The City That Never Sleeps
A Club Entry20 total reviews
Comment from jake cosmos aller
loved this poem about a woman finding herself alone and isolated in Time Square surrounded by millions of people yet totally alone in her thoughts and her fears.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
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loved this poem about a woman finding herself alone and isolated in Time Square surrounded by millions of people yet totally alone in her thoughts and her fears.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
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Thank you for your time and review.
Have a great weekend:)
Comment from Ulla
I'm glad in this case it was only a nightmare, but for many it's a nightmare they live through every single day.
However much I love the city of New York, it certainly has a very dark side as well. Good luck with this fine free verse poem. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
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I'm glad in this case it was only a nightmare, but for many it's a nightmare they live through every single day.
However much I love the city of New York, it certainly has a very dark side as well. Good luck with this fine free verse poem. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 02-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
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Thanks, Ulla.
Enjoy the weekend:)
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Thank goodness for that!! It was a real nightmare! But, it isn't for many, the imagery you have presented so vividly in this Free Verse poem is as real to some as it is a nightmare for others. This was excellent! Good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
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Thank goodness for that!! It was a real nightmare! But, it isn't for many, the imagery you have presented so vividly in this Free Verse poem is as real to some as it is a nightmare for others. This was excellent! Good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 02-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
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Thank you, Sandra.
Have a great weekend:)
Comment from Sally Law
Virtal six for this heartbreaking poem. This woman has be used, abused and discarded. Her life has become the nightmare your poem describes. Having been to NYC many times on business, I've seen her.
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the free verse.
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
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Virtal six for this heartbreaking poem. This woman has be used, abused and discarded. Her life has become the nightmare your poem describes. Having been to NYC many times on business, I've seen her.
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the free verse.
Sal XOs
Comment Written 02-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
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Thanks, Sally.
Have a great weekend:)
Comment from Douglas Goff
Well, I for one am glad that was a nightmare. There's to many people in New York. Of course people are always up because that have to take turns sleeping. Ha!
Great piece for the site that never sleeps!
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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
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Well, I for one am glad that was a nightmare. There's to many people in New York. Of course people are always up because that have to take turns sleeping. Ha!
Great piece for the site that never sleeps!
D
Comment Written 02-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
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Haha, thanks for the review, Doug.
Enjoy the weekend:)
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Kitty,
This free verse is packed with emotion that is enhanced by word choice and line breaks.
It sounds like the world ignoring and judging a poor woman. It shows her fear and shame. I like that it is a nightmare for this woman but it, sadly, is true for a lot of others. I like the irony that she is asleep in a city that never sleeps.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Good luck in the contest.
Have a great weekend.
Joan
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
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Hi Kitty,
This free verse is packed with emotion that is enhanced by word choice and line breaks.
It sounds like the world ignoring and judging a poor woman. It shows her fear and shame. I like that it is a nightmare for this woman but it, sadly, is true for a lot of others. I like the irony that she is asleep in a city that never sleeps.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Good luck in the contest.
Have a great weekend.
Joan
Comment Written 01-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
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Thank you, Joan.
Enjoy your weekend also:)
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You're welcome, Kitty.
Joan
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Kitty,
the sensory impact piqued my total enjoyment with reading this marvelous free verse.
You put us just where and how you described. If I had to choose a section, a verse, a line that I enjoyed more than the rest, I'd be very hard pressed... it read as a whole. It delivered all the way from start to finish. I must say the little hits of alliteration really tied together for me.
All the very best wishes in this contest Kitty... for me a true contender.
Well done!
With our thoughts we create...
distorted burden.
Kind regards,
James.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
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Hi Kitty,
the sensory impact piqued my total enjoyment with reading this marvelous free verse.
You put us just where and how you described. If I had to choose a section, a verse, a line that I enjoyed more than the rest, I'd be very hard pressed... it read as a whole. It delivered all the way from start to finish. I must say the little hits of alliteration really tied together for me.
All the very best wishes in this contest Kitty... for me a true contender.
Well done!
With our thoughts we create...
distorted burden.
Kind regards,
James.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
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Just saw this in my review box, your review was even more enjoyable the second time!
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Just saw this in my review box, your review was even more enjoyable the second time!
Comment from JSD
Excellent free verse. Love your imagery and the sparse, economical and significant language you employ. Proper writing. Well done. I have a six left and it is yours for this marvellous poem.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
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Excellent free verse. Love your imagery and the sparse, economical and significant language you employ. Proper writing. Well done. I have a six left and it is yours for this marvellous poem.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
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Just saw this in my review box, your review made my Saturday:)
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Just saw this in my review box, your review made my Saturday:)
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Yay.
Comment from bob cullen
I loved your opening statement where you highlighted your intention in writing this poem. You delivered on every intention. It was in Time Square, your words suggested distress and it contained volumes of emotion. It deserved every one of those SIX STARS.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
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I loved your opening statement where you highlighted your intention in writing this poem. You delivered on every intention. It was in Time Square, your words suggested distress and it contained volumes of emotion. It deserved every one of those SIX STARS.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
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Just saw this is in my review box, your review made the raining afternoon brighter!
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Just saw this is in my review box, your review made the raining afternoon brighter!
Comment from Sanku
Bruised ,battered and suffering from malnutrition, the women in your poem stands for many like her in many other cities ,The ugly underbelly of a city has so nany shocks in store .very graphically portrayed..
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
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Bruised ,battered and suffering from malnutrition, the women in your poem stands for many like her in many other cities ,The ugly underbelly of a city has so nany shocks in store .very graphically portrayed..
Comment Written 01-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
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Thank you.
