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Paying Attention

100-word story about being a tour guide.

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Comment from royowen
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Heh heh. What a marvellous short flash fiction Jenny. You've really had a revelation with this one, it's just well our heroine didn't actually put her foot in her mouth, beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2023

Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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Hi! I know you've been winning contests so well-deserved congrats for that! This is a lovely, engaging little flash. To begin with I thought you had some food trapped in your teeth or something. But the ending was a very pleasing surprise! Well done and good luck, Lisa! Debbie x

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2023

Comment from giraffmang
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Hi there,

Yeah, you'd have thought he'd've mentioned it at some point!

It can be very disconcerting when you're not used to it. I worked at a school for the deaf years ago and it took me a while to adjust. It's also the only time in my life where I was clean-shaven for more than couple of weeks to ease the trouble with lip-reading.

good little piece
All the best
GMG

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2023

Comment from Jesse James Doty
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Well done! You told a wonderful true story about how we perceive a person's closeness as inappropriate when what was the truth was they were lip reading and were deaf.
This shows how we need to speak clearly and understand those who are deaf or hard of hearing. Thanks for sharing this helpful tale to let us know we may have good intentions when we seem awkward and misunderstood.
Jesse

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2023

Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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You made me smile here Lisa and your innocence is to be expected when someone is staring at your lips! Glad the explanation was also innocent here, a fun post, I wish I could come and see you in action on your guided tour, love Dolly x x x

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 Comment Written 24-Sep-2023

Comment from Bill Schott
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This story, Paying Attention, is so funny when we find out why the situation was there. I could only think of my oldest brother who had no idea about personal space and would loom over people.

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 Comment Written 24-Sep-2023