September By the Sea
Faith poem45 total reviews
Comment from LJbutterfly
I love the beautiful imagery of this poem and the easy flowing rhythm (or meter). I'm not a poet, but as a retired musician, know how to create music that follows a specific beat. That's what I love about this poem. The Amphibrach meter and beautiful words of your poem combined, seem musical.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2023
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I love the beautiful imagery of this poem and the easy flowing rhythm (or meter). I'm not a poet, but as a retired musician, know how to create music that follows a specific beat. That's what I love about this poem. The Amphibrach meter and beautiful words of your poem combined, seem musical.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2023
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Hello there!! Thank you LJ for your lovely words and comments. This amphibrach meter is one of my favorite and I enjoy writing in that sing song kind of way. I'm delighted you liked it.
Melissa
Comment from Ulla
Hi Melissa this is such a soothing poem. Your words flow like a cloth of velvet. I absolutely loved it. You probably know I'm not into religious faith at all, but I loved the imagery and feeling of this beautiful poem. All the best of luck. Ulla xx
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2023
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Hi Melissa this is such a soothing poem. Your words flow like a cloth of velvet. I absolutely loved it. You probably know I'm not into religious faith at all, but I loved the imagery and feeling of this beautiful poem. All the best of luck. Ulla xx
Comment Written 28-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2023
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Thank you so much Ulla. I am delighted you liked it and could feel the peacefulness in it. Hugs, my friend.
Melissa
Comment from Jim Wile
This is a wonderful poem which I enjoyed very much. Not only was the message beautifully stated, but I loved the amphibrach meter. I've written many poems with this meter, and never knew its name, amphibrach. Indeed, this is one of my favorite meters especially for humorous poems. It is often used by authors such as Dr. Seuss and Bill Peet in their rhyming children's books because it makes a wonderful, flowing meter that children especially enjoy. Thank you for providing me with the term for it.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2023
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This is a wonderful poem which I enjoyed very much. Not only was the message beautifully stated, but I loved the amphibrach meter. I've written many poems with this meter, and never knew its name, amphibrach. Indeed, this is one of my favorite meters especially for humorous poems. It is often used by authors such as Dr. Seuss and Bill Peet in their rhyming children's books because it makes a wonderful, flowing meter that children especially enjoy. Thank you for providing me with the term for it.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2023
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Hello Jim. Thank you. I love writing verses with this meter too and have several in my Portfolio, but it had been a while since I pulled it out and it was like finding a long lost toy. :). I'm glad you liked it!!
Melissa
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You inspired me to write one of my own, Melissa, which I've just posted. You can find it here: An Amphibrach Sonnet.
Comment from jon hall1
a very nice and relaxed peace it all comes together very well great subject matter i found it very interesting to read it has a nice style of writing to it
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2023
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a very nice and relaxed peace it all comes together very well great subject matter i found it very interesting to read it has a nice style of writing to it
Comment Written 28-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2023
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Hello Jon. Thank you very much!
Melissa
Comment from Raul1
This poem meets the rules for the contest. It is clear and concise. I have enjoyed reading your poetry. It is well written. Well done. Excellent work! No mistakes found. Good luck on the contest!
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2023
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This poem meets the rules for the contest. It is clear and concise. I have enjoyed reading your poetry. It is well written. Well done. Excellent work! No mistakes found. Good luck on the contest!
Comment Written 27-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2023
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Thank you Raul. I really appreciate your wonderful comment.
Melissa
Comment from Aussie
Whilst reading your poem, you showed me your world. It must be glorious by the sea. The sea washes away all our cares. The salt in our hair cleanses our new day. I love the sea, can't get there but thank you for the beautiful day with you. Blessings, Kay xx
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2023
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Whilst reading your poem, you showed me your world. It must be glorious by the sea. The sea washes away all our cares. The salt in our hair cleanses our new day. I love the sea, can't get there but thank you for the beautiful day with you. Blessings, Kay xx
Comment Written 27-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2023
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Hello Kay. Thank you so much for your lovely words and encouragement. I really appreciate it.
Melissa
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You, my friend from far away, are a beautiful soul that I recognise through your writing, Much love for watching the sea with you! Kay XX
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Melissa
Faith can have its ups and downs just like life and the waves. Both the lapping of the waves and reflection of faith can calm you in rocky times.
Keep writing and stay healthy,
Congrats on winning the contest.
Have a great evening.
Joan
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2023
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Hi Melissa
Faith can have its ups and downs just like life and the waves. Both the lapping of the waves and reflection of faith can calm you in rocky times.
Keep writing and stay healthy,
Congrats on winning the contest.
Have a great evening.
Joan
Comment Written 27-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2023
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Hello Joan. Thanks so much. I'm delighted you enjoyed it. :)
Melissa
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No problem, Melissa.
Joan
Comment from mermaids
I just arrived home from observing the ocean near my house, so I can relate to your words. The ocean brings out good feelings in us as expressed by your words. "Releasing the tension from my pent up will" is a perfect line and shows how nature is healing and able to relax us. Your poetic form and use of words take the reader to another place.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2023
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I just arrived home from observing the ocean near my house, so I can relate to your words. The ocean brings out good feelings in us as expressed by your words. "Releasing the tension from my pent up will" is a perfect line and shows how nature is healing and able to relax us. Your poetic form and use of words take the reader to another place.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2023
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Thank you very much! I'm glad you enjoyed this verse!!
Melissa
Comment from lyenochka
How cool that you chose the amphibrach meter! I can see you chose extra long words to accomplish this. This is a soothing poem of awakening and it takes faith to face a new day. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2023
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How cool that you chose the amphibrach meter! I can see you chose extra long words to accomplish this. This is a soothing poem of awakening and it takes faith to face a new day. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 27-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2023
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Thank you very much Helen! I appreciate your kind comments!!
Melissa
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Comment from Mrs. KT
Beautifully rendered, Melissa!
The amphibrach meter is so rhythmical and mirrors the ebb and flow of the sea. I am drawn to the water always...for its healing and meditative powers.
Your last stanza truly resonates with me:
September relaxes in dusky, gold colors
as grasses turn brittle on dunes by the sea,
By faith, I surmise that I also have seasons,
and I must embrace them... for they're part of me.
Thank you for sharing!
Best Wishes!
diane
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2023
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Beautifully rendered, Melissa!
The amphibrach meter is so rhythmical and mirrors the ebb and flow of the sea. I am drawn to the water always...for its healing and meditative powers.
Your last stanza truly resonates with me:
September relaxes in dusky, gold colors
as grasses turn brittle on dunes by the sea,
By faith, I surmise that I also have seasons,
and I must embrace them... for they're part of me.
Thank you for sharing!
Best Wishes!
diane
Comment Written 27-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2023
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Hello Diane, I am so very happy that you liked this verse. I love sitting on the Virginia shoreline and feeling the peacefulness that the waves bring. I know you love shorelines too ~ don't you live on the water? Thank you for your lovely review. Hugs!
Melissa
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Hello Diane, I am so very happy that you liked this verse. I love sitting on the Virginia shoreline and feeling the peacefulness that the waves bring. I know you love shorelines too ~ don't you live on the water? Thank you for your lovely review. Hugs!
Melissa
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Good morning, Melissa!
My husband and I live high on a bluff overlooking East Grand Traverse Bay.
We are pretty much surrounded by woods and water = my happy places.
Just came inside from watering the perennial gardens. Soon it will be time to put the gardens to rest. Such a beautiful but bittersweet time of the year...
Hoping all is well with you and yours!
Our daughter just gave birth on 9/11 to our third grandson: Jude Bowers Tedham weighing in at 9lbs 5oz! What a beautiful bundle of love!
diane
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Congratulations! I am so happy for you! Grandchildren are such a delight. I hope yours live nearby. Our grandgirl, Rosalie, is 1 1/2 hours away, but we do seem to see a lot of her. I love when she comes here. Thanks for sharing your wonderful world in the woods with me :). M
