
Congrats on winning the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great day
Joan
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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Hi Jessica.
This is both a sad and hopeful poem. She is alone for the rest of her life. But she seems comfortable to stay where she is. I didn't know that she had to paddle to stay in one place.
Congrats on winning the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great day
Joan
Comment Written 08-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much, Joan!
Xo
Jessica
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You are most kindly welcome, Jessica.
Joan
