One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from JSD
Always get excited when I see you've written something new. This is lovely and looks like a challenge I might relish. Your imagery and description are beautiful.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Always get excited when I see you've written something new. This is lovely and looks like a challenge I might relish. Your imagery and description are beautiful.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much for your kind words and excellent five stars review. May you have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from patcelaw
I really enjoyed reading your new form for the writing that you have down here. I like the idea of having each stanza represent a different sense that we experience. It is well written, and it is presented beautifully. Thank you for sharing. Patricia.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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I really enjoyed reading your new form for the writing that you have down here. I like the idea of having each stanza represent a different sense that we experience. It is well written, and it is presented beautifully. Thank you for sharing. Patricia.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Patricia,
Thank you very much for your kind words and excellent five stars review. May you have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Lisasview
Oh such a clever idea for the structure of a new style poem....
Senses.... really wonderful.... You have an excellent imagination....
Really liked it...
Lisasview, new to this site
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Oh such a clever idea for the structure of a new style poem....
Senses.... really wonderful.... You have an excellent imagination....
Really liked it...
Lisasview, new to this site
Comment Written 22-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Welcome, Lisa, feel free to contact me if you need help.
Thank you very much for your kind words and excellent five stars review.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from royowen
I think you've done extremely well, it's not easy to cover all the senses in a poem, so imaginatively compiled with great descriptive phrases to season the lovely poem. Well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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I think you've done extremely well, it's not easy to cover all the senses in a poem, so imaginatively compiled with great descriptive phrases to season the lovely poem. Well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 22-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Roy,
Thank you very much for your kind words and excellent five stars review. May you have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
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Most welcime
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Hi Gypsy,
Congrats on your new poetry form.
You have created a fine example in words and images to showcase the style components.
Your presentation is also perfect and stunning.
Blessings
Shirley
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Hi Gypsy,
Congrats on your new poetry form.
You have created a fine example in words and images to showcase the style components.
Your presentation is also perfect and stunning.
Blessings
Shirley
Comment Written 22-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Shirley,
Thank you very much for your kind words and exceptional six stars review. May you have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Not sure I detected smell in your five senses poem here, but I did feel your passion and see these lovers enjoying a special moment together, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Not sure I detected smell in your five senses poem here, but I did feel your passion and see these lovers enjoying a special moment together, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 21-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Sea breeze has a distinct smell.
Thank you, dolly.
Gypsy
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your poem about the senses- interesting challenge- good picture presentation- good use of descriptive metaphors- couple of suggestions-
(Sunshine)-warm your tender heart-
(Breeze upon our backs)- gently guiding every step?
Just a thought- good job hug -AP
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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I like your poem about the senses- interesting challenge- good picture presentation- good use of descriptive metaphors- couple of suggestions-
(Sunshine)-warm your tender heart-
(Breeze upon our backs)- gently guiding every step?
Just a thought- good job hug -AP
Comment Written 21-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Thank you, AP, I adapted some of your suggestions but not all and ended up changing other stuff. Each line is 8 syllables.
gypsy hugs
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All just suggestions G - like they say in the program- ?take what you want and leave the rest? -lol - hug
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I've done the steps too
Thank you for the review
Comment from GWHARGIS
There is something about your poetry that makes me want to see into the players of your words. It's like watching a couple in the midst of their embrace. Great poem. Very evocative. Gretchen
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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There is something about your poetry that makes me want to see into the players of your words. It's like watching a couple in the midst of their embrace. Great poem. Very evocative. Gretchen
Comment Written 21-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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I love your reviews, you really know how I feel when I write, you are very perceptive. Thank you, Gretchen. :)
gypsy hugs
Comment from ImaginosBuzzardoDesdinova
A sensational poem in every sense of the word. Though I must confess, I would rather listen to Oysters than eat them. Still, I really enjoyed this poem.
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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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A sensational poem in every sense of the word. Though I must confess, I would rather listen to Oysters than eat them. Still, I really enjoyed this poem.
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Comment Written 21-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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hahaha how do you listen to oysters?
thank you very much for the review and kind words. :)
gypsy hugs
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With more cowbell!
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Hahaha. I love that SNL episode.
Comment from lyenochka
Great job evoking all those sensations such as the feeling of being enveloped by the sun and wind and also the sense of taste in the foods as well as the sound of laughter! Great poem of passion!
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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Great job evoking all those sensations such as the feeling of being enveloped by the sun and wind and also the sense of taste in the foods as well as the sound of laughter! Great poem of passion!
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Comment Written 21-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Thank you, big sister. It was fun creating this new form. I am going to use it in my club next week.
love,
marival
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Great idea! Using all these senses is a good technique in prose writing, too!
