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Luna's Tribulations

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Comment from Pearl Edwards
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You've used your mishap in the garden very well for this 100 word flash fiction story Heather. As you say, for too many their bruises are not 'accidents'.
Good luck in the contest, cheers, valda

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2023

reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
    Thanks for reading, Valda. I hope you're having a lovely day.
Comment from lyenochka
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I like your story and LOVE your illustration! You've become quite the artist, MJ! And I hope your eyes recover quickly. Maybe the tiny needles of the conifer got in your eyes? You need a quicker eye-closing reflex!

Best wishes in the contest!!

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2023

reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
    LOL! Apparently so.
    I'm glad you like that illustration. It's one of my best, I think. I don't always get so lucky.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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oh, I hate when that happens but they are just doing their job, so many women are abused they have to ask. When my kids were little, if they broke an arm falling from a tree, the doctors and nurses would think I did it. Anyway.... good job, it's a nice flash nonfiction.

gypsy xoxox

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2023

reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
    In my case, the doctor was not like the doctor in the story, he was just joking.
    But something similar happened to me when our daughter was little and I took her to see her paediatrician and the usual one wasn't there.
    Thanks for reading.x
Comment from w.j.debi
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Real life often helps us write our fiction stories. Sorry to hear about your accident with the branch, but it did let you write a thought-provoking and cute story.
Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2023

reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
    My eyes are almost okay now. Thanks for your concern and for reading. x
Comment from jessizero
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I am so sorry you were accidentally injured, but I am glad it was an accident! Your story was entertaining, and the picture you drew was great. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2023

reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
    Thanks so much for reading. I hope you have a lovely day.
Comment from LJbutterfly
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It's amazing how real life can inspire stories. This story is short, succinct, with a bit of humor, and helpful to any woman in an abusive relationship. The illustration you drew of a sad girl, fits the story perfectly. Best wishes in the contest.

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2023

reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
    Thanks so much for reading. Have a lovely day.
Comment from Ric Myworld
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I've become a real fan of flash fiction. I guess it's because of the times, everyone wanting quick gratification. I enjoyed your story, and was glad it wasn't abuse. Next weekend, I'm going to post a story about abuse. Hope your ulcered eyes are well soon! Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2023

reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023
    My eyes are a lot better, Ric. Thanks so much.
    I have also become a fan of flash fiction I also like reading it. Some of the stories are great, but there are others I don't get (some by the same authors).
    In longer fiction there is more 'space' to elaborate, to develop characters, setting...
    Looking forward to reading your story.
Comment from Father Flaps
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Well done, Maria! You've managed to tell a great story in exactly 100 words. In the process, you've touched on a subject that is probably all too familiar for doctors and nurses... spousal abuse or domestic violence.
The artwork is special. Hey, you should write a children's book and illustrate it yourself. I'm sure you can write a terrific tale that kids would love. Go for it! You're a talented lady.
Good Luck in the contest!
Hugs,
Kimbob

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2023

reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023
    You're very kind, Kimbob.
    I'm about to have my first grandchild (well, not about to, in December, but time flies) and I'd thought of writing some very short stories for her and turn them into a little book.
    Obviously not like this one in subject matter.
    Thanks for your review.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
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I suspect that is what emergency practices must ask whenever someone comes in with your sort of injury. You had me believing the relationship was bad until your nbotes clarified the event.

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2023

reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023
    Nowadays, in Spain at least, there is news of domestic violence and even women murdered by spouses all the time... that it's not surprising you thought it was really a case of abuse.
    Thanks so much for reading, Tom.
Comment from BethShelby
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Cute story and the drawing works nicely. We women do still have accidents from time to time. It isn't always the men that did it. Of course if it happens too often, there is reason to wonder.

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2023

reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023
    Of course there is. And nowadays it seems it's only too common.
    Thanks so much for your review.