Midnight Moon
A Club Entry24 total reviews
Comment from Raul1
The sentences flow with clarity. It's beautifully written. Well done. It is clear and concise. I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. Thank you for sharing! Excellent work!
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2023
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The sentences flow with clarity. It's beautifully written. Well done. It is clear and concise. I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. Thank you for sharing! Excellent work!
Comment Written 11-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2023
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Thank you, Raul.
Have a great weekend!
Comment from Loren .
This is sad in the respect that it shows a disillusioned marriage . It is hard to imagine anything more hurtful. The tearing out of a part of one's heart. And yet the final stanza shows an indomitable spirit. This calls to judgment, was there true love and an eternal pledge to this commitment. It is encouraging that this wounded soul is healing with resolve. Loren
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2023
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This is sad in the respect that it shows a disillusioned marriage . It is hard to imagine anything more hurtful. The tearing out of a part of one's heart. And yet the final stanza shows an indomitable spirit. This calls to judgment, was there true love and an eternal pledge to this commitment. It is encouraging that this wounded soul is healing with resolve. Loren
Comment Written 11-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2023
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my verse.
Enjoy the weekend!
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Enjoyed the poem. We can feel the cold darkness of the night that can't cocoon her any longer. The aloneness she feels from being rejected by the one she was to depend on. We all have been there.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2023
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Enjoyed the poem. We can feel the cold darkness of the night that can't cocoon her any longer. The aloneness she feels from being rejected by the one she was to depend on. We all have been there.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2023
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my verse.
Comment from Carol Clark2
You've described well the woman who has been betrayed, perhaps her marriage vows broken by an unfaithful spouse. I like that her warrior spirit soldiers on, but I hope she finds a better resolution to her situation. 'This too shall pass' doesn't offer much hope for her sorrow. Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2023
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You've described well the woman who has been betrayed, perhaps her marriage vows broken by an unfaithful spouse. I like that her warrior spirit soldiers on, but I hope she finds a better resolution to her situation. 'This too shall pass' doesn't offer much hope for her sorrow. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 11-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2023
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Thanks for your review, Carol.
In this verse,
"she"is me.
I suppose that I am using poetry as a tool to cope with my 25 year marriage ending.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a really emotional poem with so much sadness going on. Only an indominable spirit could end on such an up note, soldiering on with a warrior's spirit.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2023
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This is a really emotional poem with so much sadness going on. Only an indominable spirit could end on such an up note, soldiering on with a warrior's spirit.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2023
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Thank you, Carol.
Enjoy your evening!
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Thank you, Carol.
Enjoy your evening!
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Thank you, Carol.
Enjoy your evening!
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Your peom has so many direction combined with the beauty of the moon and also the violence a women encounters in her journey to find her warrior spirit. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2023
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Your peom has so many direction combined with the beauty of the moon and also the violence a women encounters in her journey to find her warrior spirit. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
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Comment Written 10-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2023
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Thank you.
Comment from JT traveller
After such a melancholy poem your last stanza uplifted mem Giving me hop. Thank you.
"Past is the tempest
she wakes before dawn,
her warrior spirit
with pride soldiers on."
A perfect way to redirect the reader and engage us in your powerful message. Thank you. Jacqueline
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2023
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After such a melancholy poem your last stanza uplifted mem Giving me hop. Thank you.
"Past is the tempest
she wakes before dawn,
her warrior spirit
with pride soldiers on."
A perfect way to redirect the reader and engage us in your powerful message. Thank you. Jacqueline
Comment Written 10-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2023
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Thank you, Jacqueline.
Have a nice evening:)
Comment from jim vecchio
Unfortunately, I and many have known betrays or unrequited love. But God gives us hope, and a new future. The words, "this too shall pass" may sound corny to some, but to those in need, they ring true. That was a wonderful way to complete your work, with the woman's warrior spirit marching on in pride.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2023
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Unfortunately, I and many have known betrays or unrequited love. But God gives us hope, and a new future. The words, "this too shall pass" may sound corny to some, but to those in need, they ring true. That was a wonderful way to complete your work, with the woman's warrior spirit marching on in pride.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2023
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my verse.
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It was my pleasure!
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi KL,
This poem flows well with its abcb quatrains and use of repetition to strengthen the emotional impact of the poem. It depicts the grief and confusion of an affair that beaks up a marriage. Keep writing and stay healthy:
Have a good rest of your week.
Joan
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2023
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Hi KL,
This poem flows well with its abcb quatrains and use of repetition to strengthen the emotional impact of the poem. It depicts the grief and confusion of an affair that beaks up a marriage. Keep writing and stay healthy:
Have a good rest of your week.
Joan
Comment Written 10-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2023
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Thanks, Joan.
Enjoy your week as well:)
Comment from Katie Mae Dead
This is definitely a wowed poet. I love the interspersal of that famous quote. Thanks for using it in this poem.
Love so many phrases her but the last stanza is my fave with thr phrase "soldiers on."
Excellent entry for this club with its fine rhyme scheme and good stro.g rhymes.
Katiemaedead
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2023
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This is definitely a wowed poet. I love the interspersal of that famous quote. Thanks for using it in this poem.
Love so many phrases her but the last stanza is my fave with thr phrase "soldiers on."
Excellent entry for this club with its fine rhyme scheme and good stro.g rhymes.
Katiemaedead
Comment Written 10-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2023
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Thank you for taking time to read and review my verse.
It warms my heart that you made a connection, especially to the last stanza as I rewrote it a half dozen times:)
