Me it is not
The balance between understanding and the world never change2 total reviews
Comment from JSD
I feel this is excellent until the last line. I love the idea of the first four lines but then the fifth suggest that this is not you. But surely it is you, and that's the point. Sorry if I'm reading this wrong. Just my opinion. Good luck in the vote anyway.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
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I feel this is excellent until the last line. I love the idea of the first four lines but then the fifth suggest that this is not you. But surely it is you, and that's the point. Sorry if I'm reading this wrong. Just my opinion. Good luck in the vote anyway.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
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Thank you for your review, the last line is meant to say that I don?t believe it?s me that is lost, it is the world that is lost.
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ok
Comment from Lynar
I enjoyed how you saw yourself younger (as a boy)
in reflection in later life in the world, not having a
real place. Or was it the world was troubled.
You take your stand, it is not the world. Your ability to
understand throuh maturation. A very thought provoking
Tanka. No negative comments. Exceptional
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
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I enjoyed how you saw yourself younger (as a boy)
in reflection in later life in the world, not having a
real place. Or was it the world was troubled.
You take your stand, it is not the world. Your ability to
understand throuh maturation. A very thought provoking
Tanka. No negative comments. Exceptional
Comment Written 02-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
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Thank you for your review and your rating, it is much appreciated. I?m glad you liked the poem.
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It did put the mind to work. Enjoyable.
You are welcome.
