You Killed My Daddy
Even a loaded six-gun can't bury the past.3 total reviews
Comment from prettybluebirds
Interesting story. It gets confusing in spots, but I backtracked and figured it out. The end was unique and a bit of a surprise. I wish you worlds of luck in the contest.
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Interesting story. It gets confusing in spots, but I backtracked and figured it out. The end was unique and a bit of a surprise. I wish you worlds of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2023
Comment from Nina Sexton
Good story. I recommend getting help from an editor for format and grammar issues. Also, try using the show not tell method, rather than mixed dialogue in paragraphs.
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Good story. I recommend getting help from an editor for format and grammar issues. Also, try using the show not tell method, rather than mixed dialogue in paragraphs.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2023
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
Excellent writing and story. I don't usually like Westerns but your interesting and authentic dialogues kept me reading. You show human emotions to which, people can relate. Best wishes!
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Excellent writing and story. I don't usually like Westerns but your interesting and authentic dialogues kept me reading. You show human emotions to which, people can relate. Best wishes!
Comment Written 26-Jul-2023
