A Particular Friendship
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Another Kind of Training"We meet Lizzy who has just come out of the convent
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Comment from lyenochka
I don't know how I missed this chapter but I knew I missed something when I started on chapter 11. Anyway, I'm just shocked at all the stuff that you were exposed to as a child - raw sewage and BB guns? Ack!
I did like the call to Scruffy with the tune from the "Good, Bad, and Ugly" - that was a memorable melody!
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
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I don't know how I missed this chapter but I knew I missed something when I started on chapter 11. Anyway, I'm just shocked at all the stuff that you were exposed to as a child - raw sewage and BB guns? Ack!
I did like the call to Scruffy with the tune from the "Good, Bad, and Ugly" - that was a memorable melody!
Comment Written 09-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
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Thank you for your involved review. People say that's why I'm so healthy. Never sick. We swam down stream from the TB sanatorium and a little further up, the preventorium for polio. I built up a early resistance.
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. I enjoyed reading about the different periods in Lizzie's life.I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2023
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This is another excellent chapter. I enjoyed reading about the different periods in Lizzie's life.I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2023
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I'm delighted in your review. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Wow, you are such a good writer you really are
. I was engaged from beginning to end or could see the book. I could see the posture I could see the cow. Patty's the cow and the image of you. At the bottom, looking through the water to the surface, very well done!
If I had another six, it would be yours so i'm sending you a virtual six!
I see, no issues with grammar, spelling sentence structure, or punctuation. You have written a fine piece of magic here with a very talented hand drawing on the well of vocabulary. Create this little piece of magic. Thank you for this. I look forward to reading more!
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2023
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Wow, you are such a good writer you really are
. I was engaged from beginning to end or could see the book. I could see the posture I could see the cow. Patty's the cow and the image of you. At the bottom, looking through the water to the surface, very well done!
If I had another six, it would be yours so i'm sending you a virtual six!
I see, no issues with grammar, spelling sentence structure, or punctuation. You have written a fine piece of magic here with a very talented hand drawing on the well of vocabulary. Create this little piece of magic. Thank you for this. I look forward to reading more!
Comment Written 05-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2023
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Just the fact you would give me a 6 on your review is enough just to know. I'm glad you were immersed in the story
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is an enjoyable and vividly expressed little romp through childhood memories. Once again in your lovely stories, your thoughts and sensations are triggered through your deep bond with animals, in this case Scruffles. You paint truly memorable little scenes with your excellent craft. Thanks for sharing, Debbie
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2023
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This is an enjoyable and vividly expressed little romp through childhood memories. Once again in your lovely stories, your thoughts and sensations are triggered through your deep bond with animals, in this case Scruffles. You paint truly memorable little scenes with your excellent craft. Thanks for sharing, Debbie
Comment Written 05-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2023
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Thank you for your enjoyable review. I'm glad it delighted you
Comment from aryr
Lizzy made a decision, she needed to get Scruffles changed from Scruffy, Liz. She began training him. Now I wonder why she insisted that her mother bought rubber boots for everything related to the brook. Then their was the terrible time she knocked Timmy from the balcony three feet below. This played into Teddy firing off his BB gun while chasing Lizzy. Great job. Blessings n Hugs!!!
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Lizzy made a decision, she needed to get Scruffles changed from Scruffy, Liz. She began training him. Now I wonder why she insisted that her mother bought rubber boots for everything related to the brook. Then their was the terrible time she knocked Timmy from the balcony three feet below. This played into Teddy firing off his BB gun while chasing Lizzy. Great job. Blessings n Hugs!!!
Comment Written 30-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it. It's fun to remember these times.
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Most welcome, as always, Liz.
Comment from BethShelby
I enjoyed reading this post. I've never hear of anyone putting a Maine Coon Cat on a leash to train him and I wasn't aware that any kind of cats liked water. It was fun learning what your early life and friends were like. I was surprised someone trained in the Catholic theology felt the had a past life. At least, I didn't think they belived in that. You have repeated the paragraph below.
As his familiarity with the woods grew, so did his sense of adventure. He no longer needed coaxing to explore. In fact, he was going farther beyond the swampy areas than Lizzy cared to attempt.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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I enjoyed reading this post. I've never hear of anyone putting a Maine Coon Cat on a leash to train him and I wasn't aware that any kind of cats liked water. It was fun learning what your early life and friends were like. I was surprised someone trained in the Catholic theology felt the had a past life. At least, I didn't think they belived in that. You have repeated the paragraph below.
As his familiarity with the woods grew, so did his sense of adventure. He no longer needed coaxing to explore. In fact, he was going farther beyond the swampy areas than Lizzy cared to attempt.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Thank you for your involved review. Some of the Sisters in hushed tones expressed belief in past lives, but it was not a spoken of. I have reshaped most of my beliefs over the years. It seems memories or connectio s are most intense with children up to about age 5 and I guess as we head toward the other end of our life. It was very clear in my book The Tor when my friend & I had weird experiences as we drove toward the Glastonbury Tor. My friend who knew about past lives, said, "We were here." That answered many questions for me. That's why I added the fiction of transporting into the 16th century in my book. But the rest of the travels in England was very accurate
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I really like the story and enjoyed reading. Just check a few things.
"Having lived there for three years, it was a little weird to be going back on the property. (a little weird going back on .... it's simpler)
As his familiarity with the woods grew, so did his sense of adventure. He no longer needed coaxing to explore. In fact, he was going farther beyond the swampy areas than Lizzy cared to attempt. (repeated twice, delete one of them)
"When we saw that gross sight, we all yelled, someone just flushed in Timmy's house." (don't really need any quotation marks, this is pretty much narrative, but if you really want to use them only "Someone just flushed in Timmy's house." would be in quotation marks. You might want to review the rules of writing dialogue)
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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I really like the story and enjoyed reading. Just check a few things.
"Having lived there for three years, it was a little weird to be going back on the property. (a little weird going back on .... it's simpler)
As his familiarity with the woods grew, so did his sense of adventure. He no longer needed coaxing to explore. In fact, he was going farther beyond the swampy areas than Lizzy cared to attempt. (repeated twice, delete one of them)
"When we saw that gross sight, we all yelled, someone just flushed in Timmy's house." (don't really need any quotation marks, this is pretty much narrative, but if you really want to use them only "Someone just flushed in Timmy's house." would be in quotation marks. You might want to review the rules of writing dialogue)
Comment Written 30-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Thank you for your helpful review. I appreciate this.
Comment from JSD
Your seventh paragraph is repeated. I don't think that was intentional? Otherwise this is a sweet and intriguing little story, engaging and interesting. Thanks for sharing it.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Your seventh paragraph is repeated. I don't think that was intentional? Otherwise this is a sweet and intriguing little story, engaging and interesting. Thanks for sharing it.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Thank you for your alert review. That was not intentional. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Interesting, but the zigzag of the story is confusing to me personally. The story bits are all nice, and I know that this is how a lot of us think in our heads, in a story maybe not so good an idea. And your paragraph starting with "As his familiarity of the woods....... this was repeated in your story. Sorry to rain on your parade. These are structure edits. Your story is good.
Karen
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Interesting, but the zigzag of the story is confusing to me personally. The story bits are all nice, and I know that this is how a lot of us think in our heads, in a story maybe not so good an idea. And your paragraph starting with "As his familiarity of the woods....... this was repeated in your story. Sorry to rain on your parade. These are structure edits. Your story is good.
Karen
Comment Written 30-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Thank you for your alert review.
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I imagine that the other folks might have thought that the word "beat" meant something to you. Like you loved music or something. Or, they could be dimwits, hahahaha. Also, some folks read at a story, without reading the story. Karen
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I made a boo boo here. The word "beat" applied to another story by somemone else.
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I do that stuff too often...bwaaa
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Yes, our super high intelligence, can go on the the blink sometimes, just like the regular folk!hahahaha Karen
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you make me laugh...ha... ha... ha
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Well, I do what I can. I have been a writing fool lately. Karen
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
The way you tell the story about training your cat is interesting. The second part about fun in the creek was familiar as we had a creek at grandma's house. The water in yours sounds disgusting (sewage and broken glass!). The water in ours was whatever the animal feed factory flushed into the creek. Only one word needs changed (drowned)
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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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The way you tell the story about training your cat is interesting. The second part about fun in the creek was familiar as we had a creek at grandma's house. The water in yours sounds disgusting (sewage and broken glass!). The water in ours was whatever the animal feed factory flushed into the creek. Only one word needs changed (drowned)
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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So cool. You know about swimmimg ing the creek. Nothing like it...lol. Peoplesaw thats why I'm so healthy. In another spot we swam downstream from the TB sanitorium & a little further up was the preventorium for polio children.
