Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Excellent entry for the ocean Haiku for the club.

I love the presentation and word imagery.

Good syllables count and connection between lines.

Well done!!!!

Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2023

Thanks for the review, Gypsy;)

Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

This is a very atmospheric post which I enjoyed reading. Your ocean haiku, together with your image, convey a sense tranquility and solitude. I particularly like the "broken seashell" which enhances the verse with sound effects in addition to the visual brightness and emptiness of the seashore. Lovely job! I keep thinking I must join this club:) Take care Debbie

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2023

Join us, you?ll be happy that you did;)

Thanks for your insightful review.

Enjoy your Sunday!

reply by Debbie D'Arcy on 10-Sep-2023

I'm getting very close. I just worry about time limitations and not taking enough advantage of the club briefs.

reply by the author on 10-Sep-2023

Throw your worries right out of the window!! (smile)

Gypsy is very easy to talk to and may be able to extend deadlines.
She wants people to have fun, not stress!

Comment from JSD

Excellent

Excellent use of metaphor, and the picture matches the poem perfectly. The sense of loss here, with the use of the words 'alone', 'empty' and 'broken', is palpable. Really nicely done.

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2023

Thank you for taking the time to be the read and review my verse.

Comment from LisaMay

Excellent

Not all solitude is lonely, but the imagery you use here is highly evocative to capture the emotional emptiness of sadness through heartbreak... the pictorial imagery of a single set of footprints and the verbal imagery of a broken seashell.

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2023

Thank you for reviewing my verse.

reply by LisaMay on 10-Sep-2023

I connected with your poem because I am feeling sad at the moment (death of my ex-partner recently)... but I know a beach walk will put me in a better mood because it is such a nice place to be.

reply by the author on 10-Sep-2023

I?m sorry to hear that you?re going through a tough time, I am also.

My 25 year marriage has ended.

Perhaps, I should take a quiet walk on the beach;)

Enjoy your Sunday!

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

broken seashell - on a deserted beach, is a good metaphor for a lonely stroll, though not all aloneness is a bad vibe, you set a sombre tone in this haiku.
While I say that, I loved it.
cheers,
valda

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023

Thank you for reviewing my verse, have a great weekend.

reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023

Thank you for reviewing my verse, have a great weekend.

Comment from Carol Clark2

Excellent

Lovely poem. The words alone, empty, and broken create quite an emotion for the reader. The broken seashell is a good metaphor for the heart-broken woman. Beautiful beach scene in the photo. Blessings. Carol

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023

Thanks for the great review, Carol.

Have a great weekend!!

reply by Carol Clark2 on 10-Sep-2023

You're welcome. You, also.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

For some reason this reminded me of a story I heard about a lone starfish stranded on a beach, and some kind person returns it to the sea, another stroll remarked, why did you do that? There are many others stranded, the man replied, yes, but it made a difference to that one starfish. Beautifully written, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023

Thank you for sharing that story and for the review.

Enjoy your weekend!

reply by royowen on 09-Sep-2023

Well done

Comment from John Ciarmello

Excellent

This piece drips with feeling. It portrays the reality of being alone and singles out the broken moments in one's life. Perhaps a romance is waiting at the end of this beautiful journey along an empty beach! I loved the way this made me feel! Best, JohnC

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023

Your review has made my day!!

Have a great weekend, John. :)

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This haiku, Solitude, presented with a 4-4-4 formatting, captures the vastness of the scene along with the minutia of a single shell fragment. Within the beauty and hope, a broken seashell. Nice.

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023

Thank you, Bill.

Have a great weekend!

Comment from Eleri

Excellent

I do not know if this Haiku is supposed to have a particular form or not but I presume that a total of twelve syllables is going to be OK. The poem does conjure up some lovely images but I think that your last line should read 'broken seashells' rather than seashell singular.
Eleri

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023

Thank you for reviewing my verse and for catching my typo.