Fear
Recognizing the fear3 total reviews
Comment from Paul Manton
Dear Belinda,
Thank you for this revealing and heartfelt poem.
Really, free verse, rhymed in couplets, you fight against sometimes overwhelming fear. In one sense, fear is natural to all of us - it makes us aware of danger, and may save our lives: having no fear of walking on the freeway is not recommended!
On the other hand, some fear may be intense and illogical - famously explained (in some cases) by Freudian analysis. I am very afraid of heights (not uncommon) and there are hundreds of other phobias available!
But there is also spiritual and mental fear which requires support, medical intervention and prayer. Your 'voices from beyond' will fit into one of these categories. Only you know what is the appropriate action to take - and in the second part of your poem you address the problem to God, who is great enough to overcome the fear. Still, you need to let Him act - through the agency of prayer, the Church and good friends, not forgetting that medical agencies are put there by the Lord, not as an alternative, but a complementary support for all of us.
Not much to say technically: some of the rhymes need a fix - especially the last one. I cannot think of a really good replacement for 'feat' - but 'feat' and 'feet' doesn't work - so maybe 'God is King/Lord' (of the world) I must repeat' might work, but you might consider a total rewrite of those two lines.
A very brave piece of writing, Belinda. Thank you.
Paul
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023
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Dear Belinda,
Thank you for this revealing and heartfelt poem.
Really, free verse, rhymed in couplets, you fight against sometimes overwhelming fear. In one sense, fear is natural to all of us - it makes us aware of danger, and may save our lives: having no fear of walking on the freeway is not recommended!
On the other hand, some fear may be intense and illogical - famously explained (in some cases) by Freudian analysis. I am very afraid of heights (not uncommon) and there are hundreds of other phobias available!
But there is also spiritual and mental fear which requires support, medical intervention and prayer. Your 'voices from beyond' will fit into one of these categories. Only you know what is the appropriate action to take - and in the second part of your poem you address the problem to God, who is great enough to overcome the fear. Still, you need to let Him act - through the agency of prayer, the Church and good friends, not forgetting that medical agencies are put there by the Lord, not as an alternative, but a complementary support for all of us.
Not much to say technically: some of the rhymes need a fix - especially the last one. I cannot think of a really good replacement for 'feat' - but 'feat' and 'feet' doesn't work - so maybe 'God is King/Lord' (of the world) I must repeat' might work, but you might consider a total rewrite of those two lines.
A very brave piece of writing, Belinda. Thank you.
Paul
Comment Written 28-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023
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Thank you for your thoughtfulness and the review.
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You're welcome, Belinda
Comment from Eleri
This poem generally rhymes well throughout and I like the ideas behind it. However, 'Not seldom' feels a bit clunky to me. Why not use something like 'usually' instead and 'feat' this means an action as far as I know so I'm not certain how you can directly correlate it with God.
Apart from these small points this is a good poem so well done
Eleri
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023
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This poem generally rhymes well throughout and I like the ideas behind it. However, 'Not seldom' feels a bit clunky to me. Why not use something like 'usually' instead and 'feat' this means an action as far as I know so I'm not certain how you can directly correlate it with God.
Apart from these small points this is a good poem so well done
Eleri
Comment Written 28-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much.
Comment from JSD
An interesting piece that gives insight to your feelings and fears with good control of rhyme and rhythm. Well done and thank you for sharing. John "Seeing through a glass darkly".
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023
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An interesting piece that gives insight to your feelings and fears with good control of rhyme and rhythm. Well done and thank you for sharing. John "Seeing through a glass darkly".
Comment Written 28-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023
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Yes indeed. Thank you so much for your review.
