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Moonlight Reflections

A free verse for the contest

10 total reviews 
Comment from dragonpoet
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Hi June,
This free verse uses strong metaphor, alliteration, and line breaks well to give clear images of past events and how it may effect us as we glimpse the reflections in the sands of time. Your artwork is well chosen.
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a great day.
Joan

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 08-Sep-2023
    I am happy that this poem resonated with you. We need to learn from the past to ensure a better future. Thank you for your feedback. Much appreciated.
reply by dragonpoet on 08-Sep-2023
    it did, You are right about learning from the past. You're very welcome, June,
    Joan
Comment from lyenochka
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A deep reflection on the history of mankind and the sea. Some crossed to conquer and become wealthy merchants, some were kidnapped and sold and sent by sea, but we should " chart a straighter course" for the future of humanity.
Congratulations on your second place prize!

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 06-Sep-2023
    Thank you, Helen, for reading and sharing your insightful feedback. Always appreciated!
Comment from BethShelby
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This is nice free verse. I like the idea of history being capture with the grains of sand. We can only hope that the path being charted into the future is toward a straighter course.

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023
    Thank you for sharing your insightful thoughts on this poem. Reflections are important in the journey through life. Hopefully we can learn from the past how to navigate towards the future. I appreciate the feedback
Comment from kahpot
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"moonlight reflections" sums up this work wonderfully, as you remind us of what we did and are doing that has got us to this point, (piracy and slavery) must change, though not as prominent now as back then we still have a long voyage ahead, very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023
    Thank you for sharing your insightful thoughts on this poem. Reflections are important in the journey through life. Hopefully we can learn from the past how to navigate towards the future. I appreciate the feedback
Comment from Ginda Simpson
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Your moonlight verse offers some valuable reflections, history held in the grains of sand. The events and the human conditions that you reflect on should not be forgotten and this verse serves to remind us. Thanks for sharing this with us.

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023
    Thank you for sharing your insightful thoughts on this poem. Reflections are important in the journey through life. Hopefully we can learn from the past how to navigate towards the future. I appreciate the feedback
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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Some good and bad things happened under that moonlight and you managed to make it all sound so romantic and calm June, a fine free write, love Dolly x x x

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023
    Thank you for sharing your insightful thoughts on this poem. Reflections are important in the journey through life. Hopefully we can learn from the past how to navigate towards the future. I appreciate the feedback
Comment from Jasmine Girl
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What a beautiful poem about how the Moon is the witness of many interesting things in history. I like our using alliteration and personification of poetic tools.

Well done.

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023
    Thank you for sharing your insightful thoughts on this poem. Reflections are important in the journey through life. Hopefully we can learn from the past how to navigate towards the future. I appreciate the feedback
Comment from Teri7
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for those for those seeking asylum
Please check this line out. I think you need to delete one of the for those. You used very good descriptive words and very nice imagery. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023
    Thank you for sharing your insightful thoughts on this poem. Reflections are important in the journey through life. Hopefully we can learn from the past how to navigate towards the future. I appreciate the feedback
Comment from jim vecchio
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I wish I could write free verse the way you do! When I lived in Connecticut, there was a place called "Mystic Seaport" honoring the days of the old sailing vessels. So, when I say your words had a "mystical" quality about them, there is a double meaning involved!

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
    We live in Massachusetts and love Mystic Seaport! Glad you could relate to this piece. I?m actually new to the art of free verse. Thought I?d give it a shot. Thanks for the feedback!
reply by jim vecchio on 25-Aug-2023
    Here I am, in a Florida assisted living situation, thinking no one knows about Mystic! I'm so glad you're able to enjoy yourself there!
Comment from Bill Schott
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This free verse, Moonlight Reflections, creates a scene that becomes a canvas for imagining the history of the open sea and all the rich stories there still adrift in memory.

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2023


reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
    Thank you for dropping by today to read and share your thoughts. Your feedback is much appreciated!