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freedom

Angels only job. Love!

15 total reviews 
Comment from lyenochka
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Thank you for sharing this deeply personal poem. Did you do the artwork, too? So glad that you kept it.
I think what people / society thinks about who is a hero and who is a coward has no merit. It's who we are as children of God that makes us "immortal." Human concepts of immortality are fragile at best and the human conscious memory is faulty and short. Among the internet, the "hero" one day is the bullied "villain" the next. People are too quick to judge so it's best to not trust human judgment, or even our own.

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
    THANK YOU FOR THE Reviews and yes this is my work. I would love to show you more. email me your link. r.effinger@yahoo.com.
Comment from karenina
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That you were so moved to write about protecting your sister speaks volumes. I'm glad you've saved this poem from 23 years ago and hope you have many more to share with us! Did you consider yourself her guardian angel? A brother's love is very special!

Karenina

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 23-Aug-2023
    yes, I did and yes, I do and yes, I will. thank you have a great day and life.
    yes, I did consider myself the guardian over my sisters. 4 of them.
    yes, I do, have many more pictures like the one I drawled for this poem, and I want nothing more than to share them with the world while I'm here. any help would be greatly appreciated.
    yes, I will. keep in touch. Please do the same. have a great day.
    my webpage.wwwbubbs-thoughtgame2.com.webador.
    I also think your name is as magical as the picture you are showing. I like it.
Comment from LateBloomer
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Hello T-G2, Wow! Your poem is filled with high sensory appeal and is thought-provoking. You must be a deep thinker, and it sounds as if your inner-self was being challenged at the time. Of special note:

As a coward i could live and soon be forgotten.
As a hero i could die and become IMMORTAL!

(The yin and yang of life, but choosing Life is always best. My daughter has a saying...don't make a long-term decision for a short-term problem. Who says that kids can't be the teacher?!)

Your artwork is excellent. If this was hand sketched and is still on plain paper, just a suggestion, if you can get it printed onto glossy copy paper at Walgreen's, CVS, etc., you'll be amazed how it will just pop and be better preserved.)

Well done. This would have made a great entry into Feedlefumps contest. I'm sure that you sister loved this. LateBloomer


 Comment Written 20-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
    thank you and i hope to chat again real soon
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
    what is feedle fumps?
reply by LateBloomer on 22-Aug-2023
    Feedleflump is a FS member.
    He recently was running a contest. LB
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2023
    ok thanx. good morning!!!
Comment from Lisasview
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First I must say I love the image... I am an artist... Did you paint this?
However, your words all though quite lovely, need a bit of editing
even your authors notes need a bit of help.

I done this piece 23 years ago from a federal prison for my baby sisters' birthday.
No one has ever seen it really until now...it's me watching over her. Enjoy.
The word done is incorrect.. it should read did...
I think this could be a great poem with a bit of good editing,
Lisasview

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
    Thank you for pointing out my re-dos I always look forward to that. And no, I did not paint this one just colored pencils and ink pins. I'm glad you liked it. I have more coming...soon.
reply by Lisasview on 21-Aug-2023
    Would love to see your Re-dos
    Just let me know when and I will check your poem out...
    Lisa
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
Comment from JSD
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Your note is striking and really took me aback. Very impressive piece of writing considering the circumstances it was written in. Thank you for sharing this.

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
    Thank you JSD!!
Comment from Lea Tonin1
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Choices, choices, choices are always choices in life, this is Very well written on such a talent. You have your word choices are unique to you and very special indeed. It seems any choices we make are, in fact frozen calls. Either way, nothing is absolute, That would make things much too easy. Don't you think I mean said that I find no issues with grammar or aesthetics. This is very well done and a fine submission best of luck to you!

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 19-Aug-2023
    as always thank you for your honesty...see u around!
Comment from royowen
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You've done a great job with this excellent poem. I can remember someone once saying that their religion was being a "devout coward", "A hero dies but once, but a coward dies a thousand times. Beautifully written blessings Roy
Suggestion: become quite (rotten) immortal.

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 19-Aug-2023
    Thank you sir..I like the rotten part. Than.
reply by royowen on 19-Aug-2023
    Heh heh
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Excellent poem for your sister's birthday. It's heartfelt and honest. We all want to be remembered positively after we die. I hope my children know how mush I loved them.

Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalisl

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 19-Aug-2023
    My hat off to you gypsy blue. I will drink flow your well of knowledge. Yes I will. Thank you very much.
Comment from walk.write.reflect
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Your artistic creation is breathtaking. How you have captured the raw emotions and vulnerability of the subject is genuinely remarkable. I found myself lost in thought, reflecting on my own experiences that resonate with the feelings you have portrayed. Your skill in conveying such profound emotions through your art and prose is truly awe-inspiring. Thank you for sharing this magnificent piece.
Best Regards.

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 19-Aug-2023
    I'm glad you liked my picture. I have many more herein before pieces in my possession which I will be glad to share with you. I just don't know how as yet. Working on that part. All pointers will be appreciated. My web page is bubs-thoughtgame2.Com.
reply by walk.write.reflect on 21-Aug-2023
    I think you are very talented. I wish you all the success with your creative project, and I look forward to seeing your work.
    Thank you and Best Regards
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
Comment from jim vecchio
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This was a very good poem with a poignant message. The roles should be reversed with the coward dying and the hero living and enjoying acclaim. Unfortunately, that's not always the way of this world.

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 19-Aug-2023
    thank you
reply by jim vecchio on 20-Aug-2023
    Thank you for your writing!