Fleshly Frenzy
The craving of carnal, copious, climactic commandment33 total reviews
Comment from BenThrone
This is a very sexy poem, beyond doubt. My favorite line is "fluttering fervent fingers flourish". That's well done. I wish you good luck in the free verse competition.
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This is a very sexy poem, beyond doubt. My favorite line is "fluttering fervent fingers flourish". That's well done. I wish you good luck in the free verse competition.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2023
Comment from Lea Tonin1
That is superior that's a great poem! I love the use of all the f words so to speak l o l. Excellent work, a fine submission. It's a great idea behind a poem too I must say And the background sets it off. Well. I find submission a great job and I hope you have an awesome night!
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That is superior that's a great poem! I love the use of all the f words so to speak l o l. Excellent work, a fine submission. It's a great idea behind a poem too I must say And the background sets it off. Well. I find submission a great job and I hope you have an awesome night!
Comment Written 04-Dec-2023
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Great alliteration, and the words teamed with image takes us back to a passionate time and lover.
Love "famished fantasies".
Good luck in the free verse.
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Great alliteration, and the words teamed with image takes us back to a passionate time and lover.
Love "famished fantasies".
Good luck in the free verse.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2023
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Great alliteration and well chosen words for the free verse contest, you captured the passion and urgency of love-making here, a great entry, love Dolly x x x
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Great alliteration and well chosen words for the free verse contest, you captured the passion and urgency of love-making here, a great entry, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 03-Dec-2023
Comment from Wendyanne
This is a very well written piece of free verse poetry in which you have used words beginning with the letter F very effectively to describe a passionate experience. Good luck.
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This is a very well written piece of free verse poetry in which you have used words beginning with the letter F very effectively to describe a passionate experience. Good luck.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2023
Comment from Frank Malley
How many words in a 13-word poem can you start with the letter f and have it make sense? Opal Rose finds 11 (including unfurling) words that start with f and together suggest an intense erotic experience, without using the 'f' word, or in fact any dirty words at all. 'Fluttering fervent fingers flourish' is my favorite line.
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How many words in a 13-word poem can you start with the letter f and have it make sense? Opal Rose finds 11 (including unfurling) words that start with f and together suggest an intense erotic experience, without using the 'f' word, or in fact any dirty words at all. 'Fluttering fervent fingers flourish' is my favorite line.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2023
Comment from Lordinajamjar
Clever use of alliteration with the letter "f" without resorting to the core word makes this sensual work all the more sensually appealing.
Very well done. Good luck.
John
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Clever use of alliteration with the letter "f" without resorting to the core word makes this sensual work all the more sensually appealing.
Very well done. Good luck.
John
Comment Written 03-Dec-2023
Comment from Jayy...
Oh... To be in love again, the way I was in High School when everything seemed eternal and protected. Great poem, it actually made me realize something. The person I was in love with- when we were together, intoxicated me in such a way, the words of your poem reflect partially some possible ways of describing it.
Now...
When I think about words, such as are in your poem, it returns me to broken pieces of my heart.
Good job.
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Oh... To be in love again, the way I was in High School when everything seemed eternal and protected. Great poem, it actually made me realize something. The person I was in love with- when we were together, intoxicated me in such a way, the words of your poem reflect partially some possible ways of describing it.
Now...
When I think about words, such as are in your poem, it returns me to broken pieces of my heart.
Good job.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2023
Comment from jim vecchio
I enjoyed your alliteration on this post of free verse. Just one concern: You worked so hard on attaining the "f" sound and then ruined it by the word "her". Try for another "f" sound, perhaps "feminine" in its place. I don't think the meaning of your poem would suffer.
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I enjoyed your alliteration on this post of free verse. Just one concern: You worked so hard on attaining the "f" sound and then ruined it by the word "her". Try for another "f" sound, perhaps "feminine" in its place. I don't think the meaning of your poem would suffer.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2023
Comment from Aussie
I thought I was going to read a mushy, hot, and carnal poem. Nope, I found your presentation complimented your classy poem. Anyone can write smut; because you have used many words starting with F, it works so well. I guess we get the message. Good luck in the contest. K xx
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I thought I was going to read a mushy, hot, and carnal poem. Nope, I found your presentation complimented your classy poem. Anyone can write smut; because you have used many words starting with F, it works so well. I guess we get the message. Good luck in the contest. K xx
Comment Written 02-Dec-2023
