The Sad Bird
Compassion is a great practice.7 total reviews
Comment from papa55mike
Wow! The bird in the picture is a Dark-eyed Junco, one of my favorites. That's a lovely story! We do carry our love inside to keep from being hurt, but when we let it shine, the colors explode. What a wonderfully written story. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2023
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Wow! The bird in the picture is a Dark-eyed Junco, one of my favorites. That's a lovely story! We do carry our love inside to keep from being hurt, but when we let it shine, the colors explode. What a wonderfully written story. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 05-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2023
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Wow thank you so much for this wonderful review. What a grand way to start my day! I appreciate it so much and so happy to write something that is understood and enjoyed!
TinaLeAnn Bice
Happi
Comment from Pantygynt
A strange piece, this is a one off, a kind of fairy tale pretending to be an account of a scientific observation of some sort of metamorphosis. At its core is the fairy tale, a barely believable story of the power of love. It has to be love. Why else would the the bright bird bother with the shabby one. But the manner of its telling, its style is quite cut and dried.
I found it intriguing.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
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A strange piece, this is a one off, a kind of fairy tale pretending to be an account of a scientific observation of some sort of metamorphosis. At its core is the fairy tale, a barely believable story of the power of love. It has to be love. Why else would the the bright bird bother with the shabby one. But the manner of its telling, its style is quite cut and dried.
I found it intriguing.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
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Thank you so much my friend! Glad you understood the really message. I wrote this when I was 13. Found it in a scrapbook. Have a great Holiday Weekend! Happi
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is a cute short story that reads like a fairytale. The colorful bird helped care for the sad bird and found a friend for life. Once exposed to healthy practices, like food, being loved, and freedom from stress, the sad bird's beautiful colors returned. Both birds deliver a message.
Welcome to FanStory.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
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This is a cute short story that reads like a fairytale. The colorful bird helped care for the sad bird and found a friend for life. Once exposed to healthy practices, like food, being loved, and freedom from stress, the sad bird's beautiful colors returned. Both birds deliver a message.
Welcome to FanStory.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
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Thank you so much for such a lovely review. I appreciate it so much!! Happi
Comment from prettybluebirds
You have a couple of computer glitches in the line above the title. Also, I would leave out the second (only) in the last sentence of the second paragraph; it's unnecessary and would sound better without it. Other than that, the story is cute and creative.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
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You have a couple of computer glitches in the line above the title. Also, I would leave out the second (only) in the last sentence of the second paragraph; it's unnecessary and would sound better without it. Other than that, the story is cute and creative.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
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I have tried fixing the computer glitch three times. It shows that it?s been fixed and not it hasn?t. Any ideas? Thank you for the input. I will definitely take the other out. I appreciate the advice. I actually wrote this when I was 13. I am just now exposing it. Have a wonderful Labor Day weekend. Happi
Comment from Sally Law
Welcome to FanStory, Happipotter! I so enjoyed your short story of the wounded, depressed bird that eventually finds it's song again. I've been in that process myself after losing my eyesight. It's wonderful to be able to write, publish, and be a member of FanStory.
Sending you my best today as always, and blessings for your writing endeavors.
Sally XOs
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
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Welcome to FanStory, Happipotter! I so enjoyed your short story of the wounded, depressed bird that eventually finds it's song again. I've been in that process myself after losing my eyesight. It's wonderful to be able to write, publish, and be a member of FanStory.
Sending you my best today as always, and blessings for your writing endeavors.
Sally XOs
Comment Written 01-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
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Sally,
Thank you so much! I will send out many prayers for you and your eyesight. I?m sure that is quite a stress. God never puts in us what we cannot handle and it?s fantastic that you have decided to push energy into pen and paper.
I have been a member of FanStory for many many years. My membership lapsed. I am
A published poet and children?s book author and I decided to come back and reawaken my portfolio. See if I can put another rooster book together or short story to publish.
I wish you many blessings and thank you for the great review.
Happi
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Nice little tale. I felt overuse of adjectives weighed down the story a bit. Otherwise, a sweet small story of friendship and love for another in need. And how a small act of kindness can transform another.
Karen
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
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Nice little tale. I felt overuse of adjectives weighed down the story a bit. Otherwise, a sweet small story of friendship and love for another in need. And how a small act of kindness can transform another.
Karen
Comment Written 01-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
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Thank you! I appreciate your input. I used a lot of adjectives because I was 13 when I wrote it and just beginning with my writing career. I just decided to take it out and post it. I didn?t know how it would be received but am thrilled that everyone has enjoyed it. Have a wonderful Labor Day!
Happi
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Thirteen? Wow! that was some chops for a teenager.
Karen
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Thank you, I found it in a old scrapbook.
Comment from JSD
Quite an enjoyable piece. A little bit cliched, but some of your description is effective. My main query is why do you change tense from past at the start to present at the end? Thanks for sharing anyway.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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Quite an enjoyable piece. A little bit cliched, but some of your description is effective. My main query is why do you change tense from past at the start to present at the end? Thanks for sharing anyway.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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Thank you for the review. The birds represent two people. The tense form I used is nothing merely than the style I chose. I know it may seem odd but it worked. I?m sorry for the confusion. I?m glad you enjoyed it. I?m always eager to have the opinions of other writers. Thank you very much!
Happi
