Karate Competition
Adams enters a karate contest.2 total reviews
Comment from Iza Deleanu
This story reminds me of the Karate kid movie:) And the moral is fighting for your rights. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2023
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This story reminds me of the Karate kid movie:) And the moral is fighting for your rights. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the contest.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2023
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Thank you!
Comment from Paul Manton
I know I have reviewed a very similar poem recently, so I will try not to repeat myself.
Adam is very brave, and the backstory here is significant - who are these bullies - and how come they too are involved in the Karate competition?
Nevertheless, Adam, who must be a black belt surely, perseveres and wins through to the final, where he meets his nemesis. Being kicked in the kidneys would surely end most bouts and see Adam carted off to hospital - and why would the fight be allowed to proceed?
But, in spite of all that, Adam makes a triumphant comeback, and is crowned champion. A lot to pack into a hundred words. Well done.
Paul
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2023
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I know I have reviewed a very similar poem recently, so I will try not to repeat myself.
Adam is very brave, and the backstory here is significant - who are these bullies - and how come they too are involved in the Karate competition?
Nevertheless, Adam, who must be a black belt surely, perseveres and wins through to the final, where he meets his nemesis. Being kicked in the kidneys would surely end most bouts and see Adam carted off to hospital - and why would the fight be allowed to proceed?
But, in spite of all that, Adam makes a triumphant comeback, and is crowned champion. A lot to pack into a hundred words. Well done.
Paul
Comment Written 11-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2023
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Thank you! I'm glad you think so. It is so hard to pack every word in a flash fiction but I did the best I could. Thank you again!
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You're right. Flash fiction is tough!