Moving on while missing You
Looping-Acrostic (everyday)17 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent Looping-Acrostic is a Loop poem. I never read one before.
The repeating lines are not forced and the poem flows well.
I know it's hard to move on. The structure makes sense, it draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2023
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Excellent Looping-Acrostic is a Loop poem. I never read one before.
The repeating lines are not forced and the poem flows well.
I know it's hard to move on. The structure makes sense, it draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 19-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2023
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Thank you Gypsy, I enjoy trying this form from time to time, and to keep them readable, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Wow you doubled the challenge with this Looping Acrostic. Our memories seem to slip out of the vault more frequently when our loved one is gone, I know mine do. Well done on both the topic and the forms.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2023
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Wow you doubled the challenge with this Looping Acrostic. Our memories seem to slip out of the vault more frequently when our loved one is gone, I know mine do. Well done on both the topic and the forms.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 19-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2023
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Thank you Valda, for your wonderful comments, as alway very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from BenThrone
Well, as if tackling one tricky form was not enough, you thumbed your nose and wrestled with two in the same poem! And it works! I'm impressed by how well this flows. I think it is interesting how memory itself becomes a character in the poem, and an unruly one at that. Well done!
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2023
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Well, as if tackling one tricky form was not enough, you thumbed your nose and wrestled with two in the same poem! And it works! I'm impressed by how well this flows. I think it is interesting how memory itself becomes a character in the poem, and an unruly one at that. Well done!
Comment Written 19-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2023
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Thank you very much, I like to try this form from time to time, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
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You are most welcome!
Comment from lyenochka
You always do such a great poems with your signature looping acrostics! I like the message of the days being in the vault of memories and hoping the beloved will continue to make memories together into the future.
Vault that's holding yesterdays emotions (yesterday's)
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2023
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You always do such a great poems with your signature looping acrostics! I like the message of the days being in the vault of memories and hoping the beloved will continue to make memories together into the future.
Vault that's holding yesterdays emotions (yesterday's)
Comment Written 18-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2023
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Thank you, I like to try these every now and then, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation, kahpot.
-Your notes are appreciated, and I am
sorry you are having to move on from a past loved one.
It isn't easy, but eventually gets better. I hope that is
the case for you.
-You always do a good job with the loop acrostic.
-I like the image "memory's vault...holding yesterday's emotions."
-I'm a little confused about these lines:
"Yearn release, to another's heart deserved
Deserved yet denied until you I ask."
-I don't know if you feel you have to ask in order
to keep the other person's memories as you move on to another.
-I guess it all depends on the nature of that relationship.
-Thanks for sharing this.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2023
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-Nice artwork and presentation, kahpot.
-Your notes are appreciated, and I am
sorry you are having to move on from a past loved one.
It isn't easy, but eventually gets better. I hope that is
the case for you.
-You always do a good job with the loop acrostic.
-I like the image "memory's vault...holding yesterday's emotions."
-I'm a little confused about these lines:
"Yearn release, to another's heart deserved
Deserved yet denied until you I ask."
-I don't know if you feel you have to ask in order
to keep the other person's memories as you move on to another.
-I guess it all depends on the nature of that relationship.
-Thanks for sharing this.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2023
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Thank you Pam, maybe I could have expressed things a bit better, I'll know for next time, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
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You are very welcome, kahpot. I think it is hard to write about our feelings, but you did a good job.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fine acrostic loop and this is not an easy form to achieve and you managed to make it look easy here. Love the sentiments of memories shared here everyday, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2023
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A fine acrostic loop and this is not an easy form to achieve and you managed to make it look easy here. Love the sentiments of memories shared here everyday, love Dolly x
Comment Written 18-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2023
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Thank you for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from June Sargent
Like the loop pen we tend to swing backwards to recapture something of the past. We can and do move on, but we hold o to bits and pieces as we create new memories. It is difficult, but poetry helps.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2023
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Like the loop pen we tend to swing backwards to recapture something of the past. We can and do move on, but we hold o to bits and pieces as we create new memories. It is difficult, but poetry helps.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2023
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Thank you very much, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Sally Law
I think this is grand, Kahpot! If this had rhymed, it would had been ruined. Lovely offering in a combined acrostic/loop poem.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal :))
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2023
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I think this is grand, Kahpot! If this had rhymed, it would had been ruined. Lovely offering in a combined acrostic/loop poem.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal :))
Comment Written 18-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2023
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Thank you so very much, yes, rhyme would have ruined it, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
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Most welcome! Best wishes!
Comment from patcelaw
This is a good acrostic for the contest, and I wish you the best in the contest. The only problem I have with it is that you use the dark fog along with the darker background if you had used like a pink or white for the font on the darker brown background, it would've been easier for people with vision problems like I have to be able to read the lawn. The only way I know what it said was because I was able to listen to it.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2023
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This is a good acrostic for the contest, and I wish you the best in the contest. The only problem I have with it is that you use the dark fog along with the darker background if you had used like a pink or white for the font on the darker brown background, it would've been easier for people with vision problems like I have to be able to read the lawn. The only way I know what it said was because I was able to listen to it.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2023
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Thank you very much, I understand what your saying and will remember it for the future, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Tom Horonzy
The artwork is grand, and the concept superb, but here and there, beginning on line one, rests a restlessness for me as if it is inharmonious.
Another would be line six - until you I ask" ???
Lastly, why is thoughtfully dissected into two words?
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2023
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The artwork is grand, and the concept superb, but here and there, beginning on line one, rests a restlessness for me as if it is inharmonious.
Another would be line six - until you I ask" ???
Lastly, why is thoughtfully dissected into two words?
Comment Written 18-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2023
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Thank you for your wonderful comments, I re-read your suggestion and agree it works as one word, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
