Beneath the Waves
The past lies...4 total reviews
Comment from JSD
A lovely, lilting and melancholy poem. The metaphor of life and the mind and memory works so well. I almost wonder if your picture needs to be a bit more abstract, because one starts reading expecting something about a sunken ship. Just a thought. Otherwise this is great and the refrain is perfect.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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A lovely, lilting and melancholy poem. The metaphor of life and the mind and memory works so well. I almost wonder if your picture needs to be a bit more abstract, because one starts reading expecting something about a sunken ship. Just a thought. Otherwise this is great and the refrain is perfect.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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The Edmond Fitzgerald was an ore carrier that sunk on November 10th 1975, during a storm on lake Superior, taking 29 souls with it. The singer, Gordon Lightfoot immortalized the event by writing a song about it. You can listen to the song by clicking it on above my poem. Thanks so much for reading my poem. :)
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Ooh. Interesting. I still think the poem stands on its own and works better as a metaphor.
Comment from Sally Law
Thank you for the lovely poem, inspired by Gordon Lightfoot. I couldn't get the video to work. I have a lot of experience with videos on here because I post them frequently in my Jukebox Hits and other posts, and for it to fly, it must have an HTML code like the ones on YouTube.
Beautifully penned and illustrated poem, nonetheless.
Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sally Law :))
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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Thank you for the lovely poem, inspired by Gordon Lightfoot. I couldn't get the video to work. I have a lot of experience with videos on here because I post them frequently in my Jukebox Hits and other posts, and for it to fly, it must have an HTML code like the ones on YouTube.
Beautifully penned and illustrated poem, nonetheless.
Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sally Law :))
Comment Written 17-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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Thank you. I couldn't figure out how to put the video on, but the song works. I didn't figure that out either, my daughter did..lol. I appreciate you reading my poem. :)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A spiritual write here, fine rhymes and flow and I enjoyed the sentiment for the contest and wish you luck, line seven is out of metre, love Dolly x x x x
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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A spiritual write here, fine rhymes and flow and I enjoyed the sentiment for the contest and wish you luck, line seven is out of metre, love Dolly x x x x
Comment Written 17-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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Thank you for reading my poem. I tried to fix the line, let me know what you think. :)
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Author,
I'm well familiar with this song by Gordon. Having spent many days on the water commercial fishing, I'm amazed that the captain and crew would have embarked on such a dangerous excursion in the middle of winter. It's distressing that there was no one to rescue them. Working on the water is always full of danger. I had read that commercial fishing is the most dangerous job in the US. I believe it. Good luck in the contest.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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Hello Author,
I'm well familiar with this song by Gordon. Having spent many days on the water commercial fishing, I'm amazed that the captain and crew would have embarked on such a dangerous excursion in the middle of winter. It's distressing that there was no one to rescue them. Working on the water is always full of danger. I had read that commercial fishing is the most dangerous job in the US. I believe it. Good luck in the contest.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 16-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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I agree with your assessment of the situation. What a terrible tragedy! Thanks so much for reading my poem and for this interesting review. :)