Comment from Lisasview

Excellent

I really did enjoy reading this one of your and wish you the very best in the contest.
I never knew about this form until I read another poets work...
Really so interesting,
Lisa, new to this site

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Jun-2023

Thank you very much for the feedback.

reply by Lisasview on 11-Jun-2023

You are most welcome

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

When we have lived a long life we can only be grateful and know that we have a long history and celebrate each day we have left, I enjoyed your words, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Jun-2023

Thank you very much for dropping by and giving me your comments

Comment from Carol Hillebrenner

Excellent

This is an interesting theme for a poem. Not often do people write about the end of life with such acceptance. The picture of the Ferris wheel is a neat touch to getting your point across.

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Jun-2023

Thank you very much .The wheel is symbolic in so many ways

Comment from Faith Williams

Excellent

I love the idea of leaving this earth with 'no sighs' or no regrets. It's been interesting to read the various jisei poems and what poets have used as metaphors for life and death. Your wheel is one of the more unique ones.
Thanks so much for sharing.

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Jun-2023

Thank you .hope most of us would be able to do that.

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Great choice of words in your jisei poem. I liked the "twilight" of life and the contentment of "no sighs" and the labor of living with the verb "trudged." Perfect reflection for our stage in life!

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Jun-2023

Thank you Helen. It took some time to get the word' trudge'

reply by lyenochka on 11-Jun-2023

It's a great choice!
Have a great week. I'm off to bed. 💞💖

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Hello, thank you for participating in the haiku club Jisei poem event. Great entry with a good syllable count and connection between lines. Beautiful presentation and imagery. The satori is a good twist.

Good job,

Gypsy

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Jun-2023

Thank you very much

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Nice image and presentation, Sanku.
-You wrote a good poem with a good topic.
-The opening lines establish the premise.
-A very good pivot line.
-I like the closing lines because you
create a peaceful mood and seem
satisfied with what you have done so far.
-I enjoyed your poem.

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 07-Jun-2023

Thank you very much for the suggestion i have taken off 'my .Thanks for dropping by.

reply by Pam (respa) on 07-Jun-2023

You are very welcome. Good job with the change. I took the suggestion out of the review.

Comment from Ginda Simpson

Excellent

I love this verse you have written about how quickly the ferris wheel of our life spins. It is indeed a ride, and in the end we can all hope for peaceful acceptance of the road we traveled. I really enjoyed the metaphor you chose to use.

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Jun-2023

Thank you very much.

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

This is a beautiful poem, written, in a very outstanding way. I know that it was a blessing and is a blessing to the club event. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. Patricia.

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Jun-2023

Thank you very much

Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)

Excellent

I enjoyed this poem very much. Especially the beginning resonated with me. It is true that now looking back on my life, it has flown by so quickly I don't know where it has gone - trickling through my fingers like grains of sand. kay

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Jun-2023

Thank you very much.