Britney Spears
Sweet Britney2 total reviews
Comment from Eleri
This is a great idea for a Kyrielle and it generally reads well. However, you have used could, would should too many times for my liking particularly as there are a lot of things that rhyme with stood. Also the second line of your first stanza has nine syllables rather than the required eight. Having said that this represents a different idea for a poem so I wish you well in the contest.
Eleri
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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This is a great idea for a Kyrielle and it generally reads well. However, you have used could, would should too many times for my liking particularly as there are a lot of things that rhyme with stood. Also the second line of your first stanza has nine syllables rather than the required eight. Having said that this represents a different idea for a poem so I wish you well in the contest.
Eleri
Comment Written 17-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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Thank you!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Unfortunately Britney was used and abused by a few people who just wanted her money, including her Father and it is very sad that she did not get the support she craved from someone who wanted to help her rather than steal her money. Vulnerable people are often bullied, a fine post for Britney, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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Unfortunately Britney was used and abused by a few people who just wanted her money, including her Father and it is very sad that she did not get the support she craved from someone who wanted to help her rather than steal her money. Vulnerable people are often bullied, a fine post for Britney, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 17-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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Thank you! I completely agree!