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Comment from royowen
Oh yes, there is a propensity to call a spade a heart these days, and what was considered naughty once is now acceptable, but I suspect this was very much tongue in cheek, beautifully written Mia, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2023
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Oh yes, there is a propensity to call a spade a heart these days, and what was considered naughty once is now acceptable, but I suspect this was very much tongue in cheek, beautifully written Mia, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 11-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2023
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Thank you
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Blessings Roy
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Ooooooo. How macabre is this? A spooky and sinister poem wow gave me Goose bumps that's a good poem!
" My finger plays with the tip of the blade" ouch! Scary! You have achieved the response I think you want it so having said that. I see, you know, it's with grammar. Spelling sentence structure, subject matter, or esthetics. You've got a great picture thebest of luck to you. I hope you have a great day!
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2023
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Ooooooo. How macabre is this? A spooky and sinister poem wow gave me Goose bumps that's a good poem!
" My finger plays with the tip of the blade" ouch! Scary! You have achieved the response I think you want it so having said that. I see, you know, it's with grammar. Spelling sentence structure, subject matter, or esthetics. You've got a great picture thebest of luck to you. I hope you have a great day!
Comment Written 10-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2023
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I am thrilled that this poem hit you in that manner. I was a little unsure when I was done, but am glad to hear that it is sinister.
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Yeah, gave me some chills a definitely spooky for a short and very, very suspense filled, that's it
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This sounds scary and being tempted by someone who could kill us is a frightening thought, we take our chances and sometimes lose our life for it, a fine post for the contes, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2023
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This sounds scary and being tempted by someone who could kill us is a frightening thought, we take our chances and sometimes lose our life for it, a fine post for the contes, love Dolly x
Comment Written 10-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2023
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Thank you
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Temptation Temptation, works on two levels, I guess. One would be the relatable one, where one might plan on an affair; while another would be a murder, to scratch an itch of a different kind.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2023
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This poem, Temptation Temptation, works on two levels, I guess. One would be the relatable one, where one might plan on an affair; while another would be a murder, to scratch an itch of a different kind.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2023
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Glad to hear that brings up different levels of creepy
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
there is a very sly and deviant nature to this piece. I really like it, different from the usual fare for this kind of thing. the inner monologue works very well indeed.
Affecting
best of luck to you.
GMG
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2023
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Hi there,
there is a very sly and deviant nature to this piece. I really like it, different from the usual fare for this kind of thing. the inner monologue works very well indeed.
Affecting
best of luck to you.
GMG
Comment Written 10-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2023
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Thank you