If Tomorrow Never Comes
On April 13, 2029, Asteroid Apophis will pass close to earth10 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
An early twist for the reader to absorb: "We are both over eighty, honey. Where shall we go? Are we not supposed to stick it out through thick and thin" Was this difficult to write. It certainly was difficult to read. This is the sign of an excellent writer. Emote emote emote...our goal. You have accomplished that . A+ quality.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2023
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An early twist for the reader to absorb: "We are both over eighty, honey. Where shall we go? Are we not supposed to stick it out through thick and thin" Was this difficult to write. It certainly was difficult to read. This is the sign of an excellent writer. Emote emote emote...our goal. You have accomplished that . A+ quality.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2023
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Hello Liz,
Thank you so much for your kind words and shower of stars!!!
You encourage me to write better!!!
Mario
The story came out 2nd place in the contest)
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I'mhappy you placed 2nd...that's great. It certainly is a moving account.
Comment from Andrea Kepple
I love your opening line. It's a great line that has so many possibilities to capture the reader's attention and draw them into your story. I wish you the best of luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2023
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I love your opening line. It's a great line that has so many possibilities to capture the reader's attention and draw them into your story. I wish you the best of luck with the contest.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2023
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Thanks so much for your positive review!!!
Really appreciate it!!
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Very nice story. Well done.
April 13, 2029. 04:00 PM. - Placing a 0 in front of the 4 implies a 24 hour clock, meaning 4 in the morning. But the PM is contradictory. I would use one, or the other, the zero, or the PM, not both.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2023
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Very nice story. Well done.
April 13, 2029. 04:00 PM. - Placing a 0 in front of the 4 implies a 24 hour clock, meaning 4 in the morning. But the PM is contradictory. I would use one, or the other, the zero, or the PM, not both.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2023
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Very good point, Wayne. Thanks for the constructive feedback.
Comment from lyenochka
You met the challenge well and you even used the real name of an asteroid which at one time was predicted to collide with Earth until 2021, the recalculations determined that we're okay for another century. But I liked your very personal and endearing way this couple faced Doomsday together. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2023
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You met the challenge well and you even used the real name of an asteroid which at one time was predicted to collide with Earth until 2021, the recalculations determined that we're okay for another century. But I liked your very personal and endearing way this couple faced Doomsday together. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 22-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2023
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Thank you so much for your kind review!!!
Comment from Wendy G
Cleverly written, original and different, and some very moving moments about their love and care for each other - so one must read on to find out f their fears come true. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2023
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Cleverly written, original and different, and some very moving moments about their love and care for each other - so one must read on to find out f their fears come true. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 21-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2023
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Thanks for your kind review Wendy!!!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh my goodness this is a sad write as the house was consumed by flames eventually and they would soon die, how awful, I think I would fight until the last to live, but these two succumbed to death so easily, a fine write and I am glad it is fiction, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2023
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Oh my goodness this is a sad write as the house was consumed by flames eventually and they would soon die, how awful, I think I would fight until the last to live, but these two succumbed to death so easily, a fine write and I am glad it is fiction, love Dolly x
Comment Written 21-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2023
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Hello Dolly,
Thank you so much for your review!!!
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow, your story is actually doomist, and in the same way sweet, why run, it's better to get through or not, with the one that was by your side always. Thank you so much for sharing and good luck with the contest and with your writings.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2023
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Wow, your story is actually doomist, and in the same way sweet, why run, it's better to get through or not, with the one that was by your side always. Thank you so much for sharing and good luck with the contest and with your writings.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2023
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Hi Iza,
I am happy to meet you for the first time. I hope we meet again sometime out of a contest, so we can greet each other properly.
Thank you so much for your kind review!!!
BTW, I have just read a few of your work... impressive!!!
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Good luck with the contest, your story is the full doomsday on display.
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Thank you!!!!!
Comment from Rachelle Allen
If you get to die being held by the love of your life, I guess you have achieved the ultimate gift. It's as close to perfect as death gets, I'm thinking. So, although this is a doomsday scenario, it's also a very sweet love story. Nicely done, Mystery Writer. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2023
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If you get to die being held by the love of your life, I guess you have achieved the ultimate gift. It's as close to perfect as death gets, I'm thinking. So, although this is a doomsday scenario, it's also a very sweet love story. Nicely done, Mystery Writer. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2023
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Thanks so much for your kind review Rachelle!!!
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Thanks so much for the beautiful story I got to read!! xo
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As as said before, if you have read my other stories, you would find it easy to demystify me...LOL!!!
Comment from royowen
Such a sad story, but I see that this story is a doomsday story, but above all that there is a love story going on, and to die together on this, the last day, I loved the overriding theme, although it is a doomsday work, I enjoyed the devotion of the couple, beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2023
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Such a sad story, but I see that this story is a doomsday story, but above all that there is a love story going on, and to die together on this, the last day, I loved the overriding theme, although it is a doomsday work, I enjoyed the devotion of the couple, beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 19-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2023
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Thank you so much Roy, for your kind words.
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Most welcome
Comment from Bill Schott
This story, If Tomorrow Never Comes, is a poignant piece that reminds the readers that an end will come someday, though we may not have the day or hour down. We can only hope we face our end with such grace.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2023
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This story, If Tomorrow Never Comes, is a poignant piece that reminds the readers that an end will come someday, though we may not have the day or hour down. We can only hope we face our end with such grace.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2023
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Thank you Bill, for your encouraging review and so generous stars!!! Means a lot to me!!
