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haiku (frosted panes)

Sheer beauty either way

14 total reviews 
Comment from lyenochka
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Oh! That's a gorgeous use of metaphor. I always see the "lace" that the snowflakes make on a frosted windowpane but that it turns to "silk" is a great way to show that transformation! Great way to describe the visual and the texture!

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2023

reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023
    Thank you, Helen!
Comment from Lisasview
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Such a sweet Haiku... Really liked it Rachelle... The image is perfect and reflects the meaning of your poem so well!
It actually looks like a water colour painting ...
Lisasview

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2023

reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
    I knew you'd "get it," Lisa. You always see my work as I intend it, and I appreciate that very much. xo
reply by Lisasview on 01-Sep-2023
    Not many of us around...
    Sad to say,
    Lisa
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
    That's okay; we just need one! Everyone else is a bonus!
Comment from Teri7
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This is a very beautiful and well written short haiku you have penned for the writing prompt contest. I love when it snows in winter, and we can see those frosted panes and snowflakes. Best wishes in the contest. Teri

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2023

reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
    Me, too!!! Sometimes they are like the shapes within a kaleidescope...except without the colors. I appreciate your very nice review. Thank you!
reply by Teri7 on 26-Aug-2023
    That is so true! I forgot all about the kaleidoscope. Good example!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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I loved this Haiku and you won my vote with this silky smooth write, we shall soon be experiencing those frosty, frozen days, I enjoyed your words and good luck with the contest, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2023

reply by the author on 26-Aug-2023
    Seriously??? I am so totally touched by this. A vote by the Poet Laureate of FS??! Wowie zowie. I honest-to-goodness welling up! Thank you, Dolly!!! xoxoxo
reply by Dolly'sPoems on 26-Aug-2023
    You are most welcome, this is a winner for me x x x
Comment from Boogienights
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How pretty. Your words and picture certainly do capture the beauty of winter. We'll be seeing this soon enough, as summer comes to a close. Thanks so much for sharing.

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2023

reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
    You betcha!! My pleasure! Thanks so much for this delightful review!! It means the world.
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
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This is a lovely poem. syllabication and lines correct to contest requirements. The idea of changing ice on window panes from lace to silk is really creative!

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2023

reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
    Thank you for saying that. I sew a lot; I think that's where that came from.
Comment from June Sargent
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I don't know if this is the shortest haiku. I simply like it. The imagery captured in a few short lines is amazing - from lace to silk. It not only involves the sense of sight, but also touch. I love the feel of fabrics...

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2023

reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
    Same! I sew constantly.

    There's going to be a notification made by the sponsor of this contest that it isn't actually supposed to be about whose is the shortest haiku. We're all allowed up to seventeen syllables. She said she realized, after further consideration that she'd made a boo-boo with that wording.
Comment from jim vecchio
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Thanks for writing about that wonderful cereal, Frosted Flakes! only kidding! A cold but very descriptive image of the frost and snow which we don't get much of in Florida!

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2023

reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
    Oh, stop gloating, you. It's okay; we get enough here in Upstate NY for both of us. Send me your address, and I'll ship you some!!

    In the meantime, thanks for the GRRRRRRRR-EAT review (see what I did there, Jim...)
    xoxo
reply by jim vecchio on 24-Aug-2023
    Reading your words sure isn't a pane, I mean pain!
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
    Hahahaha.
reply by jim vecchio on 24-Aug-2023
    Thanks! I needed a good laugh!
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
    Who doesn't!!!
Comment from harmony13
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The first two lines of this poem flow and connect well. The last line
says it all! I enjoyed the read of these words. The author's words are
descriptive and creative! The artwork is awesome and goes well with
these words. Hope your have a great day!....Maria

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2023

reply by the author on 23-Aug-2023
    You scared me when you complimented the first two lines then separated out the third! PHEW! Thanks for the specific references about why it "worked" for you, Maria. I appreciate it.
Comment from LJbutterfly
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Your World's Shortest Haiku contest entry adequately meets the syllable requirement. Additionally, you paint a vivid image of the beauty of winter weather. Your chosen picture pairs perfectly with your words and intensifies your message. Best wishes in the contest.

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2023

reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
    Thank you very much for this encouraging review. So totally appreciated.