Phantom Moon
Mood of the moon41 total reviews
Comment from Jessica Wheeler
Stunning write, from two amazing poets. The wording used is brilliant and adds to the overall tone. Wonderful imagery!! It's creative and vivid.
Truly enjoyed!
Xo
Jess
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2023
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Stunning write, from two amazing poets. The wording used is brilliant and adds to the overall tone. Wonderful imagery!! It's creative and vivid.
Truly enjoyed!
Xo
Jess
Comment Written 23-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2023
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Hi, Jess! We want to thank you so much for the six stars and inspiring words. You are a talented poet and I want you to know I'm a huge fan of your work! Thank you again, Jess
Comment from rspoet
Hello John and Karenina,
Marvelous imagery in this homage to the phantom moon
her reflected light is indeed a two-faced coin of the gods.
Light and dark, warm and cold, seen and unseen,
a perfect foil for imagination.
"resolve falls like stars" and perhaps also rises.
Well done.
Luna is smiling.
Best wisshes.
Robert
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Hello John and Karenina,
Marvelous imagery in this homage to the phantom moon
her reflected light is indeed a two-faced coin of the gods.
Light and dark, warm and cold, seen and unseen,
a perfect foil for imagination.
"resolve falls like stars" and perhaps also rises.
Well done.
Luna is smiling.
Best wisshes.
Robert
Comment Written 21-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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We want to thank you for your generous stars and inspiring words. We had a blast writing this, Robert. It's always an honor to hear from you. You're a master!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork and presentation.
-The notes are appreciated.
-The comments are for both of you.
-A well written poem with effective imagery.
-There is a reflective mood, appropriate
for the "precocious moon," along with the color imagery.
-The second verse reads like a tanka.
-Very good personification of resolve and I
also like "a two-faced coin of the gods."
-A very good concluding verse.
-Very well done!
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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-Very nice artwork and presentation.
-The notes are appreciated.
-The comments are for both of you.
-A well written poem with effective imagery.
-There is a reflective mood, appropriate
for the "precocious moon," along with the color imagery.
-The second verse reads like a tanka.
-Very good personification of resolve and I
also like "a two-faced coin of the gods."
-A very good concluding verse.
-Very well done!
Comment Written 21-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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We thank you, Pam, for the great review and kind words. It's always great to hear from you!
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You are very welcome. The reply is appreciated.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Simply lovely, John, and Karenina. I can imagine your pleasure at having her work with you on this masterpiece. It truly is lovely, my friend you have both created something so special, and I wish I had a six for you. Well done!! :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Simply lovely, John, and Karenina. I can imagine your pleasure at having her work with you on this masterpiece. It truly is lovely, my friend you have both created something so special, and I wish I had a six for you. Well done!! :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 21-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Sandra, thank you, for the great review! As you know she's a gem! polished in every way! It was so much fun and a pleasure to work with her. Thanks again, my friend. You are also one of my heroines!
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Aw, thank you! Would you like to write a novel with me?? 😊😊🥰
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Is that a legit offer? I'm honored at the notion, but you'd have to take me under your wing! My muse is wide open!
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Why not! I have to finish the one I'm working on first, but it would be fun to do it. Let's get this year out, and then we'll chat. You can think of some ideas, and I will, too. I've never done this before so it will be good for both of us.
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I'm in!!
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Good. It'll be a challenge for both of us. :)) Something to look forward to. 😊xx
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For certain! :) If I fire up the muse now, I should be ready by year's end. Sorry, I divorced my writing optimism about twenty years ago. Your offer makes me realize how much I miss not having to question my abilities! Truly, Sandra, I'm honored and terrified! But I'm all in! LOL. Hugs
Comment from Richard Montfort Cary
John and Karenina,
This poem utterly takes my breath away. Extraordinary images, too many to single out, but I do particularly like
"...One infinitesimal stutter step
to leap into the darkness...
fall through the canvas...."
and
"...fate teeters on the edge
of dawn...."
John, you are one lucky guy to share such beauty with Karenina, and visa versa!!!
Thank you, both!!! Congratulations!!!
Richard
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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John and Karenina,
This poem utterly takes my breath away. Extraordinary images, too many to single out, but I do particularly like
"...One infinitesimal stutter step
to leap into the darkness...
fall through the canvas...."
and
"...fate teeters on the edge
of dawn...."
John, you are one lucky guy to share such beauty with Karenina, and visa versa!!!
Thank you, both!!! Congratulations!!!
Richard
Comment Written 21-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Richard! We want to thank you for this great review and of course for the six stars. It all means so much coming from you!
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YES!!!
Comment from Jacob1395
There is some really nice imagery in this poem. I particularly liked "It--a two-faced coin of the gods, fervently tossed from the pinnacle of darkness." This created such a strong image in my mind and also "Woeful shadows bisect the sky-- silhouettes against a pale orb..." Your writing definitely makes the moon feel like a mythical object. I really enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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There is some really nice imagery in this poem. I particularly liked "It--a two-faced coin of the gods, fervently tossed from the pinnacle of darkness." This created such a strong image in my mind and also "Woeful shadows bisect the sky-- silhouettes against a pale orb..." Your writing definitely makes the moon feel like a mythical object. I really enjoyed it.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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We thank you, Jacob, for the kind words a generous stars.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Hi John, this is a beautiful collaborative poem. It's an exciting adventure making poetry together. It helps both writers grow.
This poem is perfection through and through. To say it deserves a six is to understate its value.
Thanks for sharing, you and precious Karenina!
Take care,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Hi John, this is a beautiful collaborative poem. It's an exciting adventure making poetry together. It helps both writers grow.
This poem is perfection through and through. To say it deserves a six is to understate its value.
Thanks for sharing, you and precious Karenina!
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment Written 20-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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We thank you, Rhonda, for your heartfelt words and praise. We enjoyed writing this together. It was truly a growing experience for me.
Comment from Wendyanne
Wow this well written poem is bursting at the seams with some stunning examples of vivid imagery. There are too many to choose from but I particularly like, "grind the clicking arrow against its weathered sphere" Excellent!
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Wow this well written poem is bursting at the seams with some stunning examples of vivid imagery. There are too many to choose from but I particularly like, "grind the clicking arrow against its weathered sphere" Excellent!
Comment Written 20-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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We thank you Wendyann, for the great review and kind words.
Comment from Wendy G
This poem is filled with lyrical and beautiful imagery and thoughts - but I don't understand all of it. I get it enough to appreciate its beauty and strength. How wonderful to do a composite piece with Karenina. Her writing is always fantastic and very thoughtful and original. Your collaboration is seamless - and perhaps that is actually harder to do than write one's own piece. Well done, both of you!!
Wendy
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2023
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This poem is filled with lyrical and beautiful imagery and thoughts - but I don't understand all of it. I get it enough to appreciate its beauty and strength. How wonderful to do a composite piece with Karenina. Her writing is always fantastic and very thoughtful and original. Your collaboration is seamless - and perhaps that is actually harder to do than write one's own piece. Well done, both of you!!
Wendy
Comment Written 20-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2023
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We want to thank you, Wendy, for the great review. Yes, Karenina is one of my poetic heroes, for sure! I enjoyed working with her. Thanks again.
Comment from BenThrone
I love this. The language in this poem--and the series of images it creates--is magnificent. There are so many turns of phrase I admire here: "chiffonade the nearing twilight" and "grasp its fevered shank" in particular stand out in this altogether stand-out poem. Excellent teamwork! One small editorial suggestion: I'm not sure I'm sold on ending a line with "from" and am wondering why the line breaks there. But I am also reading this on my phone so perhaps it isn't displaying properly.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2023
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I love this. The language in this poem--and the series of images it creates--is magnificent. There are so many turns of phrase I admire here: "chiffonade the nearing twilight" and "grasp its fevered shank" in particular stand out in this altogether stand-out poem. Excellent teamwork! One small editorial suggestion: I'm not sure I'm sold on ending a line with "from" and am wondering why the line breaks there. But I am also reading this on my phone so perhaps it isn't displaying properly.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2023
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We want to thank you, Ben, for the great review and your six stars.
It must be the way it's presented on your phone, Ben.
Thank you again, for the six! We're happy you enjoyed it!
