September By the Sea
Faith poem45 total reviews
Comment from Paul McFarland
Very nicely done, Melissa.
September
Our nation's schools now open up their doors,
And kids lament how short the summer's been.
The farmer now gets ready for more chores -
Preparing for the winter once again.
The nights are cooling down. An early frost
Is possible. We watch the clouds and moon.
We're careful that our crops will not be lost
If Jack decides to visit us too soon.
The birds will start to think of southward flight.
The young ones must be ready to take wing.
But some birds, for the winter, will sit tight.
And hunker down to wait for blush of spring.
The day and night are equal one more time,
The sun is still descending from its climb.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2023
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Very nicely done, Melissa.
September
Our nation's schools now open up their doors,
And kids lament how short the summer's been.
The farmer now gets ready for more chores -
Preparing for the winter once again.
The nights are cooling down. An early frost
Is possible. We watch the clouds and moon.
We're careful that our crops will not be lost
If Jack decides to visit us too soon.
The birds will start to think of southward flight.
The young ones must be ready to take wing.
But some birds, for the winter, will sit tight.
And hunker down to wait for blush of spring.
The day and night are equal one more time,
The sun is still descending from its climb.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2023
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Aaahhh. I love your verse about the changing seasons and the return of a routine to our lives. Thank you for commenting on mine, Paul.
Melissa
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Six stars for adhering to a hard form! I had to go look up amphibrach. This is a well-done entry for faith. I like the lines: God's music of faithfulness beckons to me;
and also: it chases the chill.
and also the concluding couplet. Good luck in that contest!
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2023
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Six stars for adhering to a hard form! I had to go look up amphibrach. This is a well-done entry for faith. I like the lines: God's music of faithfulness beckons to me;
and also: it chases the chill.
and also the concluding couplet. Good luck in that contest!
Comment Written 26-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2023
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Hello Crystie! Thank you so much for your lovely words and comments!!
I really am delighted that you liked it.
Melissa
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This poem is so fresh and pleasing Melissa, I want to bathe in your poem and feel alive. Wonderful rhymes but mainly the metre gives this poem such a superb melody, it has to be a six, a skilful poem from a talented pen Melissa, a joy to read, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2023
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This poem is so fresh and pleasing Melissa, I want to bathe in your poem and feel alive. Wonderful rhymes but mainly the metre gives this poem such a superb melody, it has to be a six, a skilful poem from a talented pen Melissa, a joy to read, love Dolly x
Comment Written 26-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2023
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Thank you so much, Dolly, for your lovely words and comments!!
I really am delighted that you liked it.
Melissa
Comment from Sally Law
And she comes from the sea with another beautiful poem. Virtual six starfish for this one! ****** How lovely and healing to read this.
Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sal xoxo
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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2023
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And she comes from the sea with another beautiful poem. Virtual six starfish for this one! ****** How lovely and healing to read this.
Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sal xoxo
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Comment Written 26-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2023
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Hello Sally! Thank you so much for your lovely words and comments!!
I really am delighted that you liked it.
Melissa
Comment from JSD
A lovely response to the prompt. Never heard of 'amphibrach', you clever person! Your rhyming and rhythm are assured and unforced and this makes for a rather beautiful poem. Well done and good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2023
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A lovely response to the prompt. Never heard of 'amphibrach', you clever person! Your rhyming and rhythm are assured and unforced and this makes for a rather beautiful poem. Well done and good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 26-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2023
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Thank you so much for your lovely words and comments!!
Melissa
