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Eve Before Dawn

Haiku Club Event - Holiday Haiku

9 total reviews 
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Ohhh I love this one. Perfect dawn, light, and mountains imagery.

Good syllables count and connection between lines.

Wonderful presentation.

Well done. Thank you for participating in the club.

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2023

reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
    I love the club and look forward to the events each week.

    Thanks for the great review and six stars.
    Your validation means a lot.
Comment from Ginda Simpson
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The image you have captured with your words embodies that hope that is renewed each New Year's Eve. We are blessed with the awareness that we can begin afresh, and that is a gift that keeps repeating each day throughout the year. Lovely Haiku.

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2023

reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
    Thank you.
Comment from Daylily
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The soothing tone of your three lines create a peaceful feeling that becomes a blessing at the end of a busy day. It is always a positive thing to be able to wind down. Thank you for sharing your talent.

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2023

reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
    Thank you for taking the time to read my haiku and leave this insightful review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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There is nothing quite like the birth of the morning sun, even on a winters day and you brought the experience to life here with your magical words for the Haiku club, much enjoyed, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2023

reply by the author on 01-Oct-2023
    Thank you, Dolly.
Comment from Bill Schott
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This haiku, Eve Before Dawn, presented with a 4-7-4 formatting, creates a scene of blossoming beauty as the sun's rays stretch out over the horizon to become morning. Nice.

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2023

reply by the author on 01-Oct-2023
    Thank you.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
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A beautiful reminder of just how magnificent our world is. There is little as awe inspiring as mountains, and add snow and light and you have the poem and artwork you shared with us.

Take care,
Rhonda

 Comment Written 30-Sep-2023

reply by the author on 01-Oct-2023
    Thank you, Rhoda.
Comment from pome lover
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That is a lovely poem - Haiku - and a lovely thought about a fresh start in the New Year. Also a beautiful picture. It reminds me of Colorado. I lived
there for 9 years in the mountains, and it was beautiful, but long winters. Summers were divinely cool.
Katharine

 Comment Written 30-Sep-2023

reply by the author on 01-Oct-2023
    Thank you for taking the time to read and review my verse.
    Colorado is beautiful.
Comment from karenina
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New Year's Eve! Well, aren't you smart for selecting such a clean and snow-white fresh "beginning!" I'm always stumbling back to third grade when "traditional" haiku were drilled into us as 5-7-5. (Laughing here)--

This 4-7-4 is extremely well presented. Love the all lower case option as well!

Super job!

Karenina

 Comment Written 30-Sep-2023

reply by the author on 01-Oct-2023
    Laughing?

    you reminded me of doing haiku in third grade as well, yikes !!
    Who would have thought at 54, I would actually be writing it.

    The format is always lowercase, which I enjoy using in general, I try not to think of syllable count, I think it?s helping me.

    Thanks for the review, K.

    Enjoy your Saturday evening or what?s left of it:)

reply by karenina on 01-Oct-2023
    In order to write Japanese forms I have to "shake off" all the grade school lessons! Basho said to learn the rules, then break them!

    (I did not realize every haiku is in all lower case!)

    Still learning!
Comment from Carol Clark2
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I like the 'eve becomes dawn' for New Year's Eve. Nice way to express the beginning of a new year. Suggestion: either make 'mountain' plural, or use 'glistens' to keep subject and predicate agreement. Thanks for sharing. Blessings. Carol

 Comment Written 30-Sep-2023

reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
    Thank you for the review and catching my typo...
    'mountains.'

    Enjoy your evening, Carol.
reply by Carol Clark2 on 01-Oct-2023
    You, too. I hope you have a great week.